To Be A River

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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I have kept still like a stone, a tree, a dirt road, quiet and stoic yet I am wishing to gurgle and dance and oh, to be a river

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Sotto Poet

Date: 1/29/2024 9:48:00 AM

Your skill in crafting a well-written Haiku, utilizing impressive vocabulary and vivid imagery, is truly admirable, dear Sara. The seamless intertwining of the two expressions conveys a profound and unspoken longing, effectively articulated.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/29/2024 5:47:00 PM

dearest Sotto--you have a most kind and generous heart! Thank you for your encouraging comments...they mean a great deal to me...your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/29/2024 1:54:00 AM

I love rivers which I admired in my travels. No rivers really in Malta. We miss a lot.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/29/2024 4:11:00 AM

I love rivers, too...something about watching the flow of the water as it travels. Didn't realize Malta had no rivers... :-( have a pleasant day, Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 1/29/2024 1:00:00 AM

Ah this resonates so much and i can feel the longing to be free, like a river flowing so seamlessly! Ah the way you express is beyond amazing and the similes used here is truly moving. I love how youv said “ i have kept still like a stone” ah that hits home for me “ a tree” ive always felt that way, sometimes, due to circumstances, we feel stuck… what a meaningful write this is! And picture goes so well with your soulful words woven meticulously too, pleasure always reading your work.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/29/2024 4:13:00 AM

thank you, dearest Ink, for your visit and for sharing your thoughts. I'm grateful you found the similes moving and that the poem resonated with you. What better compliment for a writer? Thank you...wishing you a pleasant Monday, hugs, Sara

Mat Ignacio

Date: 1/28/2024 9:19:00 PM

a delicate weaving of the two expressions hinting at a deeper yearning - well said

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/29/2024 4:13:00 AM

thank you for those mindful words. Grateful. Have a pleasant Monday, Sara

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/28/2024 8:18:00 PM

Such a happy thought. I loved this Haiku

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 1/29/2024 4:14:00 AM

thank you, Hilda....grateful you liked this Haiku...wishing you a splendid day, hugs, Sara