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Jan.12.2024
Titanic- Fare Thee Well Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Tom Woody

 

On a fine April day, set out in the great cruise ship, Titanic, Into the pelagic waters of Atlantic, with the weather alluringly sweet. Plush it was with beaming fellow travelers and amenities astounding. A journey of great excitement under a star-studded sky at night. With the crew so hospitable, there was overwhelming warmth and conviviality. Wine and liquor flowed down through gullets; tasty cuisines were served. On the deck couples and lovers waltzed, a sweet breeze kissing their cheeks. But tragedy loomed large in the form of an iceberg, unobserved. I sat away from the crowd enjoying the rising gaiety. What was the deafening sound I heard from near? With a violent shake, the huge leviathan turned to one side. Hardly knew what was happening, but sensed death was not far. Hit hard n' ripped into two pieces, the vessel began sinking into the waters. Amid euphonic melody and revelry, some didn’t know what was happening. Some in panic ran helter skelter with growls and groans renting the air. A man gave away his lifeboat to a mother and child, his own life abandoning. It was a moment I witnessed the beauty of selfless love. I was inspired to give away my lifeboat that I secured by chance. A divine spark hit me, and all anxieties vanished instantly. Sudden was the transmutation, I saw the whole scene in a new stance. Heaven’s fire was lit in my breast and in love, my spirit began to glow, How great it is to give life to someone who needed it more. I heard the angel’s voices flit, saw a new door opening wide. Had a fleeting vision of the heavenly hall with aureate roof and glazed floor. I knew all my agony depart and hope instantly sparking. With God on my side, I felt sinking into the icy depth, My mind was calm with an unusual courage filling my every nerve, And my horizon growing bigger and enlarging into uncommon width. My inaudible parting words were “Goodbye Titanic, fare thee well, In the oceanic depths, you stay as a symbol of world’s fleeting glory, Making men think that fate can shatter and pulverize human hubris. In the sunless Atlantic lair, lie down ageless to tell your allegorical story"!

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Date: 1/17/2024 6:13:00 AM
Such an awesome entry Valsa. A top ten poems for sure. Sorry I only did five placements but appreciate the support and your gracing us with this gem
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Valsa George
Date: 1/22/2024 5:43:00 AM
Thank you so much dear Tom for this acknowledgement. Sorry for the late response. As host, I have to tend to an extended family's needs for the time being and passing through a very hectic time.
Date: 1/14/2024 11:49:00 AM
I like how you fit the “Titanic Fare Thee Well.” Into the piece. Excellent imagery and a pleasure to read. Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 1/13/2024 1:49:00 PM
What a sad story that history records - the sinking of the titanic, and what a heartfelt take you wrote this story from. Giving up ones own life for some that needed it more , wow. Good luck in the contest dear Valsa. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 1/13/2024 2:23:00 AM
You expound the pain of the majority that died that fatal day. How well you expressed emotions and imagery. Best for a win.
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Date: 1/13/2024 12:03:00 AM
Gosh, dear Valsa, what a most profound and poignant poem this is, enriched with soulful depth and myriad shades of empathy.. Sacrificing our lives for another's sake, especially whom we don't know, in such situations, yet their presence seem more important to us, sigh... That really takes strong courage and a huge aura of humanity.. You've described in a spectacular way, how the amazing aura of Titanic, turned into an irreversible time of misery, where loss and pain were the only destined future
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 1/13/2024 12:06:00 AM
Sigh.. Such evocatively you've phrased those vulnerabilities of sinking into an unseen abyss, forever, succumbing to a place where everything becomes a 'forlorn' truth.. Yet, God's embrace becomes our eternal peace.. I really love the ending, dear poetess.. This poem touched my heart and it's really conveying the story in an exceptionally emotive way.. With incredible flow too! Your poetic prowess shines bright! Best of luck for the contest~
Date: 1/12/2024 10:43:00 PM
Wow this ought to win. Very creative
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/12/2024 10:45:00 PM
Sorry it was not going through until the third try and I can't figure out on cell phone how to delete the extra comments. I give this one a fave
Date: 1/12/2024 10:43:00 PM
Wow this ought to win. Very creative
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Date: 1/12/2024 10:42:00 PM
Wow this ought to win. Very creative
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Date: 1/12/2024 10:45:00 AM
our poem skilfully recounts the fateful journey of the Titanic, juxtaposing the initial excitement and opulence with the looming tragedy. The detailed description of the cruise ship, the star-studded night, and the convivial atmosphere sets a rich backdrop for the unfolding events... The concluding lines, bidding farewell to the Titanic and reflecting on its symbolic significance, are both poetic and thought-provoking. The imagery of the sunless Atlantic lair and the Titanic
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Silent One
Date: 1/12/2024 10:45:00 AM
becoming a symbol of fleeting glory and shattered human hubris adds depth and resonance to the overall narrative... Best of luck in the contest..
Date: 1/12/2024 10:38:00 AM
Realistic story of sinking Titanic. Love your spirit of saving other's life at your expense. Vivid imagery. Well done.
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:20:00 AM
You captured the terryfying experience of the sinking titanic well Valsa. A thousand thoughts would rush through your mind as an inevitable death crept up on you. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Date: 1/12/2024 6:55:00 AM
Dear Valsa your poem is about the selfless love and sacrifice witnessed during the sinking of the Titanic. The subject revolves around the tragic events that took place on the ship, highlighting the acts of bravery and compassion in the face of disaster. The diction of the poem is formal and descriptive, using vivid imagery to depict the luxurious setting of the Titanic and the chaos that ensued when it hit the iceberg. ("Heaven’s fire was lit in my breast"), is great. BOL with the contest
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Date: 1/11/2024 9:23:00 PM
Wow its like you really are there, in that situation, you are truly such a talented soul, your storytelling is exquisite and so vivid and leaves us readers in awe inspired and intrigued to read more till the end! Thats what a brilliant storyteller does, and i keep saying this, but definitely is the truth, this is one of the best ive read for this contest and i love how you’ve finished the story too, the ending is soulful and deeply moving! Titanic,now i feel like watching the movie again. BOL!
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