The Sun Is Screaming

The sun is screaming 


Miles of nothing, beige on beige on beige
The sun is screaming, blistering my skin, 
draining me slowly as breath is heated and tastes bitter

Shoulders slung low, I can’t stand straight, 
bent over struggling,
nothing is anywhere and nowhere is here

Leaving footprints for the wind dancers,
black feather fathers, winged circlers 
high above, watching

Sifting time in barren increments,
hourglass patterns 
of falling granules sinking deeper

Water is a dream and this thirst a nightmare
for it is there, just ahead, I can see it glistening 
but it does not exist 

Nothing exists, as the oasis in my mind
dries up, leaving only empty indentations
on horizontal planes, flat lands
of arid emotions drifting in and out,
reaching for… reaching


10/09/18

For the: I Wander The Desert Alone Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Godwin Avatar
October 16, 2018 at 5:34 AM
Excellent write. I loved the effective and dramatic lingo, and that you painted the feel, scene and desperation using minimal lines. I had nothing for this contest, but I'm so glad you did and that it placed as it should have. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Walker Avatar
October 15, 2018 at 9:57 AM
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It was as if I were there. Love the personifications that you used. The imagery was spot one. Congrats on your win. Well deserved
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October 15, 2018 at 10:16 AM
Thank you so very much Debbie. I am happy you liked it.
Watson Avatar
October 15, 2018 at 5:38 AM
Chris, this poem so effectively portrays the mental and physical barreness of the 'desert' conditions. Your use of antonyms, personification, images, epizeuxis in the first line, nouns and verbs, in fact all elements are so cleverly chosen to enhance the whole experience. Such incredible images with the vultures hovering above and the screaming sun etc. I thought it was brilliant!
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October 15, 2018 at 8:24 AM
Thank you Wendy for your wonderful comment on my poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and the kind words you have left for me.
Gauthier Avatar
October 14, 2018 at 6:36 PM
Congrats on your top win, Chris. Well done.
Green Avatar
October 15, 2018 at 8:21 AM
Thank you so much.
Daniel Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 10:45 PM
Just the type of desert Write he wanted, Chris, well done:)
Green Avatar
October 10, 2018 at 8:40 AM
Thank you so very much Jo.
Andresen Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 2:08 PM
- A hot and long walk ... a great poem, Chris - Best wishes for winning in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Green Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 3:06 PM
Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Onclaud Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 1:22 PM
a breakaway piece so languid in its expressive tone, chris... you are truly gifted!...huggs
Green Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 3:06 PM
Thanks Nette, what a nice thing to say
Bauer Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 1:02 PM
so vivid that i felt i was there with you, chris! i especially love the 3rd verse. best of luck in the contest...
Green Avatar
October 9, 2018 at 3:06 PM
Thank you so very much Ilene
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