Thoughts

Tight grip on my sword whispers shatter my mind slash the dark in a straight line find the dawn of my life thoughts flutter around me greedily eats my desire agony of doubt consumed my dreams ignorance deceived my sight pale stars float in the emptiness crooked wings of fairy tales many times I've seen a dream tonight i give the world my sight paper and ink will be my knight hazy visions of the night help me see the light words carved in my heart sky bleeding in my eyes feather is my soul ink is my path paper is my life

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Bassam Yassin

Date: 9/28/2009 11:34:00 PM

Nesma, congratulations !...hope to see your name on the finals! Smart and well organized lines; the music of words is perfect..I can feel the 'strength of rebellion' of your poem ... i liked the 'hazy visions of light/help me see the light' it is a poem by itself. Lovely....Bassam

Date: 9/26/2009 5:03:00 PM

Interesting reflection. I really like the last stanza. Congratulations on making it through the first round in the contest. Good luck in the finals! Karen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2009 12:28:00 PM

Congratulations on your poem making it through the first round.Wishing you the best in the finals. Love, Carol

Elaine George

Date: 9/23/2009 6:34:00 AM

thank you for sharing your thougts and congratulations on this feature of the week. lainie

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/22/2009 7:56:00 PM

Nesma, congrats on your feature this week...Raul

James Fraser

Date: 9/22/2009 6:39:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful poetry being featured this week Nesma >>James

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 9/21/2009 4:37:00 PM

Very nicely done! Congratulations on your featured poem ! Laura :)

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 9/21/2009 6:30:00 AM

wonderful use of imagery...hazy visions of the night help me see the light words carved in my heart sky bleeding in my eyes Congrats on your poetry being featured this week… please keep writing… great you! Adeleke

Dima N.

Date: 9/21/2009 5:08:00 AM

Congrats Sis... I'm so proud of you.. keep writing... Love, Dima

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/21/2009 3:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Nesma. Love, Carol

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 5/7/2009 4:23:00 PM

I love the creativeness in this wonderful write! Well done! Laura :)

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 5/7/2009 12:26:00 PM

Fascinating description, words flow remarkably, and is meaningful.