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The Victim - Through Their Eyes 2

You stood in the dock when the guilty verdict was read out … Just a spotty youth with a cocky look in your eyes Now sentenced to five years in prison, I hope you rot in hell! The defence team tried to make out that YOU were the victim You had drug and alcohol issues, which catapulted you into a life of crime I had to sit there and hear about your past Was I supposed to feel sorry for you? What about me, the real victim… You’d entered my house, hell bent on stealing what little I had I handed over my widow's pension but you weren’t satisfied Demanding more, you began shouting obscenities at me You started trashing my house trying to find my jewellery High on drugs - you were like a wild animal Your fists rained down like bullets … you beat me senseless My daughter found me unconscious, lying in a pool of blood I spent weeks in hospital Now I’m terrified of being on my own and have moved in with my daughter I couldn’t go back into the house I so loved You will be out of prison in a few years… I have a life sentence Through their eyes 2 – Sponsored by Shadow Hamilton 08~12~16

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Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 8/17/2016 10:34:00 PM

Great poem and we so hate those who denude us of everything in one simple action of greed...those robbers! I remember coming back home with a gold chain to gift my toddler for his birthday and I was attacked by a thief who took away my bag!....Well Congrats. Sunita

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/17/2016 2:55:00 PM

dramatic and powerful Jan congrats on 4th place hugs

Joseph May

Date: 8/17/2016 12:59:00 PM

Powerful write Jan...hope it's fictional...Congrats on your win

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/17/2016 9:11:00 AM

Well told story, congrats Jan.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/17/2016 7:28:00 AM

So true, Jan, so many crimes present a life sentence on the victims. Great write!

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/16/2016 8:02:00 PM

Hi Jan, I just came back to say congratulations on your winning write- Alexis

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 8/14/2016 11:39:00 AM

Resonates with me a lot and thus made me feel. Good luck with the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2016 12:01:00 PM

Thanks Kai - makes me so angry to think the victim has to live with the trauma forever yet the culprit gets out after a few years... probably straight out to offend again:-( hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 8/13/2016 6:15:00 PM

Hi Jan, well you have written an excellent piece, because as i read i could feel the anger rising inside me. You made this write raw and real and if i had got my hands on the cocky little git, HELL TO PAY, and then i realised, it isn't real you dipstick. You really can't take me anywhere Jan, not if you want to go back. I would say this should do well but what i say doesn't mean anything when it is a contest. It is better to say i wish you well with this write Jan. A 7 and fav. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 8:22:00 PM

I couldn't motivate myself to write for the last contest which was about committing murder, but I was happier to write for this one - makes my blood boil when you see these lowlifes in the dock smiling knowing they will be out in a short time:-( hugs jan xx

Phillip Garcia

Date: 8/13/2016 8:25:00 AM

Goodness Jan. You cut straight to the core with this beautiful write. Nice to see you getting jiggy with the free verse too. Very well done

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 9:01:00 AM

Don't give up Phillip - I ramble on too lol - I just write and hope:-) hugs Jan xx

Phillip Garcia
Date: 8/13/2016 8:34:00 AM

Yet you still managed to keep it very concise and to the point. Very impressive. The 3 times I've tried free verse I always end up turning everyone into a robotic spider during a ramble so I gave up on it. For humanity's sake

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 8:31:00 AM

Thanks Phillip - I love the freedom of free verse - no syllable restrictions or rhyme:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/13/2016 7:38:00 AM

Oh dear....this is a riveting write, Jan. One can only imagine the pain...the fear...the hopelessness. The life sentence is truly the victim's lot to bear. Great write. Hugs from Cyprus.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 7:42:00 AM

Thanks Eileen - you have hit the nail on the head with your comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 8/13/2016 7:28:00 AM

Wow! Very powerful write yourself!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 7:41:00 AM

Thanks Mike - All too often the perpetrator gets out early on parole and sadly the victim can have a life sentence after the trauma of the crime:-( hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/13/2016 6:04:00 AM

That was a surprise ending, I loved it absolutely, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 7:09:00 AM

Thanks Jo:-) I didn't do the first contest with a murder poem but thought I would do the victim one more easily:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 8/13/2016 12:57:00 AM

Very well thought out and written Jan - all the best with the contest. Mark

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2016 4:51:00 AM

Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/12/2016 3:22:00 PM

A great piece on the victim's point of view which is unfortunately often not thought of yet the lasting effects are devastating. The last line is a powerful one that perfectly portrays the emotions you have vividly penned. Terrific writing, my best to you for the contest:-) bundles of blessings, lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2016 3:33:00 PM

Thanks Lynn.. I've seen pictures in the press of elderly people being beaten up for a few pounds and the effect on their lives is so devastating:-( hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/12/2016 2:05:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is a good take on the contest theme. You let the reader see into the mind of victim. I agree, when a aweful thing like this happens the victim is never actually free. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A Big seven: -) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2016 2:11:00 PM

It must be an absolutely terrifying experience that will always remain with you:-( hugs jan xx