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Through the Mist

Effulgence of the moon cannot break through the mist of creeping gloom which has erased the brilliance of the stars, the midnight’s blue and oaks like strokes against the hills which graced our panoramic view. A sickly dew has come upon our world and left its taste. The cold seeps in while some sleep unaware that Goddess Moon hangs pouting in despair. for any old poem #8 Contest of Skat

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Date: 7/11/2015 7:37:00 AM
Andrea I enjoyed "through the mist" and many of your other poems congrats on your win!
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Date: 7/11/2015 1:55:00 AM
Andrea, Congrats on your Any Old Poem #8 win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 7/10/2015 7:02:00 PM
I had the mist going through my mind this morning. It is a weird summer here more like a second spring with the rain and chilly nights....congrats Tim
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Date: 7/10/2015 1:18:00 AM
Andrea, Congratulations, on your awesome win. SKAT
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Date: 10/22/2014 12:51:00 PM
Ooohhh very enchanting, Andrea! The mist always makes me think of the fun times I had at the Oregon coast, but I can see how you'd find melancholy in it. You use enjambment a lot in your poetry and it makes you a very skilled rhymer.
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Date: 8/31/2014 4:56:00 PM
I see it, I feel it, I smell it... you have captured the mist so well !!! Congratulations on your win !! Superb images !!
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Date: 8/30/2014 12:28:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/30/2014 10:55:00 AM
A trip through the netherworld, congratulation my friend
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Date: 8/30/2014 8:05:00 AM
This has a mystical feel to it. Your images brought to mind a picture I saw once. It had women in a boat dressed in clothes from the dark ages. Trees drooped heavily on the shore, fog swirled around them, and the moon was peeking from a distance.
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Date: 8/28/2014 10:51:00 AM
The mystic gaze beyond the haze, the spirit world unfolds. In slumber's laze, deep thoughts amaze, As dream life now beholds. In London or Louisiana, the magic fog abounds. Ooooooh, :) the eerie freaky sounds. :)
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Date: 8/26/2014 7:12:00 PM
Lots of great words here. Can't even recall hearing that first one! Great view too!
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Date: 8/25/2014 7:49:00 PM
Beautiful imagery and an incredible last line. Surely a winner, Andrea. Hope you can send me just one or two football footles for the project on Karen's site. Always wishing the best for you, Carolyn
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 8/25/2014 7:49:00 PM
The abcedrian was fun!
Date: 8/25/2014 3:09:00 PM
"Oaks like strokes against the hills." I like this transfiguration. Like scribbling. I'm sure no one can top this one. LOve, daver
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/25/2014 5:46:00 PM
so glad someone noticed that line . It just came to me. Very rare for me to think like this.
Date: 8/25/2014 1:18:00 PM
Don't know about this form, but it reads good. Good luck in the contest... Lucilla
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Date: 8/25/2014 12:50:00 PM
A fantastic write. What a pleasure to read. Love the word play -will look up Attava Rima- directly. Infrequent visits of late, as my gorgeous wife is with me for a few weeks.
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Date: 8/25/2014 9:58:00 AM
Here you apt imagery to create a cool pictured through the mist, Andrea
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Date: 8/25/2014 9:47:00 AM
Did not know Gods pout.....How are you Andrea?
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Date: 8/25/2014 8:20:00 AM
A night of magic captured in words divine! Wonderfully done , Andrea!
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Date: 8/25/2014 6:21:00 AM
Excellent. Said beautifully. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 8/24/2014 9:21:00 PM
I just hate it when the "Goddess" pouts. Nice job with the Ottava Rima form.
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Date: 8/24/2014 6:25:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Great images! Great Poem! I read it a few times to let it sink in. It is very smartly done. I really hope you win the contest. Have a pleasant evening and take care. Earl
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Date: 8/24/2014 6:03:00 PM
incredible imagery Andrea good luck with the contest:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 8/24/2014 5:25:00 PM
I loove looove the last two lines-The cold seeps in while some sleep unaware/That Goddess Moon hangs pouting in despair.Your verses are always so beautifully crafted even if they have to filter through the mist of creeping gloom..Awesome!
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Date: 8/24/2014 4:44:00 PM
just beautiful! you never cease to impress!
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Date: 8/24/2014 3:20:00 PM
This is a lovely poem for the contest, Andrea, best of luck ~~
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