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If one does so desire when old seek to retire a move hence to Yorkshire to live and to aspire, a life that of a squire with lust and then to sire beside the light of fire, relax and then expire except the Sunday’s choir song to the Messiah, a note to bliss require an entry, oh desire! © Harry J Horsman 2012

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Date: 2/7/2012 8:41:00 AM
Congratulations to you on your win in Debbie Guzzi 's "Change for the Meter" contest Harry. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/5/2012 3:54:00 PM
Well done on the H M in the contest Harry,,
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:57:00 AM
Harry congrats on your win, love it..David
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Date: 2/5/2012 8:14:00 AM
Well done Harry. Congrats on your win
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Date: 1/24/2012 6:09:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments on my writings Harry. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/22/2012 3:41:00 PM
and the beat goes on mate, love it ...is the label monorhyme? well done here, cobber....Don
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Date: 1/21/2012 8:13:00 PM
wow Harry this is super awesome in rhyme scheme and meter of which I know nnothing about.. what an entry luv.. good luck.. thankxx for sweet compliments on my hair,,,
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Date: 1/21/2012 5:09:00 PM
I think it is trochaic iambic if you make the small changes I show you in soupmail. THis is for Deb's contest, right? If trochaic iambic means three feet of iambic, that's where your verse is headed.
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Date: 1/22/2012 2:34:00 AM
thank you Andrea, have made the changes.
Date: 1/21/2012 5:08:00 PM
harry, I have some comments for lines six thru ten. THey sound good but are not beginning with unstressed sound like lines 1-5 have. Let me soupmail you my thoughts.
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Date: 1/21/2012 1:10:00 PM
Intresting
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Date: 1/21/2012 8:11:00 AM
What diff does it make; it is poetry that satisfies the mind and gives the reader a glimpse into your soul. Hail to Yorkshire!
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Date: 1/21/2012 1:34:00 AM
oh, this is lovely! I would love to live in a place like Yorkshire, not really a city girl at heart. great poem Harry
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Date: 1/20/2012 7:55:00 PM
I don't know, but you have done well, I guess. Loved and enjoyed, bl
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Date: 1/20/2012 2:59:00 PM
Trochaic/Iambic ???? I dont know,but the poem is good Harry. :) -oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 1/20/2012 12:24:00 PM
This is a great write Harry! "...when old seek to retire..." wonderful line! I enjoyed your poem the afternoon! Awesome Work!!
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Date: 1/20/2012 11:58:00 AM
ur a blessed poet...can't talk abt meters here..as I am completely ignorant, its a matter of surprise that i still write ...
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Date: 1/20/2012 11:54:00 AM
Well done Harry had me smiling, blessings re what meter etc. Sorry I don't know poetic forms well enough, sorry can't help- I need help lol blessings, Bren
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