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The Veiled Depths - Constanza

Beside the surf she lay, a heap
Of broken hope, like bones, now crushed
And burning lips, forever hushed.

From eyes to sea, her briny weep
Gave solemn witness to her fears
The love now draining with her tears.

Thus bled her heart into the deep
With love that spoiled in other arms
Abiding not its throbbing harms.

To there, perhaps, imbue it sleep
For pain was all that coursed within
Yet fathoms, black, would drown its sin

Or dark and still, its secrets, keep
A passion's crime that stained her red
Her love, his lover ... cold and dead. 

Beside the surf she lay, a heap
From eye to sea, her briny weep
Thus bled her heart into the deep
To there, perhaps, imbue it sleep
Or dark and still, its secrets, keep.




* SECOND PLACE in the "Premiere Contest Number 370" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor. *

* SECOND PLACE in the "Constanza" Poetry Contest, Craig Cornish, Sponsor. *
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Pigeon Tart Avatar
December 26, 2017 at 8:43 AM
A fantastic pen Greg! How I missed this one I don't know. Congratulations on win, win, and top spot! Muchos hugs my friend <3
Barden Avatar
December 30, 2017 at 8:48 PM
Thank you so very much, Mo - I'm pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-) <3
Manassian Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 10:48 PM
Congrats on your placement, Greg. It is well deserved. You captured the pain here so well. Very gripping. Thanks for your visit to my entry.
Barden Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 11:21 PM
That's very kind of you, Eileen, I'm pleased you enjoyed it - thank you so very much! Blessings and best wishes! :-) <3
Williams Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 4:28 PM
Greg, excellent job on this Constanza. I like how you appropriately match the dark, edgy imagery to the tragic nature of the story. Way to step up to a newer form of poetry. Very nicely done! All my best. :) Bartholomew
Barden Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 11:20 PM
Thank you very much, Bartholomew, it was fun to take on a new form, and a very lovely form that Connie has created. A very enjoyable experience - blessings, friend! :-)
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 6:37 PM
Your Constanza is simply outstanding Greg! You have made my form shine brilliantly! Congratulations on your well deserved Second placement! This goes into my Faves! : )
Barden Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 10:17 PM
I am honored that you enjoyed my poem, Connie, and that you appreciated my take on your wonderful form - I really enjoyed writing in this style, and I thank you so much for the kind comment and for saying that I have done it justice. This put a smile on my face, my friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Haight Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 4:17 PM
Congratulations, Gregory, on your well-deserved win for this lovely, outstanding poem in the Constanza form. Sandra
Barden Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 10:15 PM
Thank you so kindly, Sandra, I'm so pleased you liked it! :-)
Rodrigues Avatar
December 8, 2017 at 10:07 AM
A double-winner! Nicely done! Congrats!
Barden Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 12:15 AM
Thank you so much, Kim - very much appreciated! :-) <3
Gibson Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 3:35 PM
Just recently back on the soup and discovering your poetry; I am enjoying reading it very much. This is so well written. Well deserved win. Thank for your kind comments on my poems.
Barden Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 7:28 PM
I am very glad to meet you, and I hope you'll consider me a friend. Welcome back! Blessings to you and yours! :-) <3
Barden Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 7:27 PM
That's so sweet of you, Faye, and I so appreciate your kind comments! I joined the Soup exactly a year ago (today) when I decided to take this poetry thing seriously. I wrote short stories in high school and won the Payson-Bird Prize as a Freshman, but never took writing, especially poetry, seriously until a little over a year ago. It (and PS) has become a refuge for me, and I have found so much healing in it, and so many amazing friends here as well.
Stebbings Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 1:41 PM
Well deserved place, Gregory, with this sad Constanza. // Barry
Barden Avatar
December 7, 2017 at 7:29 PM
Thank you so much, Barry - I so appreciate it, friend! :-)
Hamilton Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 10:07 PM
Hey Greg, nice to see this one flying high and getting all the accolades it/you deserve. Craig does have a good eye for quality!
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 10:32 PM
Many thanks to you, John, I greatly appreciate the kind comments, Bro! :-)
Mohn Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:49 PM
terrific Gregory...nicely written!
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 10:31 PM
Very kind of you, David, thank you so much, friend! :-)
Roper Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:26 PM
Wow! Magnificent, Gregory, congratulations on your awesome win!
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 10:30 PM
Thank you very much, Eve, I'm glad you liked it! :-) <3
Gauthier Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 8:33 PM
Congrats again, Gregory. Well deserved win!
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:21 PM
Very sweet of you, Line - thank you so much! You are a gem in every way! :-) <3
Cornish Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:46 PM
Greg, you are amazing and I'm in awe of your abilities to adapt to both form and message----few have your talent.
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:18 PM
Oh, that's very kind of you to say so, Craig, and I am so honored and blessed to be on a list with such great poets ... so pleased you found it worthy, my friend. Blessings and thanks to you, Sir! :-)
Callus Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:18 PM
A beautiful and smooth flowing Constanza, Gregory. Congratulations on your podium finish. Regards // paul
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:17 PM
Very kind of you, Paul, and thanks so much! Blessings! :-)
Gentile Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 3:05 PM
Congrats on your win !
Barden Avatar
December 6, 2017 at 9:16 PM
Thank you, Mike!
Gauthier Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 12:48 PM
Enjoyed. A beautiful read, Gregory.
Barden Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 2:27 PM
Thanks so kindly, Line!
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