The Sunspots of Summer Outbreak

I’m twisted
into submission;
admission
to true world
of imaginary breeze
and coconut salt.

I’m a seed,
slipping into sand,
letting go.
The wild sea’s
crest and trough didn’t swallow me,
silence me - my thoughts.

Roots, a muse -
rest and recreate;
drudge baggage
ditched at shore.
The dunes spoil me with their grit
and pink hydrangeas.

Sunglasses
recover my eyes;
sunburn writhes
on my skull.
Hair in free fall, snarled and damp,
like anemones.

An assault
of coconut breeze
in true world;
admission
into twisted submission
of relaxing waves.

The sunspots
of Summer outbreak.
I bring pail
and shovel.
I shore up castle, today,
midst whirlpool of moat.

The true world
tries to interfere,
as I splash
cruel eyes.
My hands and feet completely
disappear…left - write!

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Date: 7/24/2025 3:59:00 AM
Reads like an outstanding day in the sun, Kim. Thanks for sharing this day with us. If for a contest, it reads like a good contender. Sara K
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/24/2025 5:25:00 AM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 7/22/2025 4:33:00 PM
outstanding imagery and flow to this poem that had a definite summertime feel to it...your poem was also quite engaging. Loved it.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/24/2025 5:25:00 AM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 7/22/2025 11:04:00 AM
WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Great Ending... Have a blessed day writing away..............
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/22/2025 12:17:00 PM
Thank you for the wow, sweetlady! Have blessed day, too, having a blast writing! xx
Date: 7/22/2025 10:40:00 AM
"I’m a seed, slipping into sand, letting go. The wild sea’s crest and trough didn’t swallow me, silence me - my thoughts." -- Amazing imagery! And profound. "My hands and feet completely disappear…left - write!" -- Very witty, wonderful read!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/22/2025 10:43:00 AM
LOL! Thank you, Joe!
Date: 7/22/2025 9:51:00 AM
Amazing piece, and that end- wow!! "left- write" and you do it so beautifully and mysteriously - hugs :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/22/2025 10:43:00 AM
Thank you, Paige!
Date: 7/22/2025 8:44:00 AM
l want to be there Kim..such a lovely poetic write. You have such a descripted way with words, l love it. Jackie
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/22/2025 9:34:00 AM
Thank you, Jackie! I’m so glad you like it! Hugs
Date: 7/22/2025 8:10:00 AM
Thank you for writing this :) 'The wild sea’s / crest and trough didn’t swallow me, / silence me - my thoughts.' Beautiful
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/22/2025 9:33:00 AM
Glad you liked that part! Thank You, Jasmine!
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