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The Valley of Loss

my life is like a sad VALLEY OF LOSS, a HOLLOW canyon in a dark a b y s s- like a tombstone covered in chartreuse moss, for it’s my steep p r o m i n e n c e that I miss. I used to live a life of cheerful bliss, when I was grateful for my creation- now this gorge brings a d a r k e n e d sensation, my poor soul WEEPS with words that never rhyme, stuck in this pit of obliteration; seems like my h o u r g l a s s has run out of time. my life is like a sad valley of GRIEF, with one t o o m a n y glasses of merlot- oh, I just can’t find a mount of relief, finding it hard to let my heartbreak go. I’m stuck in a BASIN of a vale’s woe- the ravine has poured into my despair, nothing left to do, no one good to care. out my windowpane I still wail and MOURN, searching through old memoirs when life was fair... ...now my heart's valley is DEPRESSED and TORN. Empty Your Soul With Words Contest Dizain: ABABBCCDCD 10 syllables in each line 200 syllables total checked syllables: howmanysyllables.com www.rhymer.com Sponsor, Broken Wings Date: November 13, 2017

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Date: 12/9/2017 3:27:00 PM
Gorgeous write, Laura - enjoyed this from beginning to end - just beautiful! Congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend - blessings!
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Date: 11/26/2017 7:57:00 AM
An outstanding poem, Laura. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/26/2017 7:16:00 AM
Laura, oh you never fail to pen me a beauty and this one is so full of emotion, congratulations on your win in my contest !
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Date: 11/26/2017 1:26:00 AM
Congratulations, Laura, on a moving piece, a worthy topster. Viv x
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Date: 11/25/2017 5:41:00 PM
Such an emotive write LuLoo I knew when I read it how much it would appeal to Constance:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/25/2017 1:46:00 PM
This write is laid out so well Laura I enjoyed this very much, congratulations
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Date: 11/15/2017 7:24:00 AM
Dear Luloo, hope you get over your valley of loss soon and climb up the mountain of hope:) well done and heartfelt:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 11/20/2017 7:23:00 AM
many thanks sweet Jo, this was more of an emotive write for the contest...:)
Date: 11/13/2017 12:04:00 PM
The valley is always there, awaiting our return but in the sadness, tears and loss, each of us are reborn. Good luck in the contest. DMB
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Lu Loo
Date: 11/20/2017 7:23:00 AM
thank you DMB :)

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