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POTD 25 Nov 2020 Manage your Stress … a peeling faded poster boldly declares I do get it about advertising campaigns. Enough to know that, ‘strategically placed ads’ catching the eye, is huge. But this poster has seen better days ~ There’s nothing that screams out anymore. So good luck with that! The ‘illuminated little screen’, holds higher precedence than one’s state of mind these days anyway. Though, just to prove that some in the world, share more to the eye than fixed texts on small screens I jot down the website. Grating metal to metal interaction, In its customary ten minutes late ~ ‘don’t care a hoot’ style - the train screeches in. Beats me why they call it the 4:15 when it always, ALWAYS gets in at 4:25 I shuffle forward. Shoulder to shoulder, limb to limb. I’m too hot and weary to care. All I can think of is getting home in time to cook dinner for the kids. What can I serve up tonight That won’t be greeted with…
“Oh man, not this again”
The train, packed as always and no one looks up. Downturned faces Feigned indifference? Eye contact ... a thing of the past! I find myself wedged in between an intellectual looking young woman on my right, Student of Psychology or Bio Med Science? The young guy on my left is fast asleep Japanese most probably. They and ONLY THEY seem to have mastered the art of sleeping on their feet. The train lurches off with almost human like groans. Seems to be in a temperamental state lately ~ Menopause? My nostrils adjust to the assault of usual odours. Some nice, mixed with the not so nice, sweat, moist ~ who knows what? Wet dog? I settle in, brace myself, to the half hour stretch ahead The man behind me is standing close enough to moisten the back of my neck with his hot steamy breath. Was there ever a time when this old Rattler’s air conditioning worked? I glance at the Japanese man yes, very much in a deep sleep. Wondering if I too can adapt this method I close my eyes. The train gaining momentum - rounds a corner sharply - I fall backward into the man behind me. Before I can turn around to apologize, A hand comes out to steady me settling on my hipbone. Strangely enough it remains there And I let it
My heart races feeling something surreal a feeling I’ve never known to be so real. Intimate in this oddity I allow myself to stay, In an unspoken serenity relaxing back ever so gently time crawls to a halt as an old familiar fragrance assails me ~ Encapsulates me My senses in overdrive as embedded memories surface And hover back to that one day Boarding this very train Squeals of joy As cloudbursts unleased their rain Squeezing into one seat Wrists caressed and kissed Floating to that intimate space Sensual lips tasted Whispered promises elicited sparking bright eyes And blushing rosy face Softly against my ear a hum Our song Breathless on the high line Us ~ giggling teens fingers daring to trace burning paths through shredded threads in faded jeans The train hooted in joy as we sped through fields of wild flowers sparkling like diamonds with the fallen showers Through the rain splattered window Mesmerised by the candy coloured rainbow coy behind fairy floss clouds and shimmering sunbeams through love’s rose-coloured spectacles we gazed Independent to the confinement of time Enamoured in each other Audacious and unbridled joy lacing into a languageless connection no words dare define The thrill of First Love No high jacking of poetic sugar dusted expressions can possibly convey the experiential feeling that soars ~ way beyond words of it I feel if I tried It would, It possibly could, fall into overt descriptions that seem to have squeaky boots
I have this incessant need to turn around His steamy breath has caused little droplets of perspiration to run down my neck But before I do the train lurches forward then shudders to a grinding halt. My nose buries into a mouldy smelling brown suit in front. A voice muffled says something What??? Oh, my goodness! My stop??? Blinding tears surprise me at first, I rudely push past the other commuters. Before I step off, curiosity gets the better of me I can’t resist ~ I look back. He’s looking down at his mobile Smiling ~ perhaps humming to some old tune on You Tube? Ruddy faced and flushed middle aged and sweaty. His hand now stabilising himself on the person in front of him.
They say Time heals all wounds
Try telling that to a heart that has been shattered In a million fragments Try telling a heart in denial that dead men don’t wear cologne! Let alone hum tunes.
