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The Wayward Shall in Stillness Rise Eternal

Spring, lifeless in palm
Rendered inarticulate
By winter held hard
~the~
Erroneous truth
Breath of light traces the mind
Opens eye upward
~wayward~
Icon, tomb of flesh
Buries the heart, withers love
Weeping silence blind
~shall~
In red cut fields strike
The fallen shield, kin in death
Haunting song lament
~in stillness~
Raise the sea skyward
Seduce in brutal madness
Thunder sings soundless
~rise~
And scream into light
A beating distant land, where
Dormant blooms tremble
~eternal~

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Date: 1/25/2024 6:52:00 PM
Very poignant haiku....you capture the movement of seasons, from the harsh to the tenderness. Paulette
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/26/2024 7:46:00 AM
thank you for taking the time, paulette
Date: 1/23/2024 6:52:00 AM
I loved the metaphorical context of your poem and how the wayward (people and blossoms) shall rise. Masterfully done. Enjoyed it.
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/23/2024 11:16:00 AM
thank you sara - kindest regards
Date: 1/22/2024 6:47:00 PM
Mat, your poem is a amazing journey through seasons and emotions. The stark contrast between spring's lifelessness and winter's grip is beautifully depicted. The imagery of the wayward icon, tomb of flesh, and weeping silence adds layers of complexity. Your strategically use words to convey the rise into stillness and the eternal bloom is masterful. An evocative piece that resonates with me with depth and emotion. - Blessings, Daniel
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/23/2024 11:15:00 AM
thank you for the response - my gratitude
Date: 1/22/2024 9:57:00 AM
This is as original as it is unique. You have a gifted voice.
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/22/2024 1:16:00 PM
kindest regards
Date: 1/22/2024 1:02:00 AM
This is a wonderful poem. The poem was masterfully crafted,with each line like the beat of a drum. I love it a lot
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/22/2024 1:16:00 PM
my appreciation

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