The Umbrella

the wind pops like a ball hitting a wall
boy of 3 years struggles to control his small,
                                            opened umbrella 
a turtle shell shape with turtle head and tail
its black/green lines, a turtle grid of folly

boy laughing beneath a dome of turtle armour
       tosseled by the wind
he holds the handle tightly even though no rain falls
his mother encourages its closure
to anchor meanderings that blow a lad astray

what makes a boy's balance manageable to hold?
achievable wants?
unwilted expectations?

a mother's ponder, will his shell grow with him?
what of the circle shaped by her embrace?

sometimes we don't know which way is up
sometimes we choose an arid shelter
sometimes coverings collapse
                      like many selves folded into one
                      under clouds of one's own making



Poem composed May 1, 2023
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Kingston Avatar
July 5, 2023 at 9:34 PM
Lucky are those who are strong and protected on the outside, but still slightly shy and vulnerable on the inside, with the type of mother who can encourage bravery and self confidence under that child's umbrella or shell of safety, without hoovering. Tough for even adults to know "which way is up" at times. Your last stanza was my favorite. I love your "pondering" poem
Sambourne Avatar
July 5, 2023 at 9:53 PM
Hello Marikate, Your detailed response to my posting was a delight to read. Thank you for the supportive words + your insight. So true - "up" isn't always easy to discern. Enjoy the summer. Stay cool. Best wishes, Brian
Callus Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 10:52 AM
Excellent when one delves into this poem's metaphorical musing, Brian. ~ Regards // paul
Sambourne Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 7:46 PM
Thank you, Paul, for your affirmative evaluation. Much appreciated. Brian
Blake Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 11:07 PM
Great poem Brian. Giving a very humorous vision of a small boy struggling against the elements and then moving my thoughts on to deeper meaning as I read on. Love it ~ Clive :)
Sambourne Avatar
May 5, 2023 at 12:05 PM
Thanks very much Clive, for your supportive message. I appreciate the message. Best wishes, Brian
Kauffman Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 10:48 AM
Brian, wonderful metaphoric write. Your choice of symbols - the growing boy, the turtle umbrella, the storm and the protective shell - speak your theme as eloquently as the mother's love. The deeper meanings keep unfolding for me like an umbrella being raised up in the rain. Congratulations on your win. This is a very special, beautifully crafted, poem. Blessings!
Sambourne Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 11:29 AM
Hello Sam, Most gratifying that your reading picked up on the metaphoric value of shelter. From boy to turtle we need our domes of protection, as even a mother's encircling arms provide that. And yes, there are always storms. Thanks again for your message. Brian
Andresen Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 10:00 AM
- Not easy for a child to handle an umbrella in rain and wind, Brian :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) -
Sambourne Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 11:26 AM
Thank you the sunshine message. I thought my poem might be too confusing for some in its intention - the coverings that we shelter under. Be well. Brian
Goldsmith Avatar
May 3, 2023 at 9:57 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write. Love It. Have a blessed day..................
Sambourne Avatar
May 8, 2023 at 10:26 AM
Dear Paula Your support is unfailing. My gratitude for your thoughtfulness. Sincerely, Brian
Poet Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 9:18 PM
Brian, Congratulations on crafting such a lovely poem that combines the elegance of poetry with the wisdom of thought.
Sambourne Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 9:37 PM
My sincere appreciation for the placement, Laasad. I really struggled with the poem + may tinker with it yet again. Your acknowledgement is much valued. Yours truly, Brian
Turner Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 7:51 AM
Sounds like a normal procession of events, one can always put the shelves back up and start over.. We do indeed make our own destiny. Great writing, Brian . I like your style:)
Sambourne Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 7:54 PM
So many umbrellas, Daniel. We often take the coverings for granted till they erode. As you well observe, our many sided self follows the path chosen. Thank you for your comments + stop by. I may revise the piece however.. Brian
Blown Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 1:58 AM
....nicely writ.....one's mind shell pictures that decor the shield may be lost one day in a...."slightist"..... breeze.....reality be random........stan
Sambourne Avatar
May 2, 2023 at 7:49 PM
Thank you, Stan for your stop by + observations. The piece is about shells, protective coverings + their inevitable falling away. Be well. Brian
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