The Watchmaker

spot scope focused down surgeon's hands nimbly adjust waiting for my time

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Moonbee Canady

Date: 9/13/2009 6:09:00 PM

Great Play On Words... If I didn't know the Title... I Would have thought uh-oh... I'm Still Awake ! Very Nice Time-Piece (Smile) MoonBee

Raul Moreno

Date: 9/13/2009 2:52:00 PM

James, this senryu speaks volumes, loved it...Raul

Sue Mason

Date: 9/13/2009 1:12:00 PM

Awesome use of this form, James !! I've often marveled at a watchmaker's skills !!

Danny Nunn

Date: 9/13/2009 9:27:00 AM

A fine write Jim, when I do watch repair, it takes a bottle of Jim Bean, a big hammer and a anvil? Thanks for the good words on Model T Poetry and the others, glad you liked them...Danny

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/13/2009 8:25:00 AM

It takes a delicate touch......and concentration!....

P Sheart

Date: 9/13/2009 8:00:00 AM

Hi Jim Ah, I know this feeling well, had surgery this summer. It's amazing the thoughts that go through your head just before you go under. A thought provoking Senryu. Thanks to for your most welcome comments. Take care Love Light Truth Patricia

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/13/2009 6:19:00 AM

all time is your time..you have mail! Light & Love

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/13/2009 6:06:00 AM

I feel a sense of waiting..The Watch maker--i love the title Jim...Yes lets trust our time in the watchmakers hands,in my senryu that would be God... :)i enjoy your writes so much Jim--Charma

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/13/2009 5:55:00 AM

Scary time seems like. Nicely done. Sara

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/13/2009 5:39:00 AM

Somehow, I see this as the wait for birth. Of course, that may be because my nephew and his wife just had a baby after years of trying. My sister, who is 11 years older than I, couldn't be more delighted. Obviously, this is quite a thought-provoking senryu. Nice work, James! Love, Carolyn