The deepest attachment is to your own way of thinking and feeling That’s where the trap is…
~ Sadh guru ~
POTD 25 Nov 2020

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Date: 5/9/2021 5:03:00 AM
Yes! Quite entrancing, Maria, I know this feeling...jim
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Date: 1/13/2021 7:18:00 AM
A fascinating stream of consciousness that had my attention gripped in this page turner of a creation. Impressive observation and writing, Maria.
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Date: 1/16/2021 10:10:00 PM
Thanks Geoffrey, so great to see that I had your attention. Thanks for dropping by. Happy New Year to you and yours my dear friend. Peace, Love and Good health
Date: 12/12/2020 8:02:00 AM
I’m late to the party but glad I dropped by. Congrats on your well deserved honour.
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Date: 1/16/2021 10:13:00 PM
Its never too late for a party Rick. So glad to see you, thanks for dropping by. Happy New Year to you and your family
Date: 11/29/2020 7:12:00 PM
Wonderful story, Maria; a great mix of romance and reality because as the reader rides that train with you we can feel the longing as memories and the desire for their return to reality mesh through the senses of touch and smell.Beautiful write and I loved the music. Congrats on POTD too.
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Date: 1/16/2021 10:17:00 PM
Thanks Carole. So glad to see you and I'm happy you think so 'A desire for the return to reality mesh through the sense of touch and smell' I love that. Happy New year to you and the family...Maria Hugs
Date: 11/26/2020 9:27:00 PM
Oh! My dear Maria.. you have penned a fabulous emotional journey of the heart, from the present to the past, and then back to the heartbreaking reveal at the end of your spectacular poem. I love how the train takes on the characteristics of the speaker, first with the reference to aging and menopause and then to the youthful exhilaration of first love.. your gifted pen and beautiful mind never cease to amaze me, my sweet soul sister. Your enchanting talent and the musical accompaniment chosen make for a superb poetic presentation. Congratulations for your wonderful and well-deserved POTD honors. A brilliant choice! Warmest wishes always, my inspiring poetry sister.. ~Susan
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Date: 11/29/2020 8:23:00 PM
Susan my dearest poetry sister, so good to have this wonderful comment of yours. Love the way you've put this...the train takes on the characteristics of the speaker, first with the reference to aging and menopause and then to the youthful exhilaration of first love. As I said to Brandy although this story is fiction for me, the emotional feeling in the story is true. My sister lost her husband this year to cancer, her Soulmate, and I guess I'm picking up what she's going through now. Thanks for visiting Susan, truly appreciate your wonderful support and love.All the best... Maria hugs
Date: 11/26/2020 7:21:00 PM
Oh my !! The emotions began falling upon my heart the moment I read that first word. As I was reading, I could feel her pain, the longing within- that sweet ache. "Try telling a heart in denial that dead men don’t wear cologne! Let alone hum tunes" This gave me chills, and I don't know why. The music video is very emotional too. Congratulations Maria, on Poem of the Day. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 11/29/2020 8:10:00 PM
That is so great to hear Brandy that it gave you chills. Means I achieved something. The story is fiction, but I have been seeing first hand what my sister is going through. She lost her husband this year to cancer, her Soulmate, and I guess I'm picking up what she's going through now. Thanks for visiting Brandy, truly appreciate it. Maria hugs
Date: 11/26/2020 5:45:00 AM
Maria, what a fantastic write my dear friend. I actually commented on this yesterday but somehow it went to Joseph May (lol). There is so much to love about this...but my favorite part is about how the Japanese have mastered the art of sleeping while standing up..I LMAO when I read that...so true it be as I recall commuting and taking the subway into the NYC, we were packed like sardines. God Bless...hugs Charlie
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Date: 11/29/2020 8:06:00 PM
Yes that is so funny, as you would know Charlie, we have been to Japan many times and that totally fascinated me too, that the people could fall asleep on a moving train. I guess it helps when you're packed like sardines. Thanks for visiting my friend, I truly appreciate it....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/26/2020 2:52:00 AM
Wow! Kudos on POTD my friend. A very deserving honor with this amazing work of art. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:17:00 AM
How are you Connie? I hope you are keeping well my dear friend? Thanks for the visit and lovely comment, I truly appreciate it. Glad you liked this rather long train ride....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 10:04:00 PM
Beautiful nostalgic poetry in motion, Maria. Kudos on POTD. Well-deserved. Hope others enjoy eyeball eating this w/all of the stuffing and trimmings today. Happy Thanksgiving from USA. Love and smiles and smiles of joy forever.
