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The Sun Is Screaming

The sun is screaming Miles of nothing, beige on beige on beige The sun is screaming, blistering my skin, draining me slowly as breath is heated and tastes bitter Shoulders slung low, I can’t stand straight, bent over struggling, nothing is anywhere and nowhere is here Leaving footprints for the wind dancers, black feather fathers, winged circlers high above, watching Sifting time in barren increments, hourglass patterns of falling granules sinking deeper Water is a dream and this thirst a nightmare for it is there, just ahead, I can see it glistening but it does not exist Nothing exists, as the oasis in my mind dries up, leaving only empty indentations on horizontal planes, flat lands of arid emotions drifting in and out, reaching for… reaching 10/09/18 For the: I Wander The Desert Alone Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 10/16/2018 5:34:00 AM
Excellent write. I loved the effective and dramatic lingo, and that you painted the feel, scene and desperation using minimal lines. I had nothing for this contest, but I'm so glad you did and that it placed as it should have. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 10/15/2018 9:57:00 AM
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It was as if I were there. Love the personifications that you used. The imagery was spot one. Congrats on your win. Well deserved
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Chris Green
Date: 10/15/2018 10:16:00 AM
Thank you so very much Debbie. I am happy you liked it.
Date: 10/15/2018 5:38:00 AM
Chris, this poem so effectively portrays the mental and physical barreness of the 'desert' conditions. Your use of antonyms, personification, images, epizeuxis in the first line, nouns and verbs, in fact all elements are so cleverly chosen to enhance the whole experience. Such incredible images with the vultures hovering above and the screaming sun etc. I thought it was brilliant!
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Chris Green
Date: 10/15/2018 8:24:00 AM
Thank you Wendy for your wonderful comment on my poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and the kind words you have left for me.
Date: 10/14/2018 6:36:00 PM
Congrats on your top win, Chris. Well done.
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Chris Green
Date: 10/15/2018 8:21:00 AM
Thank you so much.
Date: 10/9/2018 10:45:00 PM
Just the type of desert Write he wanted, Chris, well done:)
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Chris Green
Date: 10/10/2018 8:40:00 AM
Thank you so very much Jo.
Date: 10/9/2018 2:08:00 PM
- A hot and long walk ... a great poem, Chris - Best wishes for winning in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Chris Green
Date: 10/9/2018 3:06:00 PM
Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Date: 10/9/2018 1:22:00 PM
a breakaway piece so languid in its expressive tone, chris... you are truly gifted!...huggs
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Chris Green
Date: 10/9/2018 3:06:00 PM
Thanks Nette, what a nice thing to say
Date: 10/9/2018 1:02:00 PM
so vivid that i felt i was there with you, chris! i especially love the 3rd verse. best of luck in the contest...
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Chris Green
Date: 10/9/2018 3:06:00 PM
Thank you so very much Ilene

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