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Unsupervised Stop Sign Contest Sponsored by Craig Cornish 10/09/23

sadly my poem is based on a true story

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The lure of the inky depths of the dark web... too much temptation for innocents out for a good time Were they foolhardy or simply naïve sadly for them unsupervised there was no stop sign I guess they couldn’t resist the attraction of illicit drugs posted through their door by an unsuspecting mail man Grieving parents still mourn the loss of two beloved sons Their final resting place an ice cold mortuary slab

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Hilo Poet

Date: 10/30/2023 6:28:00 PM

The repercussions are sadly being realized by the loved ones, and the loss goes on without end. Though 'tis a poignant entry, Jan, an understood complimentary, my friend. Aloha, William

Eve Roper

Date: 10/29/2023 10:25:00 PM

Great write, Jan. I love the way you interpreted the stop sign. Congratulations on your win.

Karen Jones

Date: 10/29/2023 2:21:00 PM

Back to say CONGRATS on a win.

Deb M

Date: 10/16/2023 9:49:00 PM

Sad sad sad….wasted lives! Nice write Jan! Debx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 10/12/2023 3:46:00 PM

Ketamine horse tranquilizer Spice fish food Equates to Brain dead Just wrote a poem if you get the chance Jan please read it i think you may hopefully like it Its called Fly on the Wall

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2023 3:51:00 PM

the lads took mdma, first tablets didnt have much effect so they took more and never woke up, their only sons dead aged 17 and 19, it still breaks my heart to see the beakers in the cupboard they used when they came to play:-( hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/11/2023 2:32:00 AM

- Woow, Jan ...(a story I've heard/read before and I know it's true) - It's so easy to fall into this trap... curiosity and naivety ... - The last two lines are powerful ( and ice cold) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2023 2:48:00 AM

Thanks Anne-Lise I have written several poems about the 2 boys but the contest prompt was a perfect time to write again. hugs jan xx

Arlo Parker

Date: 10/10/2023 8:42:00 AM

Poignant piece. So much truth. :-/

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2023 9:28:00 AM

Shame some folk don't read poems like this Arlo I can write a decent 'real' poem from time to time. hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 10/10/2023 4:27:00 AM

So sad, Jan. It's no surprise- drugs kill. Not only with over-doses, but carelessness and unawareness too. Heartfelt prayers to their parents. BOL in the contest. Hugs Charlie xx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2023 9:27:00 AM

yeah this boiled down to naivety i guess but sadly 2 young lives were lost. hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/10/2023 2:13:00 AM

Unfortunately, we have too many of the overdoses resulting in death. Great poem, very emotional. Blessings.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2023 9:26:00 AM

I know the over dose was accidental they didnt know the strength of the drugs and when they didnt seem to take any effect they took more, the dose being fatal:-( hugs Jan xx

Karen Jones

Date: 10/9/2023 11:26:00 PM

Oh such a sad story! I hate the pain and suffering drug abuse and overdose cause. Hoping the family can somehow go one in spite of such a devastating loss. So sad.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2023 9:25:00 AM

It happened in 2014 my heart breaks for the parents:-( hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 10/9/2023 8:37:00 PM

This is a sad story my friend. One of the problems of THC gummies is that it takes a bit for them to work. Many people don't realize and think they are not working so the take more and more and don't realize what they've done until it is too late. Hugs my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 10:13:00 PM

just read he got 16 yrs... he was arrested at Gatwick Airport attempting to board a flight to South Africa on a one-way ticket.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 10:10:00 PM

its a heartbreaking story Jerry, they took some of the drugs, didn't seem to be working so they took more .. why it is called ecstasy is beyond me. police were able to prosecute the seller who got a prison sentence but the poor parents have a life sentence and their son's 'killer' will be out and probably be back doing what he was before

Deb M

Date: 10/9/2023 2:41:00 PM

Hi Jan….well written and sadly oh so common and oh so true! Bloody drugs! Debx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 2:48:00 PM

they got drugs off the dark web, they didn't seem to have any effect so took more, sadly they never woke up:-( hugs jan xx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/9/2023 2:31:00 PM

a truthful, but sad commentary about the downside of the dark web for the naive. Well said, Jan. have a pleasant evening, Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 2:48:00 PM

thanks Sara, i think of them every day, hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 10/9/2023 2:30:00 PM

A similar true story told throughout the world, much too often. A tale of woe, but well told, Jan.

Lin Lane
Date: 10/9/2023 4:03:00 PM

stop that. You ARE a real poet.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 2:47:00 PM

Sadly its a true story Lin I think of the lads every day, perhaps one day I will be seen as a real poet!:-( hugs Jan xx

Yann Rolland

Date: 10/9/2023 2:18:00 PM

so sad, i have no words, never touch drogue if choice, yann

Jan Allison
Date: 10/9/2023 2:20:00 PM

Sadly its a true story was 2 school pals of my sons, they used to play at our house, they lost their lives aged 17 and 19:-( hugs jan xx