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:15:00 AM
Happy Thanksgiving to you Freddie. I truly appreciate your lovely visit and comments my friend . Take care and keep well....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 5:01:00 PM
Maria, what a journey on the train into long ago memories and back. Amazing writing, congratulations on POTD ~ John
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:13:00 AM
Thank you John, so glad you liked it. I appreciate the visit and lovely comment ....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 2:33:00 PM
Maria, congratulations on POTD with this beauty _Constance
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:12:00 AM
Thanks so much Constance my dear. So glad you liked it....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 12:28:00 PM
Congratulations on receiving the p.o.t.d. award, dear Maria! You recount the train drive and encounter with a most capable pen; the memory and thrill of first love...so vivid; the sudden jolt back to reality... poetry at its very best. Also enjoyed the accompanying song. Hugs // paul
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:11:00 AM
Paul my dear sweet friend, so glad you liked it and you know how much I appreciate your support and encouragement over the years, thank you for that always ....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 9:56:00 AM
Maria A superb write! A train journey with you and a journey in to your mind!! brilliant! Congrats on your well deserved POTD!!
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:09:00 AM
Thanks so much Krish, so glad you liked it, I appreciate your support ....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 9:21:00 AM
I knew this was going to be a poem of the day... Huge congrats my dear friend on your amazing POTD! xoxo
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:08:00 AM
Thanks so much my dear sweet friend Kina. I appreciate your return visit....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 8:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD.
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:07:00 AM
Thanks so much Eve, so good to see you. Appreciate your visit and comment....Love and Hugs Maria
Date: 11/25/2020 8:43:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD. ~~
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:05:00 AM
Thanks so much Victor. Nice to see you, hope you are well?....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 8:42:00 AM
Gobsmacked! Congratulations on Poem of the Day, Maria. A Fave for sure.
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:05:00 AM
Thank so much Mark, so glad you liked it. Thanks for the visit and lovely comment ....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 8:18:00 AM
wow, I am rendered speechless by this . Total awe, xo Congrats . you delivered a star here, and its not even xmas. Love you Maria Williams.
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:04:00 AM
Awww, I love you too Pixie Dust, you bring such joy. So glad you liked it my sweet friend. Love and Hugs ..Maria
Date: 11/25/2020 8:05:00 AM
Wonderfully-written and incredibly informative. Congrats on your POTD!
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:02:00 AM
Thanks Milton, so glad you liked it . ...Maria hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 7:17:00 AM
- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Maria :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:01:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise, lovely to see you my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 7:01:00 AM
A train speeding on nostalgic tracks of love and heartbreak, Well written Maria, Congrats on POTD
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Date: 11/26/2020 4:01:00 AM
Thank you Joseph, how well you put it. Thanks for the lovely visit and comment....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 6:58:00 AM
Congratulations on your potd. Great write and a beautiful quote at the end. I can read Sadgurudev ji endlessly, pearls of wisdom. Enjoy your honour.
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:59:00 AM
I love Sadh Guru, and his joy and pearls of wisdom too. Thanks for the visit and lovely comments Rama....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 6:41:00 AM
Congratulations Maria Williams on POTD...A very creative piece...
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:57:00 AM
Thank you Arturo, so glad you liked it. I appreciate the return visit too my friend....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 6:11:00 AM
Congratulations Maria, on being awarded POTD awesome Narrative and great poem - wonderful story telling. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:56:00 AM
Thank you Jennifer, so glad you liked it. I appreciate your visit and lovely comments....Maria Hugs
Date: 11/25/2020 5:34:00 AM
Back with BIG congrats Maria on poem of the day. So well deserved--not surprised--I predicted it!
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Date: 11/26/2020 3:55:00 AM
Yes , so you did my friend. Thank you for the vote of confidence. I appreciate you....Maria Hugs
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