Paul Callus Poet Kyrielle

Notes About The Poem

There Is An Elephant In the Room

The big headlines cause sensation,
Media’s chosen information.
Manipulative, they entomb
the big elephant in the room.

Stress is put on the suggestive
keeping tongue and the mind active.
They sweep aside with furtive broom
the big elephant in the room.

Gain is high on the agenda
grabbing votes in referenda.
They hide, on purpose, I presume
the big elephant in the room.

Many topics are selective;
they are made to look attractive.
Who dares to tickle with a plume
the big elephant in the room?

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A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains, each containing a repeating line at the end of each stanza. Each line within the poem consists of eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum. Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB.
This form is a pleasure to use because of its rhyming scheme and the strong pivotal line on which the whole poem rotates.
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Premiere Contest No. 13
Sponsor: Skat A  (2016)
 
Contest: Poetry Writing #1
Sponsor: Broken Wings
Placed 1st
15th December 2015

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Beautiful Scars October 1, 2016 at 10:42 AM Paul, I love this form, I have never tried it, I just may :) Winning worthy poem you have written here sweet Paul :congratulations on your placement :)-luloo) Paul Callus October 2, 2016 at 6:48 AM Many thanks to you, Laura:) Always a pleasure to have you stopping by:) Have a lovely day! Regards // paul

Skat A October 1, 2016 at 9:15 AM Paul, Congrats on your win. Stop by my blog "in a perfect world" and celebrate with a smile or two. With Hugs **SKAT** Paul Callus October 2, 2016 at 6:46 AM Thank you Skat; pleased to be on your winners' list:) Hugs // paul

Timothy Hicks February 22, 2016 at 2:40 PM Love where you went with this metaphor. Everyone's know it's there, staring us in the face ... but like dummies we just stare at it. "Who dares to tickle with a plume the big elephant in the room?" A media so out of control, that the slightest nudge can send the stampede. Congrats on your winning piece and using the repetition skillfully to your advantage. Paul Callus February 23, 2016 at 3:28 PM Thank you for the insightful feedback, Timothy. Always a pleasure reading your comments...and seeing the bright smile on the new avatar:) ~ Regards // paul

Daniel Turner January 14, 2016 at 1:21 PM The biased government controlled media... Is this a grat country or what? I love it. Paul Callus January 14, 2016 at 2:05 PM You read it well, Daniel! Thank you for stopping by:) ~ Regards // paul

John Hamilton January 11, 2016 at 11:34 AM I enjoyed very much this nice form, think I will try it, I love all rhymes this was exceptional. Belated congrats. Paul Callus January 11, 2016 at 4:26 PM Glad that you liked both poem and form , John. I encourage you to try it; it will bring you satisfaction. ~ Regards // paul

Maurice Yvonne January 4, 2016 at 12:50 AM A great read from the first word to the last. You used the form seamlessly to accommodate the poets message. A Fav, congratulations on your first place win. Paul Callus January 4, 2016 at 1:07 PM You are kind and generous, Armand! Thank you for the great comments and the fav. ~ Wishing you all the best for 2016! ~ Regards // paul

Etienne Lariviere December 23, 2015 at 2:55 PM tres bien Paul, fanastique! Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 1:49 PM Thank you very much Etienne....for reading and liking this poem! Regards // paul

Michael Tor December 19, 2015 at 5:41 AM Wow Paul great witty write. Love this form and congratulations on your 1st placement win my friend!! Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:03 PM Many thanks, Michael; excuse the late reply. All the best. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 18, 2015 at 10:27 PM Back again with big congrats on ur top place win Paul!! Paul Callus December 23, 2015 at 4:16 PM Pardon the late reply, Upma. I liked your previous comments, and thank you for having faith in this poem of mine; now I also thank you for coming back with congrats.:) ~ regards *~* paul

