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For Ink empress' Time poetry contest..

 

“A lover asked his beloved, Do you love yourself more than you love me? Beloved replied, I have died to myself and I live for you. I've disappeared from myself and my attributes, I am present only for you. I've forgotten all my learnings, but from knowing you I've become a scholar. I've lost all my strength, but from your power I am able. I love myself...I love you. I love you...I love myself.” Rumi. When you cry, I wish I was those tears, rolling down your cheeks, dripping upon your strawberry lips. I yearn to reflect like rainbow dust, so you mirror like a confetti mosaic. But in the duration of distance, I walk barefoot upon a path of dead roses, whose thorns are covered in crimson drops. In between the phases of pearls and eternal embers in our sky, I cannot sleep when you remain awake. Afraid the moon will steal our dreams. Time is an impatient muse, but my adoration is timeless. If only we could pause and move in slow motion. With the humility of Rumi. My words are a colourless chore, my mind a moth-eaten blank canvas, but when you appear before me - I'm a poetic waterfall of ivory ink. In periwinkle petal phases of personification, place my choral carnation blossoms in chronological chapters - inside the personal memoirs of your porcelain soul. We are fragile figments, but our serenade is not a fable, so I keep writing orphic poems, portraying your innocence and honesty through an opulent sonnet, reflecting your moonlight majesty. Revealing desires of an enkindled heart. If prose is too simple, I'll create you a mausoleum of metaphors, so when silence suppresses my speech, my arrows of alliteration will protect you until your last verse. Before my last breath, I may not create a perfect masterpiece. So I wonder if my words will be worthy or will you forget me like the others who wrote before me? In your analogies of abandonment, I am a pristine scarf in your suitcase. When I surrender to time, will you wrap me around your skin, until the end?

