Susan Gentry Poet Rhyme

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Thunderstorm Rages

Crooked lightning fingers flash off and on
Ominous clouds gather from dusk to dark
Everything he accused her of is wrong
Each command and order sounds like a bark
Rumbling thunder moves closer to its mark
From out of nowhere his fist hit her nose
Dime-size hail pelted the ground fast and stark
The storm covers up screams of other blows
This torrential downpour eventually slows

July 1, 2018

Summer Rain Storm Contest by Dale Gregory Cozart
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July 26, 2018 - A Poem NA'd in a July Contest
by Dear Heart a.k.a. Broken Wings
Second Place

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Constance La France July 29, 2018 at 5:18 PM Susan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deep and dark but wonderfully penned poem, well done ! Susan Gentry August 7, 2018 at 4:25 AM Thank you so much! I am honored to be on your list of winners. Thanks for sponsoring and for all you do. :)

Haley Fisher July 28, 2018 at 9:37 AM Congrats Susan. Very dark, so well expressed. Susan Gentry July 28, 2018 at 1:59 PM Thank you, Haley.

Eve Roper July 27, 2018 at 5:18 PM Congratulations on your awesome win, Susan. I enjoyed reading this well written poem with great imagery. Hugs Eve Susan Gentry July 28, 2018 at 12:09 AM Thanks, Eve.

Michelle Faulkner July 10, 2018 at 3:04 PM So dark and striking in its bluntness, this really grabbed me- Susan Gentry July 10, 2018 at 8:39 PM Thanks, Michelle.

Roy Pett July 4, 2018 at 10:20 AM Excellent poem and a cleverly written one, good luck in contest. :)) Susan Gentry July 4, 2018 at 8:01 PM Thank you, Roy!

Paul Callus July 3, 2018 at 2:43 AM The pain of physical and emotional abuse ... such 'storms' might pass by, but their effect is a lasting one. Metaphorically impressive and expressive! Regards // paul Susan Gentry July 4, 2018 at 8:00 PM Oh yes, you are so right. Thanks, Paul!

Gershon Wolf July 2, 2018 at 7:23 PM Clever? Original? Powerful? Blending of nature and humanity? --- Check, check, check, check: All of the above. Nice poem, Susan! :) gw Susan Gentry July 4, 2018 at 7:59 PM Awww thank you! :

Agnes Krampe July 2, 2018 at 7:00 PM Powerful poem, Susan, great juxtaposition. Susan Gentry July 4, 2018 at 12:17 AM Thank you!

Rob Carmack July 1, 2018 at 11:19 PM My favorite line: "The storm covers up screams of other blows". Good luck in the contest Susan. Susan Gentry July 2, 2018 at 1:09 AM Thanks, rob! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :)

Geoffrey Brewer July 1, 2018 at 8:52 PM In this brief verse, with the juxtaposition of harsh, brutal images, you have created a stark scene that strikes the heart and causes emotional and aesthetic frisson. Well done, Susan Susan Gentry July 2, 2018 at 1:08 AM Thank you! What a wonderful comment. :)

Sandra Haight July 1, 2018 at 5:47 PM Amazing where you took this theme, Susan...such a powerful metaphor combining the two storms. Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 6:00 PM Thanks, Sandra! Appreciate your input. :)

Andrea Dietrich July 1, 2018 at 2:11 PM WOW, susan, very clever and original thinking for this one. BRAVO!! Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 6:00 PM Thank you, Andrea! Appreciate you. :)

Daniel Turner July 1, 2018 at 12:18 PM Your muse went to a very dark place here Susan. I dare say, thunder can also cover up a shotgun blast. The old codger gotta sleep sometime. I do wish it would rain though! Good luck, sweetie:) Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 5:59 PM Oh yes. And should have... We may need to do you a rain dance!! Thank you, :)

Tom Cunningham July 1, 2018 at 10:47 AM Powerful message of a bully Susan, who have no place in our societies. Tom. Greetings from Turkey. Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 5:56 PM Nope but they are there. Turkey? Vacation? Sounds exciting! :)

Frederic Parker July 1, 2018 at 10:40 AM a sad poem, though I see you and I had the same thought with this, yours more violent than mine...good luck with the contest Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 5:53 PM Why thank you! Oh I like yours, more thought-provoking than in your face. Good luck to you too.

Jan Allison July 1, 2018 at 8:58 AM what a sad sad interpretation of the theme Susan, I can almost feel his fists raining down on her after a stormy row:-( hugs jan xx - the captcha is CAD lol!!! Susan Gentry July 1, 2018 at 5:51 PM Lol... it's funny how those fit... uncanny really :)