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The Visage of the One Inside

I thought I saw, just passing by
Another form, another face
And though I could not tell you why
They disappeared without a trace

Somewhat intrigued by what I saw
I lingered there with great concern
And though I felt my stomach gnaw
I waited for that soul's return

A steady rain was falling fast
When suddenly, to my surprise
The figure from my recent past
Resumed a spot before my eyes 

Although my clothes were old and torn
My frame of mind was not ashamed
For when I saw that face forlorn
I knew their soul could not be blamed

A chilly wind was blowing hard
But still that person did not budge
Nor leave their spot across the yard
From where they stood to be my judge

I did not run or hide just then
For when I thought what they must think
I felt my soul renew again
By someone standing on the brink

But then a motor car appeared
To catch a curb that swelled with rain
I felt the splash and what I feared
Became the soul who cried in vain

I should have lingered soaking wet
A victim of my foolish pride
But who could stay and not forget
The visage of the one inside.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 9/7/2020 1:26:00 AM
Congratulations Bryan on your 1st place in the competition. You write the type of poems I love to read.
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/7/2020 5:57:00 AM
Thank you, Gary. I like to be accessible. I want to help the general public to enjoy reading good poetry. To see what can be done with words, with rhyme and wordplay. Poetry should be the orgasmic fulfillment of English Literature, not the bane of it.
Date: 9/6/2020 5:22:00 PM
This has depth and hidden nuance that is raw, haunting. Great write Bryan. Congrats on the win.
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/6/2020 6:22:00 PM
Good to hear from you again. Thank you for your kindly comments. Take care, my friend.
Date: 9/6/2020 4:53:00 PM
Great rhyme. Congrats on the win! Linda
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/6/2020 6:21:00 PM
Thank you, Linda. Good luck in your poetic future.
Date: 9/6/2020 4:18:00 PM
Congrats on a great win!:)
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/6/2020 4:25:00 PM
Thank you, Brenda. Take care.
Date: 9/6/2020 3:00:00 PM
wow, Bryan, outstanding work and look there . You scored really high with this. Mine did not even make it to HMs!! Congrats
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/6/2020 4:24:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I got lucky, you got talent!
Date: 9/6/2020 3:00:00 PM
I scanned for the poem you mentioned but did not see it. Can you tell me its date?
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/6/2020 4:23:00 PM
Yes, 2/8/2020
Date: 9/5/2020 10:13:00 AM
Bryan this is heartbreaking. Your words just reach out to capture the reader. So often we walk pass those wearing rags and not remember they once had a life that is brought back to life by seeing a "form" or a "face." Thank you for sharing this perspective. I think this should be a POTD.
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Bryan Norton
Date: 9/5/2020 10:42:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words and perspective, and especially for your feelings. I enjoyed writing this poem and feeling those feelings along the way. Best wishes, Bryan.

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