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Date: 3/9/2024 6:34:00 PM
A masterpiece, Silent One. Your words and brushstrokes of poetry, paint in beautiful breathtaking majesty as the poetry of the master poet, Rumi. The opening quote of Rumi's poetry flows smoothly into your own poetry, my friend. You share a gift of poetry with the greats before you. Your words and images resonate so deeply with my own desires to lose myself in my Love of others. To live on beyond death through the lives of others is my calling. I strive to be pleasing in the eyes of God.
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Bill Baker
Date: 3/9/2024 6:38:00 PM
To be a tool in the hands of the Creator of all that is, that was, or that will ever be and to live a life that more than just to be. Your words inspire me as do the many poems I've read by Rumi. You and your poetry have been blessings along the path I travel on my way back to the Source of my creation. It seems mute, but this is for my FAV list as the many other poems you have shared with us. Congratulations on your contest win, my friend. Bill
Date: 3/8/2024 9:47:00 PM
So many lovely lines like “With the humility of Rumi. My words are a colourless chore, my mind a moth-eaten blank canvas, but when you appear before me - I'm a poetic waterfall of ivory ink.” Have you books published? I would love to read them! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 3/8/2024 7:31:00 PM
Powerful write, my friend. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 3/8/2024 9:55:00 AM
Dear silent one, where do i start? I am speechless, and i agree with the comments below, this is one of the best ever poems written by you, but i always say this and then you surprise me with another poem that is just impeccable! Powerful and so creative! Timeless adoration, one that we all wish for, and hope to receive. Love like that is rare. And made me tear up, especially that line about “ i yearn to reflect like rainbow dust” gosh! Sigh! “ confetti mosaic” “ i walk upon a path of dead roses
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/8/2024 10:03:00 AM
“ I read this to my son too, when judging and he loved it too! So I wonder if my words will be worthy or will you forget me like the others who wrote before me?” Well your words are unforgettable and timeless! Leaves an impression everlasting! Fave it is! Congratulations!
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Date: 3/8/2024 10:02:00 AM
How do you come up with such lines? Seriously! I have nothing left to say but just sigh! As im inspired and touched, truly! “ I cannot sleep when you remain awake. Afraid the moon will steal our dreams.” Those lines are so lyrical! Like a beautiful chorus i would play on repeat! So touching and soulfully moving! Really the kind of line i would want to write too, so good! “ my mind a moth-eaten blank canvas, but when you appear before me - I'm a poetic waterfall of ivory ink.” Awwn that is so sweet! Such a timeless muse!
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Date: 3/8/2024 10:02:00 AM
“ portraying your innocence and honesty through an opulent sonnet, reflecting your moonlight majesty.” i just love everything about those lines! How lucky is this moonlight majesty! It isnt just the emotions, also your use of poetic techniques and flow of your poem without repetitive words that makes your poem sumptuous! You took the prompt and owned it like a king of poetry! As well! You are poetry! “ If prose is too simple, I'll create you a mausoleum of metaphors, so when silence suppresses my speech, my arrows of alliteration will protect you until your last verse.“ gosh! Im literally in tears! Just love that!!! So good! I had to quote every word here as it touched me so deeply! But from all the lines i must say your opening lines were the best” i wish to be the tears” awwn!
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Date: 3/8/2024 9:57:00 AM
How do you come up with such lines? Seriously! I have nothing left to say but just sigh! As im inspired and touched, truly! “ I cannot sleep when you remain awake. Afraid the moon will steal our dreams.” Those lines are so lyrical! Like a beautiful chorus i would play on repeat! So touching and soulfully moving! Really the kind of line i would want to write too, so good! “ my mind a moth-eaten blank canvas, but when you appear before me - I'm a poetic waterfall of ivory ink.” Awwn that is so sweet! Such a timeless muse!
Date: 3/7/2024 3:35:00 PM
I like the quote that you used from Rumi. Creative lines you have penned with this one. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us. Sara K
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Date: 3/7/2024 1:46:00 PM
SO, such a melancholy poem you create. It explores the meaning of the duration and passage of a relationship with all kinds of great questions asked.
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Date: 3/7/2024 8:29:00 AM
I have always wondered if in your absolutely unsurpassable magnetic poetry, you find the solace, peace, love, moonlight magic and day dreams that you would like to last forever. This one certainly feels like you do. Poetry for me allows me to enter through a portal of all of that. Your poem is magic, for like a dream catcher it echoes wonderful emotions past, present and future .You are a tender poet who writes Masterfully. hugs and blessings my dear friend .
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Date: 3/7/2024 2:19:00 AM
I agree with Sara, this is a Masterpiece. One of your best i would say. Good luck in the contest, not you'd be needing any of course, S1. Hugs and a fave
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Date: 3/6/2024 4:47:00 PM
a masterpiece, Silent One! I liked how you wove together love and time with such outstanding imagery. I liked your metaphors, especially this one: Time is an inpatient muse. Your poem has it all--metaphor, alliteration, imagery all of which you used masterfully. Best wishes with the contest, enjoy your evening, Sara
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Date: 3/6/2024 4:14:00 PM
Such a beautiful wisdom to live for someone else, to be a grace to everyone you meet. But to have that special one that you caretake and see through. There are no words for that. This is a great stand in, in their absence.
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Date: 3/6/2024 2:56:00 PM
"I have died to myself and I live for you." Wow, immortal! And biblical! "I walk barefoot upon a path of dead roses, whose thorns are covered in crimson drops." Outstanding imagery! "I am a pristine scarf in your suitcase. When I surrender to time, will you wrap me around your skin," wonderful, endearing ending. Bravo! until the end?
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Date: 3/6/2024 2:27:00 PM
An eloquent exploration of the concept of time with poetic and intricate descriptions. The imagery of pearls and eternal embers in the sky creates a captivating atmosphere, evoking a sense of fear and longing. The use of metaphors throughout the piece adds depth and resonance, showcasing the writer's skill in crafting vivid and emotive language. Overall, a beautifully written piece that delves into themes of emotion, beauty, and sensuality.
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Date: 3/6/2024 2:16:00 PM
A romantic take on the theme of time, SO. Elegant descriptions throughout ---In between the phases of pearls and eternal embers in our sky, I cannot sleep when you remain awake Afraid the moon will steal our dream---and so much more resonating in metaphors. Excellent, as always.
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Date: 3/6/2024 12:40:00 PM
- What a lovely poem, S.O. - "If only I could pause" and read it over and over without time passing :) - GL in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 3/6/2024 12:26:00 PM
A lovely write, Silent! Love the wordmithing and metaphors! That first verse draws us into the emotion, compassion, beauty and sensuousness. A fave.
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Date: 3/6/2024 12:05:00 PM
Dear SO, I always feel honored to be the first one to view your poem, which is a breathtaking expression of love and longing, echoing the depth of Rumi's wisdom. The wonderful imagery you evoke, from tears on strawberry lips to the fragility of dead roses, creates the complexities of love. Your verses dance with passion and reverence, leaving an indelible mark on the heart. Dear So, What an exquisite piece that transcends time and touches the soul. - Blessings, Daniel
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