Premiere Contest WinnerThoughts of a Very Old Apartment

Winter is approaching.
 I feel it in my floorboards; in my baseboards;
in every nook and cranny.
I wait to be filled again at this time of Thanksgiving, and
As I wait, sounds of the past linger in my consciousness:

The excited moans of the men and of the women (some of whose
first introduction to me came from being carried across my threshold)
as they lay close together in their bed late at night;
The strange incessant wailing of  babies that later arrived -
wailing that later changed, more often than not, into squeals of glee.
Some of the families I sheltered engulfed me with heaviness.
In those years, I was assaulted by loud shouting, 
much like the barking of dogs from outside.
Those shouts were often met by shrill hysterical screams
or even by the sad sobs of children.
One sound stays with me like a ghost: the quiet weeping
of one lone occupant who held a gun to his head.
In an instant I felt his blood splatter against my walls.

I prefer to remember the touch of the children:
their small smudged fingers exploring my kitchen cupboards;
their tiny warm bodies scooting across my tiles.
On one unusual occasion, a child scribbled happily 
on my bathroom walls with bright Crayola colors.
After the explosion of his mother’s angry words, 
the bathroom was transformed, and with magic paper
a small part of me was wearing the figures of gold and purple fish.

Forty times or more I’ve been left; then re-inhabited.
Several times I’ve been overhauled: my carpet torn out, a new one laid;
my doors and my fixtures changed for modern ones;
my furnace and my pipes (even once a ceiling) - all replaced.
But lately, I’ve felt so weary, and even renovated, I’m feeling out of place. 
Just last month as I was emptied and cleaned for the umpteenth time,
I heard the newest landlord tell his wife:
We won’t have to put up with this crap anymore -
not after we get the offer from those guys who want to build a mall.

I wonder what he meant. My heat and water both have been cut off for so long.
Usually a couple is here by now. But only silence echoes through my halls,
and I’m growing so very cold.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Sinha-Roy Avatar
November 27, 2025 at 10:36 PM
Congratulations, Andrea.
Gauthier Avatar
November 24, 2025 at 5:22 PM
Congrats on your admirable finish in Mark's Marathon. Consistently remarkable poetry ~
Watts Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 1:00 PM
Hi Andrea Congratulations on your high placing in this contest. A great reflective look back at apartment living where life was busy but at times rewarding. well done Cheers Christine
George Avatar
November 22, 2025 at 12:41 AM
Hi Andrea, a second visit to your beautiful poem with hearty Congratulations on your sixth place win.
Dietrich Avatar
November 22, 2025 at 9:41 AM
Thanks, dear Valsa
Ashley Avatar
November 21, 2025 at 9:13 PM
Dear Andrea, congratulations for your exceptional marathon contest run and final placement! This awesome poem is representative of your grand poetic talent. So honored to share the podium with you. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
November 22, 2025 at 9:40 AM
Thanks for your kindness
Toney Avatar
November 21, 2025 at 2:48 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your winning Sixth Place overall in my 2025 Poetry Marathon FINAL, and the Most Consistent Poet Award! Thank you so much for contributing to the success of the contest. The poems of the 37 Qualifiers can be accessed from my current "Finish Line" blog post. Time to take off those running shoes and give those feet a rest!
Dietrich Avatar
November 21, 2025 at 3:30 PM
wow, thanks, I did not expect to place this high from what I'd been seeing! Can't wait to see all the winners.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 23, 2025 at 5:30 PM
Congrats! Great write! Haunting and poignant! Those beginning lines drew me in.
Peck Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 1:07 PM
Old, vacant houses have always made me sad. Your poem about one is wonderful!
Dietrich Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 1:29 PM
Thanks, Ann
Poetrysoup Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 7:33 AM
Wow! This gives us Langston Hughes vibes. Great job, Andrea!
Dietrich Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 10:33 AM
Thank you very much
Richards Avatar
September 21, 2025 at 11:23 PM
Great narrative, Andrea, from the perspective of an old dwelling. Enjoyed reading this unique take. Congrats on the win.
Dietrich Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 1:29 PM
Thank you
Onclaud Avatar
September 21, 2025 at 7:23 PM
and you say you can't do free verse? andie, you created a long version of ezra pound's brooding vibe, all uniquely yours for the taking...this wrecthedly beautiful work on dire existence slays me...cheers for the win !
Dietrich Avatar
September 22, 2025 at 1:30 PM
I appreciate that, Nette. If only I could do it more often
Cornish Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 6:47 PM
This truly turns personification into art and embellishes Thomas Wolfe's "You can't go home again"---I too feel that many inanimate things in our lives have feelings. Congrats on your well deserved win!
Dietrich Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 11:46 PM
Thanks, Craig
Ashley Avatar
September 20, 2025 at 6:35 PM
Dear Andrea, your imaginative poem really illustrates the concept of “if these walks could talk”, which I’ve often wondered about in old places and spaces I’ve been in. Your intimate and vivid portrayal of an old apartment telling its story is awesome and bittersweet... the last stanza is especially poignant. Congratulations for your trophy win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
September 21, 2025 at 12:09 AM
Much appreciated, Susan.
Godwin Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 10:10 PM
I knew it would do it. Congratulations! Love, CayCay
George Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 9:10 PM
A sad situation often faced by an apartment complex.... being misused and walls smeared with dirt. What all strange incidents it witnesses everyday from its tenants. A very moving personification. Congratulations on your trophy win.
Toney Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 7:53 PM
Andrea, this is very creative, nostalgic, and poignant. Congratulations on your first place win on Mile 16 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 17 has already started.
Dietrich Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 8:48 PM
Thanks so much. I really appreciate a trophy on this oldie of mine I just noticed my word OF had come out as omg. I need to recheck all my texted comments before clicking on them!
Godwin Avatar
September 13, 2025 at 12:09 PM
This is one of my favorite poems out of all you've written. Probably because my Army brat self has lifelong wondered what walls would say if they were aware, would they care I'd gone, remember me? I am moved by the apartment's emotions on each creative direction you took its thoughts. THIS WRITE OF YOURS HAS A PERSONAL FEEL to me. The ending couldn't have been more dramatic. I am beyond impressed, I was riveted, and it was a wonderful read. THOROUGHLY .... Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Dietrich Avatar
September 18, 2025 at 8:49 PM
I am so happy you felt this way about my poem. Thanks so much, Caycay
A   Avatar
August 8, 2016 at 10:45 PM
ANDREA, Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by and enjoy my latest blog "It's Over." always & forever ~LINDA~
Yvonne Avatar
November 22, 2014 at 4:05 AM
Very creative, excellent poem.
Deschler Avatar
April 13, 2014 at 5:30 PM
This poem is very creative and unique. I don't think that I have ever read anything written from an apartment's perspective. A wonderful winning poem, Andrea! Congratulations to you, as well! :)
Parker Avatar
April 13, 2014 at 12:01 PM
this is an impressive poem and statement on the human condition...I don't impress easily but this is strong, maybe because its written so well, maybe because I know these apartments,maybe because these apartments never change...
A. Sharma Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 4:38 AM
Andrea unique as always ! Congrats on ur great win !!
A  Avatar
April 11, 2014 at 10:40 PM
SWEET WIN, ANDREA.......... SKAT
A   Avatar
April 11, 2014 at 9:37 PM
Andrea, thank you for stopping on today's Birthday blog... so sweet of you.. , Congratulations, In Charlotte's MIX, contest.... always~ Linda
Johnson Avatar
April 11, 2014 at 8:25 PM
"If walls could talk". This is sad. It is no fun to be old and not much use any more. Congratulations on a great personification. Love Joyce
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