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Poetic Form: Lyric

Inspired: 2023 November 08

 

*1st Place*
12 Days Holiday (Christmas) (Hanukkah) (Yuletide) Your Region
Contest Judged: 2023 November 09
Sponsored by: Bj Legros Kelley

 

*endemic to Hawaii
Video: Live A Little (1992) by Hawaiian Style Band
Image: Mysteries of the Parrotfish by nottomatoes.worldpress.com

"Just live a little, Hawaiian style!" Quote by Hawaiian Style Band. On the first day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- (and...) a-*Ne-ne-Goose-un-der-a-gua-va-tree. (guava fruits are the best part of their diet--trust me) On the second day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- two *Gardenias (*Hawaiian gar-DE-nias or Nanu, Na'u, or Forest Gardenias are overwhelmingly fragrant white flowering plants, reminds me of the white version of a Black Narcissus) On the third day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- three *Monk Seals (rarest and most endangered marine mammals in the world) On the fourth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- four Mynah birds (migratory birds that become tree toppers as a good measure of life expectancy from most ground predators) On the fifth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- five Orchid leis (the most beautiful diverse flowering blooms in the world) On the sixth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- six *Laysan Finches (large passerine species of the Hawaiian Honeycreepers) On the seventh day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- seven *Squirrelfish swimming (underwater cave day-dwellers, activists at night) On the eighth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- eight poi main courses (two varieties--taro plants and ulu [breadfruit] trees; Hawaiian version of rice from the Orient to Idaho's potatoes) On the ninth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- nine red *Lehua (flower [lei-WHO-wah]; my legendary version can be found in My Short Stories, 'A HAWAIIAN FOLKLORE...', series) On the tenth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- ten Spiny Lobsters (*Hawaiian Banded Spiny Lobster or Ula [U-lah] translated means 'red') On the eleventh day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- eleven *Parrotfishes (ecosystem gems--coral cleaners whose poop creates sandy atolls--certainly makes you feel more relax lying down on our beaches) On the twelfth day of Christmas, my tutu gave to me, -- twelve Blackfoot sea snails (*Hawaiian Blackfoot or Opihi [oh-PEA-he] are a Hawaiian delicacy, and 'tho screamish, --they taste better when they're moving) -- twelve Blackfoot sea snails (*Hawaiian Blackfoot limpets) -- eleven *Parrotfishes -- ten Spiny Lobsters (*Hawaiian Banded Spiny Lobster) -- nine red *Lehuas -- eight poi main courses -- seven *Squirrelfish swimming -- six *Laysan Finches -- five Orchid leis -- four Mynah birds -- three *Monk Seals -- two Gardenias (*Hawaiian gar-DE-nias or Nanu) -- and a *Nene Goose under a guava tree! *endemic to Hawaii showing their proper names.

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Date: 11/10/2023 5:37:00 PM
Excellent! Congratulations!
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Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 6:16:00 PM
Mahalo, plenty, Kim. Aloha, William
Date: 11/10/2023 6:53:00 AM
I am in awe William. This is a beautiful poem, aside from being educational, it is exactly what BJ asked for, proper names and all. It is no mystery why this placed on top! Congratulations my dear friend. :)
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Date: 11/10/2023 7:21:00 AM
I am truly grateful that you're no mystery too, Linda. Again, I'm exceedingly glad of your good measure of kindness, my friend. Aloha, William
Date: 11/10/2023 1:49:00 AM
what a super informative poem William, many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs jan xx
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Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 3:00:00 AM
Top of the morning to you, Jan. A welcomed share and I'm happy for your visit, my friend. Aloha, William
Date: 11/9/2023 8:33:00 PM
Congratulations!!! Beautiful
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Hilo Poet
Date: 11/9/2023 9:05:00 PM
I am grateful, Karen. Aloha always, William
Date: 11/9/2023 8:26:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me learn with fun. God bless you.
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Date: 11/9/2023 9:04:00 PM
Blessings to you, Beata. May god be with you always. Aloha, William
Date: 11/9/2023 7:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement Hilo! This is a fantastic poem!
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Hilo Poet
Date: 11/9/2023 8:18:00 PM
Aloha, BJ. May your blessings be a constant joy, my friend. I extend my courtesies and Aloha, William
Date: 11/9/2023 7:15:00 PM
Big Congrats to win TOP on your wonderful poem. It’s simply unique. I was confused somehow and have not participated.But I enjoyed every line of your poem in full. Have Great Days on coming Christmas.
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Date: 11/9/2023 8:14:00 PM
Namaste, Anisha. I trust yours would have been a beauty, my friend. Aloha, William
Date: 11/9/2023 1:29:00 PM
wow, I sang it to the melody and pretty much matches up well. Good one.
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Date: 11/9/2023 2:06:00 PM
LOL, Andrea, as I did it syllabically and not so much lyrically--mayhaps next time, Cheers. Aloha, William
Date: 11/9/2023 8:58:00 AM
Dear William, it is evident that you possess an exceptional mastery of lyrical composition. Your exquisite articulation and meticulous craftsmanship are truly commendable. Your profound utilization of metaphors and remarkable ability to paint vivid imagery with words is truly awe-inspiring. I particularly admire your depiction of migratory birds. Furthermore, your attention to detail in showcasing various Hawaiian fauna is truly remarkable.
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Date: 11/9/2023 2:17:00 PM
My dear friend, Lasaad. I seemingly lost my sensations and feelings of my appendages--lest it's my physical therapist--I am awe-struck, kind sir. I do hope, sometime soon, you will favor our islands with your presence. Much Aloha, William

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