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Thou Art To Me a Delicious Torment-W

Once saw you freshly bathed, with glowing soft skin And remember your hair with the stars and the moon Grey-blue eyes piercing through my desiring heart a-cry The greenest of things blue, the bluest of things grey You fuller pouty lower lip alluring to my upper lip I don’t need to get tips, as beautiful lips sink ship I remember your look, making me quite nervous Those eyes leaning, increasing my heart beats Come in my garden, roses want to see you blossoming The recesses of my heart needs to feel throbbing Come, my mind wishes to feel intellectual touch Come in dreams, I wish to confront reality as such. =================================== Fifth Place winner in Contest: Sentimental Love Letters sponsored by Audrey carey

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Date: 3/19/2011 6:36:00 AM
Hi there Ram do you want an "I"line 1 [Once I saw you?] You have 1 line showing internal rhyme, line 6 tips/lips/shipno end rhyme in 1,2 & 7,8 & two really nice half rhymes a-cry/grey, touch/such, perhaps a bit of polish? Light & Love
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Date: 11/8/2010 8:44:00 PM
wow, this is beautiful, Dr. Ram. Congats on your fifth place! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/8/2010 5:58:00 PM
Great poem. Keep writing. Check my poems out when you get the chance. Thanks -Rob
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Date: 11/8/2010 9:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Dr. Ram in Audrey's contest. So romantic , it's like a scene from the movies..Regards..Rinki
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Date: 11/8/2010 5:02:00 AM
This is beautiful win. Many congratulations.
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Date: 11/7/2010 2:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Dr. Ram in Audrey's contest. Wishing you the best with your writing and winning in contests. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/7/2010 8:01:00 AM
Congrats Dr. Ram my friend on your delicious win in the love letters contest with this excellent entry depicting luv... enjoy this happy Sunday with lots of luv..
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Date: 11/7/2010 7:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Dr. Ram! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/7/2010 7:38:00 AM
THE CONTEST IS OVER AND YOU ARE THE WINNER..SARA
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Date: 11/6/2010 11:55:00 PM
This is a pleasant read, Dr. Ram. Congratulations on winning this contest. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 11/6/2010 10:02:00 PM
Dr. Ram congratulations on your win in the contest ~ Wilma ;)
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Date: 11/6/2010 8:59:00 PM
great, flowing piece, dr.ram... cheers to your award, and thank you for wishing me as well. warmest, nette
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Date: 11/6/2010 5:16:00 PM
Dr. Ram, thanks for your comments on my win with "A Sentimental Letter To My Only True Love", and congrats to you too. Luv always, Joy (Jew)
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Date: 11/6/2010 4:10:00 PM
Dr. Ram, I thank you for supporting my contest with this beautiful sensual piece of work. Someone needs to do a contest on Beautiful Sensual Poems.. Congratulations. Love, Audrey
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Date: 11/6/2010 3:31:00 PM
Congratulations Dr Ram on your much deserved win in placement in the top ten. Agape, Moses
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Date: 11/5/2010 12:24:00 PM
What an excellent passionate poem, Dr Ram! Enjoyed it much. Well done......( sorry about the snow.in Detroit..I actually would not mind snow myself if the temp. stayed at a balmy 70 degrees or so all the while.) :)
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Date: 11/4/2010 10:15:00 AM
That be love as such... Joel
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Date: 11/4/2010 7:13:00 AM
I hope that you had a happy Dewali, Dr. Ram! Our Festival of Lights will be either Chanukkah or Christmas. I enjoyed the read of your so well written poem and wish you best success in Audrey's contest. Thank you also for your kind comments...and you look great on your photographs!...Gert
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Date: 11/4/2010 2:06:00 AM
What a very sensual poem for your love, Dr. Ram-- you are definitely a romantic! best of luck in the contest :)-- nikko :)
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Date: 11/3/2010 6:06:00 PM
Passion just pours out of this delightful love poem....well done, Dr. Ram!!!
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Date: 11/3/2010 12:48:00 PM
such a reality of dream discription & verse wow. very appreciated.
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Date: 11/3/2010 12:47:00 PM
Smile ~ "Ahh," the ebbs & flows of the sweetened tides of love "My Dear & Talented Friend, Dr. Ram Mehta!!!" ~ Although, this poe also seems to hold perhaps a metaphoric view also? Either or my friend, passionately & excellently presented sculptic piece of artistic clay so molded ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You & Yours," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day;" Bye!:) ~
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Date: 11/3/2010 11:55:00 AM
Eloquent and truly romantic write Dr. Ram .. good luck in the contest my friend.. lovely descriptive lines embellish your title ... with luv..
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Date: 11/3/2010 10:51:00 AM
Thank you for posting your poetry that we may all enjoy it here at PoetrySoup Dr.Ram. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/3/2010 7:45:00 AM
She sounds like a very beautiful woman, Dr. Ram, and any lady would like to receive a love letter like the one you composed! I really like the way you describe how the roses wanted to see her blossoming. Quite a nice bit of irony there. Excellent entry for Audrey's contest and I wish you success. Soup mail returned. Love, Carolyn
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