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The big headlines cause sensation, Media’s chosen information. Manipulative, they entomb the big elephant in the room. Stress is put on the suggestive keeping tongue and the mind active. They sweep aside with furtive broom the big elephant in the room. Gain is high on the agenda grabbing votes in referenda. They hide, on purpose, I presume the big elephant in the room. Many topics are selective; they are made to look attractive. Who dares to tickle with a plume the big elephant in the room? --------------------------------------- A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains, each containing a repeating line at the end of each stanza. Each line within the poem consists of eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum. Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB. This form is a pleasure to use because of its rhyming scheme and the strong pivotal line on which the whole poem rotates. --------------------------------------- Premiere Contest No. 13 Sponsor: Skat A (2016) Contest: Poetry Writing #1 Sponsor: Broken Wings Placed 1st 15th December 2015

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Date: 10/1/2016 10:42:00 AM
Paul, I love this form, I have never tried it, I just may :) Winning worthy poem you have written here sweet Paul :congratulations on your placement :)-luloo)
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Date: 10/2/2016 6:48:00 AM
Many thanks to you, Laura:) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by:) Have a lovely day! Regards // paul
Date: 10/1/2016 9:15:00 AM
Paul, Congrats on your win. Stop by my blog "in a perfect world" and celebrate with a smile or two. With Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 10/2/2016 6:46:00 AM
Thank you Skat; pleased to be on your winners' list:) Hugs // paul
Date: 2/22/2016 2:40:00 PM
Love where you went with this metaphor. Everyone's know it's there, staring us in the face ... but like dummies we just stare at it. "Who dares to tickle with a plume the big elephant in the room?" A media so out of control, that the slightest nudge can send the stampede. Congrats on your winning piece and using the repetition skillfully to your advantage.
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Date: 2/23/2016 3:28:00 PM
Thank you for the insightful feedback, Timothy. Always a pleasure reading your comments...and seeing the bright smile on the new avatar:) ~ Regards // paul
Date: 1/14/2016 1:21:00 PM
The biased government controlled media... Is this a grat country or what? I love it.
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Date: 1/14/2016 2:05:00 PM
You read it well, Daniel! Thank you for stopping by:) ~ Regards // paul
Date: 1/11/2016 11:34:00 AM
I enjoyed very much this nice form, think I will try it, I love all rhymes this was exceptional. Belated congrats.
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Date: 1/11/2016 4:26:00 PM
Glad that you liked both poem and form , John. I encourage you to try it; it will bring you satisfaction. ~ Regards // paul
Date: 1/4/2016 12:50:00 AM
A great read from the first word to the last. You used the form seamlessly to accommodate the poets message. A Fav, congratulations on your first place win.
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Date: 1/4/2016 1:07:00 PM
You are kind and generous, Armand! Thank you for the great comments and the fav. ~ Wishing you all the best for 2016! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 12/23/2015 2:55:00 PM
tres bien Paul, fanastique!
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Date: 12/25/2015 1:49:00 PM
Thank you very much Etienne....for reading and liking this poem! Regards // paul
Date: 12/19/2015 5:41:00 AM
Wow Paul great witty write. Love this form and congratulations on your 1st placement win my friend!!
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:03:00 PM
Many thanks, Michael; excuse the late reply. All the best. // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 10:27:00 PM
Back again with big congrats on ur top place win Paul!!
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Date: 12/23/2015 4:16:00 PM
Pardon the late reply, Upma. I liked your previous comments, and thank you for having faith in this poem of mine; now I also thank you for coming back with congrats.:) ~ regards *~* paul
Date: 12/18/2015 9:33:00 PM
Paul, Congratulations on your sweet win Luv **SKAT**
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:53:00 PM
Thank you, Skat. Always lovely to have you knocking at my door:) hugs // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 9:19:00 PM
Congrats on your win Paul...
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:25:00 PM
Thank you Joseph. ~ Wishing you all the best. // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 9:17:00 PM
Paul, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN.... LINDA
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:58:00 PM
Thank you dear Linda:) Hope you are having a lovely festive holiday! hugs // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 5:27:00 PM
I will have to try this form sometime. A good example you wrote here. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:18:00 PM
It's my first attempt at this form Rob, but will definitely try it again! Thank you for reading and the congrats. ~ Regards // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 4:23:00 PM
Just love the Kyrielle. Glad someone showed it and congrats for your win.
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:52:00 PM
Many thanks, Andrea. You Etherees made you proud, too! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 12/18/2015 2:24:00 PM
Dropping by with my congrats - I will never forget this topical poem Paul lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/23/2015 4:07:00 PM
Thank you, Jan:) I'm so backwards in replying to comments, though!! Hugs // paul
Date: 12/17/2015 12:55:00 PM
Apart from message within the poem, I enjoyed the form it worth giving a try. This poem reach the extremity of brilliance.........A.M.
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Date: 12/25/2015 3:00:00 PM
Pleased that you liked both poem and form, Afolabi...thank you! Regards // paul
Date: 12/17/2015 9:08:00 AM
You did this well and the origin of the form works well with the topic chosen.
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Date: 12/25/2015 3:43:00 PM
Thank you Richard; I always give heed to your comments; they come with sense. // paul
Date: 12/16/2015 7:15:00 PM
awesome and very relevant to what is going on this election year.
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Date: 12/16/2015 2:23:00 PM
Such a title would always attract a reader. Love it, love the poetry also, words so true ~~ James ~~
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Date: 12/25/2015 3:37:00 PM
Yes, I admit that the title also served as a bait:) Glad that you liked, James. ~ All the best. // paul
Date: 12/16/2015 10:51:00 AM
Absolutely faithful to the rules! Astounding result! Have enjoyed it, dear Paul!
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Date: 12/25/2015 3:28:00 PM
You are kind and generous, Demi! Thank you! Hope you have enjoyed a merry and blessed Christmas day. ~ Regards // paul
Date: 12/16/2015 10:37:00 AM
and the publicity, sensationalism, vote chasing begin once more, paul... our national elections are forthcoming next year; this splendid write is timely and clever...huggs
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Date: 12/25/2015 3:17:00 PM
You can always use it when you go out for election, Nette:)) Thank you for the positive and enjoyable feedback! Hugs *~* paul
Date: 12/16/2015 6:30:00 AM
Really your fave form? :D? heheheh :P anyways, catchy title. I remember the movie JUmanji.. =`) but in a way very symbolic in the poem.. =`) NIce one Paul! And thank you for telling me more about Kyrielle hehehe.. And its good I only stick to *syllables.. =`) ~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:39:00 PM
Hi Olive_eloi! Sorry for the late reply, but I know you understand:) It is a lovely form; definitely easier than our first co-write!!:) Thank you for your pleasant comments, as usual:) Hugs // paul
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Date: 12/16/2015 6:31:00 AM
Sorry for being cheeky, weeeee! winks! ;) but the form is tough but I enjoyed writing it.. =`)
Date: 12/16/2015 4:47:00 AM
- The elephant gives fear and coercion - This is proof that there are weaknesses (which tries to hide) - A great poem, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/16/2015 1:48:00 AM
Tough form, really effective to convey what needs to be said! Sure will fly high.. best wishes Paul!
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Date: 12/16/2015 12:42:00 AM
Excellent. Sound so true. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it
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Date: 12/23/2015 4:08:00 PM
Thank you for the 'excellent' comments, Ravi; so pleased that you liked it. All the best, paul
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