The Test

The Test A tortured faltering shell I clutch The heart of radiant night to tread By vain fingertips untouched Rare is dark's disheveled head The pungent stench of sweet decay Night succumbs with a bitter taste Must such a delicacy waste? Or else a ravished heart indulge? A collar stiff and buttons firm! As the river laughes in its drunken fits To all dreams, shameless, boast confirmed! How often have I lain within With dust's affinity to dust! Merciful Lord, my eternal fate Pray seal from insistent beckoning rust!

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Skat A

Date: 1/3/2016 7:09:00 PM

Enjoyed

John Loving Iii

Date: 11/6/2010 9:04:00 AM

turned off

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/1/2010 11:14:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Hyunjin. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 6/1/2010 5:45:00 AM

This is excellent. I like the flow of the words and the message. Regarding the type of form, you could drop one line out of the third stanza, move that stanza which would be a couplet to the end of the poem, and it would then be a sonnet. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Joseph

Rp Kumari

Date: 6/1/2010 5:38:00 AM

Good work keep it up

Rauwolfia Ra

Date: 6/1/2010 2:29:00 AM

nice, you have a good imagination, I think you probably have to read this poem a few times before understanding it fully.