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The Stone

When I first laid eyes on him, he was alone. So very solitary, he was but a stone, just lying there as if he had been thrown carelessly to nothingness, a rock that had never shone. A gem he could not be! He was the oddest thing I’d ever known. A strange and simple stone beneath a barren tree - a tree which offered no relief of a leafy canopy. He’d lain there so long where there was no bird’s melody, and since he had no eyes, there was nothing for him to see. I bent and picked him up – this stone upon dry ground. I took him with me, and I showed him all around! Slowly I was cracking open this rock that made no sound. In time, I noticed from inside him there emerged the sweetest glow. I’d pierced the stone’s hard core like the arrow from a bow! From what he used to be, the stone has now come far! What he came to be for me I had never been foreshown. But with some time and patience, I guessed the remedy. How to open up the stone was the solution that I found. In my cracking him, rare beauty I have come to know, for inside the stone was waiting to be born – a shining star! Feb. 22, 2018 for Gregory Barden's"MINUANETTA Contest using rhyme scheme of (at least) AAAAA, BBBB, CCC, DD, E, ABCDE. It must have a least this many lines, (20) Theme is "CHREMAMORPHISM"

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Date: 4/30/2018 1:56:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your fine win.
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Date: 4/29/2018 4:05:00 PM
Wonderfully done, Andrea! I picked up on some metaphors which makes your poem mysterious too. Congratulations on your fine podium win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/29/2018 2:15:00 PM
Awesome! Congratulations on your win. You write a story so full of imagery, I was right there with you. Also, the deeper connotation, whether intentional or not, is inspiring and something to ponder. :)
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Date: 4/29/2018 1:57:00 PM
This was such a pleasure to read and so romantic, Andrea, and you wrote this form like you've been writing it all your life - that just amazes me! The unusual metaphor that chremamorphism demands is so evident in this one, and I love the stone-to-star journey - superb write! (There was such minute separation between entries in this one - all so good!). Congratulations on your placement, and thank you for entering my contest! :-)
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Date: 4/29/2018 8:05:00 AM
Back with most deserved congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 4/29/2018 12:39:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Yes, you sometimes get diamonds if you keep on breaking stones, and if your are lucky.It's like poems.
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Date: 4/10/2018 5:42:00 PM
A FAVE. What a charming lovely poem, Andrea.
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Date: 3/11/2018 7:54:00 PM
Amazing write, Andrea, luck in the contest hugs
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Date: 3/1/2018 7:37:00 PM
Wow, is all I can say. Wow.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/1/2018 8:44:00 PM
thanks, this was my favorite of the ones I wrote this past week.
Date: 2/26/2018 9:43:00 AM
Love the storyline...Beautiful write
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Date: 2/23/2018 8:08:00 PM
A very beautiful story Andrea, a shining star indeed!
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Date: 2/23/2018 12:36:00 PM
A star inside a stone - it can thrill you to the bone! Good luck in the contest. I have entered contests from Conceit magazine and Lone Star magazine. Hope springs eternal for practicing poets!! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/23/2018 10:10:00 AM
Creative work. Miraculous healing that happened. Reads like a great contender to me. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 2/22/2018 11:05:00 PM
Greatvpoem for this difficult contest(at least to me!) Andrea! I liked your analogy and very much enjoyed this! Good luck in the contest :)
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Date: 2/22/2018 7:22:00 PM
Very nicely done Andrea....best wishes
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Date: 2/22/2018 5:00:00 PM
Really special poem showing the virtue of knowing the good in all things and revealing them according to our gifts...I like what you wrote...
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Date: 2/22/2018 4:37:00 PM
A beautiful story of transition and you did it so well! An Italian hug!
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Date: 2/22/2018 1:11:00 PM
Deep and meaningful, a grand beauty of a poem Andrea! Lovely story-telling. Best wishes for a win.
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Date: 2/22/2018 12:11:00 PM
This contest stumped me, you seem to have tackled it effortlessly. Fabulous ink Andrea! My best to you :) xomo!
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Date: 2/22/2018 11:41:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your story of this stone..lovely imagination, Andrea. This new form you tackled expertly, and also the creative story. Best for a win.
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Date: 2/22/2018 10:52:00 AM
Was I suppose to do 'Cream of Morphism'? I think you just blew mine out of the water with this drama that holds and compels the reader ever onward while savoring the revealing in each line, in short, it made me darned curious. You did a Wow! (and I did a draft of a mess to you that I'll try not to let get dusty - so much going on) (btw, my entry was written for Jannie Breedt) Love you, your mind and pen ... CayCay
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/22/2018 3:26:00 PM
thanks so much, caycay. I gotta review yours again. Yes, you were supposed to describe a person as an inanimate object!
Date: 2/22/2018 10:46:00 AM
Quite a success with the unique form ... A great chremsmorphism, Andrea ... Looks a sure winner ...
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Date: 2/22/2018 9:52:00 AM
You did very well with this unique form, Great story telling too..
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Date: 2/22/2018 9:49:00 AM
A winner for sure Andrea ,brilliant verse Tom.
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Date: 2/22/2018 9:26:00 AM
Your entry is very unique Andrea. Did it take you a lot of time to write this? Mine took all day! You did great with this form! I am sure to see it on the winner's list! : )
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/22/2018 3:26:00 PM
Thanks, Connie. I think at least two hours it took me. Which is a little more than average. I think it is better to start with the last stanza and find rhymes that are plentiful in the end rhymes of those last five lines!
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