Tilting For A Fall

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Write Thirteen Beautiful Lines, Sponsored by Constance La France. Date written: 04/20/2025

Cheated on, she's not messing around; one foot already out the door" - quote by poet. just a p u s h... all that is needed to timber the foundation of dreams. his unfaithfulness, though forgiven, the stench of betrayal lingers like a thick fog in the air. the state of their union, a wobbly three-legged table. it's tilting for a fall on second chance; that's all he'll ever get. she votes with her feet on a third.

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Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 4/21/2025 12:36:00 PM

Lovely write Edward! 13 beautiful lines but end of the road for two lovers! Touching. All the best in the contest!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 4/21/2025 2:32:00 PM

Thank you very much, Krish:-)

Lin Lane

Date: 4/21/2025 3:01:00 AM

You've done a fine job of entertaining the thought of second chances by comparing it to a tilting table. Three strikes and she kicks him out. That's justified. Great metaphorical thoughts, Edward.

Edward Ibeh
Date: 4/21/2025 5:07:00 AM

Thank you very much as always, Lin:-) Blessings to you, my friend.