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Tic-Toc

Tic-Toc So many day you have been gone. Letting go of the memories we've made, we could make. So many hour I have awaited your return. Fighting against the demons of hell, for our love. Very little time to save our love. Too many seconds, with time and clocks and never with you. Clocks that are broken, like I. Time that lasts forever, unlike youth. The angles who sing to me from the greens and blues of a painted perfect heaven. So many things can go wrong without you. These clocks in my head stop time on us in love. They hardly move and hardly move, until they never move. . . ever again.

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Brianna Wahlquist

Date: 6/23/2015 5:37:00 PM

Thanks, to all of you. I wrote this poem with a simple thought.. How do I describe a broken love story and a hope to find a fix? I believed in this poem and I thank you all for giving me the best motivation and even more confidence in this write!(:

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/16/2015 2:54:00 PM

Brianna, Congratulations in DG's contest. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Skat A

Date: 5/16/2015 10:34:00 AM

Brianna, Congrats on your Tim Lin win..... SKAT

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/14/2015 7:24:00 PM

Brianna, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Skat A

Date: 5/14/2015 6:41:00 PM

Brianna, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/14/2015 3:36:00 PM

Very impressed you understood what I was asking for! Please label this Free Verse or Verse it is not an ABC poem & 4th line from the bottom you want ANGELS - just a typo I'm sure! Try and lay the lines out so they look better on the page- I'd put a line break after [like I] & make a few of the longer lines shorter by dropping the end of the line to the next line.