Harry Horsman Poet Rhyme

Ticket To Ride

If one does so desire
when old seek to retire
a move hence to Yorkshire
to live and to aspire,
a life that of a squire
with lust and then to sire
beside the light of  fire,
relax and then expire
except the Sunday’s choir
song to the Messiah,
a note to bliss require
an entry, oh desire!

© Harry J Horsman  2012

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Carol Sunshine Brown February 7, 2012 at 8:41 AM Congratulations to you on your win in Debbie Guzzi 's "Change for the Meter" contest Harry. Love, Carol

Joe Maverick February 5, 2012 at 3:54 PM Well done on the H M in the contest Harry,,

David Williams February 5, 2012 at 10:57 AM Harry congrats on your win, love it..David

Bob Quigley February 5, 2012 at 8:14 AM Well done Harry. Congrats on your win

Carol Sunshine Brown January 24, 2012 at 6:09 AM Thank you for your kind comments on my writings Harry. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today. Love, Carol

Don Johnson January 22, 2012 at 3:41 PM and the beat goes on mate, love it ...is the label monorhyme? well done here, cobber....Don

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 21, 2012 at 8:13 PM wow Harry this is super awesome in rhyme scheme and meter of which I know nnothing about.. what an entry luv.. good luck.. thankxx for sweet compliments on my hair,,,

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2012 at 5:09 PM I think it is trochaic iambic if you make the small changes I show you in soupmail. THis is for Deb's contest, right? If trochaic iambic means three feet of iambic, that's where your verse is headed. Harry Horsman January 22, 2012 at 2:34 AM thank you Andrea, have made the changes.

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2012 at 5:08 PM harry, I have some comments for lines six thru ten. THey sound good but are not beginning with unstressed sound like lines 1-5 have. Let me soupmail you my thoughts.

John Loving Iii January 21, 2012 at 1:10 PM Intresting

Elizabeth Wesley January 21, 2012 at 8:11 AM What diff does it make; it is poetry that satisfies the mind and gives the reader a glimpse into your soul. Hail to Yorkshire!

M.I.A . January 21, 2012 at 1:34 AM oh, this is lovely! I would love to live in a place like Yorkshire, not really a city girl at heart. great poem Harry

Bl Devnath January 20, 2012 at 7:55 PM I don't know, but you have done well, I guess. Loved and enjoyed, bl

Anne-Lise Andresen January 20, 2012 at 2:59 PM Trochaic/Iambic ???? I dont know,but the poem is good Harry. :) -oxox love Anne-Lise

Russell Sivey January 20, 2012 at 12:24 PM This is a great write Harry! "...when old seek to retire..." wonderful line! I enjoyed your poem the afternoon! Awesome Work!!

Red Fiery January 20, 2012 at 11:58 AM ur a blessed poet...can't talk abt meters here..as I am completely ignorant, its a matter of surprise that i still write ...

Brenda Victoria Northeast January 20, 2012 at 11:54 AM Well done Harry had me smiling, blessings re what meter etc. Sorry I don't know poetic forms well enough, sorry can't help- I need help lol blessings, Bren