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Time

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Spindles crash and weave no more Time it spins across the floor Yarns mix up, colours bleed I follow threads, they are the feed Fingers feel, soles are placed What is this chaos interlaced Tangled up criss crossing fro Is it distinct segments of the show Makes no sense, the world's unhinged Centre missing, edges singed Echoes layered core by core I know this much, forget some more Suns reflect and blind the few Darkness is beginners cue Tearing pictures off the walls Terrifying void filled falls Veins in wings, eyes they sting Unfathomable empty jettisoned thing No time passes, murmurs sound Minute by second, hour by pound No grip on day, sun taken away Brought back too bright, it's night, it's night Shushed to sleep, too deep, too deep Hear them calling, mauling, stalling Linear time, ticks and tocks Something starts, nothing stops Empty trains, veers off track then changes lanes Hook me up, once more to mains No death in chains, tap tap the canes Time stands still, hear screams shrill Sewn shut eyes, mouth speaks nil Passing time, regurgitate Wrap my head round idea of fate

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Date: 3/8/2024 6:07:00 PM
Listened and read in one breath Di11y Da11y! I love how you weave your metaphoric words here that give justice to the essence of your poem and to the theme, TIME. Vivid images dance in my imagination as I hear you. Your voice is just exact, I couldn't ask for more! I wish you could recite my poem," Unconquerable" and it would be a great honour if you would allow that to be posted on that poem. Thank you so much and Congratulations! This a fave !
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/9/2024 11:23:00 AM
What a lovely comment, thank you so much. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem and narration so much. I appreciate the fave and the high praise :) I will ponder the idea of reciting for your poem
Date: 3/8/2024 10:57:00 AM
Dear dd, first of all, you are such a phenomenal reader, left me in awe, your voice is so soothing and you sound like one of my soul sister. And about your poem, I absolutely love the wordplay and flow of this, and how deep it is, what stood out the most for me is “ No time passes, murmurs sound Minute by second, hour by pound No grip on day, sun taken away” so unique and creative the way you’ve depicted time. Beautiful and so heartfelt! Pleasure listening to this. Congratulations on your win
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/8/2024 1:11:00 PM
Haha I meant ornate really but I tend to land in matter of fact language no matter what I aim for :)
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/8/2024 11:37:00 AM
Haha omg you are so cute. I mentioned “ flowery words” cus some mention now in contest details not to use flowery words, flowery words apparently means using words that are complex , but anyhow you nailed it i will show this to my soul sis she is a spoken word artist. Brilliant one, australian tho, congrats again
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/8/2024 11:31:00 AM
Thank you so much Ink, your praise is gratefully received - happily compared to a soul sister <3 Thank you for your kind words, I let my mind run away for this one trying to find flowers but not quite capturing them, glad it worked anyway x
Date: 3/6/2024 5:21:00 AM
Centre missing, edges singed, what a stand out line amongst many Dilly, so difficult to put one’s finger on time, it’s such a complex perceived force when interlaced with our consciousness, but hey you have a great eye for imperceptible events, that most people like myself totally miss, or just take for granted, super job all the best for contest, cheers David
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David Kavanagh
Date: 3/6/2024 8:12:00 AM
The voiceover works really well with the rhyme scheme, what a fine reciter you are too, and not a flower in sight, I certainly won’t deduct any points for that! :)
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Date: 3/6/2024 7:58:00 AM
Ahh you commented just before I put the audio on. I just let my mind leap about for topics like this, there's no need for restraint as it's so unequivocally enormous and open to pondering for poets (and science - but I'd leave that to you). I tried for flowery but just ended up elsewhere haha thanks for your comment, always appreciated

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