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The Umbrella

the wind pops like a ball hitting a wall boy of 3 years struggles to control his small, opened umbrella a turtle shell shape with turtle head and tail its black/green lines, a turtle grid of folly boy laughing beneath a dome of turtle armour tosseled by the wind he holds the handle tightly even though no rain falls his mother encourages its closure to anchor meanderings that blow a lad astray what makes a boy's balance manageable to hold? achievable wants? unwilted expectations? a mother's ponder, will his shell grow with him? what of the circle shaped by her embrace? sometimes we don't know which way is up sometimes we choose an arid shelter sometimes coverings collapse like many selves folded into one under clouds of one's own making Poem composed May 1, 2023

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Date: 7/5/2023 9:34:00 PM
Lucky are those who are strong and protected on the outside, but still slightly shy and vulnerable on the inside, with the type of mother who can encourage bravery and self confidence under that child's umbrella or shell of safety, without hoovering. Tough for even adults to know "which way is up" at times. Your last stanza was my favorite. I love your "pondering" poem
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/5/2023 9:53:00 PM
Hello Marikate, Your detailed response to my posting was a delight to read. Thank you for the supportive words + your insight. So true - "up" isn't always easy to discern. Enjoy the summer. Stay cool. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 5/10/2023 10:52:00 AM
Excellent when one delves into this poem's metaphorical musing, Brian. ~ Regards // paul
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/10/2023 7:46:00 PM
Thank you, Paul, for your affirmative evaluation. Much appreciated. Brian
Date: 5/3/2023 11:07:00 PM
Great poem Brian. Giving a very humorous vision of a small boy struggling against the elements and then moving my thoughts on to deeper meaning as I read on. Love it ~ Clive :)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/5/2023 12:05:00 PM
Thanks very much Clive, for your supportive message. I appreciate the message. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 5/3/2023 10:48:00 AM
Brian, wonderful metaphoric write. Your choice of symbols - the growing boy, the turtle umbrella, the storm and the protective shell - speak your theme as eloquently as the mother's love. The deeper meanings keep unfolding for me like an umbrella being raised up in the rain. Congratulations on your win. This is a very special, beautifully crafted, poem. Blessings!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/3/2023 11:29:00 AM
Hello Sam, Most gratifying that your reading picked up on the metaphoric value of shelter. From boy to turtle we need our domes of protection, as even a mother's encircling arms provide that. And yes, there are always storms. Thanks again for your message. Brian
Date: 5/3/2023 10:00:00 AM
- Not easy for a child to handle an umbrella in rain and wind, Brian :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) -
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/3/2023 11:26:00 AM
Thank you the sunshine message. I thought my poem might be too confusing for some in its intention - the coverings that we shelter under. Be well. Brian
Date: 5/3/2023 9:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write. Love It. Have a blessed day..................
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/8/2023 10:26:00 AM
Dear Paula Your support is unfailing. My gratitude for your thoughtfulness. Sincerely, Brian
Date: 5/2/2023 9:18:00 PM
Brian, Congratulations on crafting such a lovely poem that combines the elegance of poetry with the wisdom of thought.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/2/2023 9:37:00 PM
My sincere appreciation for the placement, Laasad. I really struggled with the poem + may tinker with it yet again. Your acknowledgement is much valued. Yours truly, Brian
Date: 5/2/2023 7:51:00 AM
Sounds like a normal procession of events, one can always put the shelves back up and start over.. We do indeed make our own destiny. Great writing, Brian . I like your style:)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/2/2023 7:54:00 PM
So many umbrellas, Daniel. We often take the coverings for granted till they erode. As you well observe, our many sided self follows the path chosen. Thank you for your comments + stop by. I may revise the piece however.. Brian
Date: 5/2/2023 1:58:00 AM
....nicely writ.....one's mind shell pictures that decor the shield may be lost one day in a...."slightist"..... breeze.....reality be random........stan
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/2/2023 7:49:00 PM
Thank you, Stan for your stop by + observations. The piece is about shells, protective coverings + their inevitable falling away. Be well. Brian

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