Skat A December 18, 2015 at 9:33 PM Paul, Congratulations on your sweet win Luv **SKAT** Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:53 PM Thank you, Skat. Always lovely to have you knocking at my door:) hugs // paul

Joseph May December 18, 2015 at 9:19 PM Congrats on your win Paul... Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:25 PM Thank you Joseph. ~ Wishing you all the best. // paul

Poet Destroyer A December 18, 2015 at 9:17 PM Paul, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN.... LINDA Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:58 PM Thank you dear Linda:) Hope you are having a lovely festive holiday! hugs // paul

Rob Carmack December 18, 2015 at 5:27 PM I will have to try this form sometime. A good example you wrote here. Congrats on your win. Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:18 PM It's my first attempt at this form Rob, but will definitely try it again! Thank you for reading and the congrats. ~ Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich December 18, 2015 at 4:23 PM Just love the Kyrielle. Glad someone showed it and congrats for your win. Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:52 PM Many thanks, Andrea. You Etherees made you proud, too! ~ Regards // paul

Jan Allison December 18, 2015 at 2:24 PM Dropping by with my congrats - I will never forget this topical poem Paul lol:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus December 23, 2015 at 4:07 PM Thank you, Jan:) I'm so backwards in replying to comments, though!! Hugs // paul

Afolabi Muideen December 17, 2015 at 12:55 PM Apart from message within the poem, I enjoyed the form it worth giving a try. This poem reach the extremity of brilliance.........A.M. Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 3:00 PM Pleased that you liked both poem and form, Afolabi...thank you! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux December 17, 2015 at 9:08 AM You did this well and the origin of the form works well with the topic chosen. Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 3:43 PM Thank you Richard; I always give heed to your comments; they come with sense. // paul

Andrea Dietrich December 16, 2015 at 7:15 PM awesome and very relevant to what is going on this election year.

James Fraser December 16, 2015 at 2:23 PM Such a title would always attract a reader. Love it, love the poetry also, words so true ~~ James ~~ Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 3:37 PM Yes, I admit that the title also served as a bait:) Glad that you liked, James. ~ All the best. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis December 16, 2015 at 10:51 AM Absolutely faithful to the rules! Astounding result! Have enjoyed it, dear Paul! Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 3:28 PM You are kind and generous, Demi! Thank you! Hope you have enjoyed a merry and blessed Christmas day. ~ Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud December 16, 2015 at 10:37 AM and the publicity, sensationalism, vote chasing begin once more, paul... our national elections are forthcoming next year; this splendid write is timely and clever...huggs Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 3:17 PM You can always use it when you go out for election, Nette:)) Thank you for the positive and enjoyable feedback! Hugs *~* paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 16, 2015 at 6:30 AM Really your fave form? :D? heheheh :P anyways, catchy title. I remember the movie JUmanji.. =`) but in a way very symbolic in the poem.. =`) NIce one Paul! And thank you for telling me more about Kyrielle hehehe.. And its good I only stick to *syllables.. =`) ~Olive Eloisa =`) Paul Callus December 25, 2015 at 2:39 PM Hi Olive_eloi! Sorry for the late reply, but I know you understand:) It is a lovely form; definitely easier than our first co-write!!:) Thank you for your pleasant comments, as usual:) Hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 16, 2015 at 6:31 AM Sorry for being cheeky, weeeee! winks! ;) but the form is tough but I enjoyed writing it.. =`)

Anne-Lise Andresen December 16, 2015 at 4:47 AM - The elephant gives fear and coercion - This is proof that there are weaknesses (which tries to hide) - A great poem, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 16, 2015 at 1:48 AM Tough form, really effective to convey what needs to be said! Sure will fly high.. best wishes Paul!

Ravi Sathasivam December 16, 2015 at 12:42 AM Excellent. Sound so true. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it Paul Callus December 23, 2015 at 4:08 PM Thank you for the 'excellent' comments, Ravi; so pleased that you liked it. All the best, paul

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