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Originally published: 1st July 2023

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Poetry Soup's POEM OF THE DAY (3rd July 2023)

1st: "YOUR CHOICE 2023" Premier Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand


The British seaside as I remember it as a child - in rhyme and free verse.


I when the world had no headsets the sunbathing crowd fell asleep to the sounds of transistors played loud while the deckchairs and windbreaks kites, beach balls and more formed the stripes, lines and circles that painted the shore and the longer I walked on the sand to that sea the more the sea seemed to get further from me and the crunch in my mouth was that one grain of sand in the sandwich I ate from my sand covered hand while the lemons and melons and plums I'd watch spin would stop short of a cherry one click from a win and the postcards we sent from the end of the pier had us writing such half truths as "wish you were here." II from the end of the pier through the stiff breeze and spindrift I can still hear the tunes of the promenade bands and I can still see the stripes of the deckchairs and windbreaks and the box kites and beach balls that painted the shore and I can still taste the butter - warm like the canned ham and the crunch of that sand in the sandwich I had and I can still hear the djs laughing and talking spinning hits of the sixties from transistors played loud and I can still smell the onions frying wild in the fairground to the sound of the claxons and the lemon. click. orange. click. melon. click. click. and I can still breathe the deep smoke swirling in sand dunes from their benson and hedges and player's no.6 and I can still see those grown ups staring at mirrors - their bodies distorted like the dreams they once had. today on the pier the rain that's now falling falls from a same sky on a same sand and same sea - on a same me yet this air - this air is not the same air as that air I once breathed.

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Date: 3/18/2024 3:06:00 PM
Belated congratulations on the deserving won. How the transformation from that era to this one is catched with all the true elements which was encompassing once as blessed, now lost, have only regrets now. A great write from all prospects. Regards
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Gary Radice
Date: 3/19/2024 6:55:00 AM
Thank you Silpika for your very kind words. This is one of those poems that just wrote itself once started. Cheers - Gary
Date: 3/4/2024 2:35:00 PM
Gary, this is a stunning piece of poetry. You stir all the senses and draw out emotions, with beautiful lines that flow like a river! Your writing is truly transportive. Xo Jess
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Date: 3/5/2024 2:19:00 AM
Thank you Jess for your lovely comments. I tend to write in rhyme as a rule and even on the rare occasion I write free verse I find myself adopting a rhyming flow with my words and have to remind myself that lines actually don’t need to rhyme. :). Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/27/2024 1:26:00 PM
gosh this is SO awesome. I am going to fave it. I saw you got a trophy for it and now I know WHY. Belated congrats for the POTD
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/28/2024 2:28:00 AM
Thank you Andrea. The seaside crops up in many of my poems. I still love visiting it today but of course much of that childhood wonder has gone. Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/22/2024 11:42:00 AM
Dear Gary, Your poem takes me on a nostalgic journey to the seaside of yesteryears, where memories of sun, sand, and simpler joys paint vivid images. Your vivid descriptions evoke a longing for the past, filled with the bygone days' sounds, tastes, and smells. The contrast between then and now is palpable, yet the essence of those moments remains etched in memory. A vert heartfelt reflection on the passage of time and the enduring power of nostalgia. - Blessings, Daniel
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/22/2024 9:27:00 PM
Daniel, thank you so much. You've summed up so wonderfully everything I was trying to capture when I wrote the poem. Cheers - Gary
Date: 2/19/2024 7:04:00 PM
Dear Gary, applause applause! I was enthralled by your "stanzas by the sea". Your alluring poems captures nostalgia with wistful elegance and a melancholy eloquence. Loved the vibrant imagery! Your exquisite poem brought back memories of my beach days as a kid too. Your rhyme and free verse blend together beautifully and your final stanza is a potent and poignant finale to an intimate, incredible piece. Your should definitely apply your golden pen to free verse more often, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Gary Radice
Date: 2/20/2024 8:11:00 AM
Thank you Susan. Yes, I’m going to give free verse another go. For some weird reason each time I have attempted it in the past I’ve found myself trying to rhyme lines…I find it difficult to break the habit of a lifetime. :) Thank you for your encouraging comments. I truly appreciate them. Cheers - Gary
Date: 1/6/2024 9:33:00 AM
Good gosh I don't know how I missed this one Gary. All I can do is add my voice to the choir of praise rightly due you. We were with you there, reminiscing about better days, better air. To be in that same spot, now alone, quietude all around... almost too much to bear. Still, the memories
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Gary Radice
Date: 1/7/2024 3:54:00 AM
Thanks Tom. The great comments I have received from yourself and others have made me think that maybe writing in free verse is something I should look at doing more. I've never felt comfortable writing in the form. Cheers - Gary
Date: 1/1/2024 4:04:00 PM
Wonderfully atmospheric and I found a certain rhythm and cadence that engaged all the senses and sights you recounted. I can see why it was made a POTD. Belated Congratulations, SuZ
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Gary Radice
Date: 1/2/2024 1:40:00 AM
Hi Suz! Happy New Year to you and your family. Thank you for your lovely comments. Originally both these poems were published separately but after pulling both from the Soup and then revising both I decided that they worked well together. :) Thanks again. Cheers - Gary
Date: 12/29/2023 6:02:00 PM
This is beautiful... Congratulations... I agree with your point... There is no better time than when technology and modernization did not yet bring ruin...
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Date: 12/30/2023 1:57:00 AM
Thanks RB. The seaside was full of wonder for me as a child. I wonder though if my parents thought the same about technology and modernization being the ruin back then? :) I appreciate your comments. Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/29/2023 12:52:00 PM
Gary, lotsa strong imagery wrapped in unique phrasing and rhyme. A tour de force in the telling. Well done dear bard.
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Gary Radice
Date: 11/30/2023 3:31:00 AM
Much appreciated Greg. I just picture myself 'there' once again and write what I can see around me; those moments in time that for some reason have stayed with me all these years. Cheers - Gary
Date: 10/8/2023 1:57:00 AM
Oh how fast memories start coming back through images, songs and smells, Gary! And with them wistfulness, and the yearning to go back in time. I spent my summer childhood days on the beach, so I can well relate to this poem. ~ Regards // paul
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Gary Radice
Date: 10/8/2023 2:09:00 AM
Thanks Paul. I placed myself inside the sights and smells and sounds from those long hot summers of childhood and the words just flowed. Cheers - Gary
Date: 10/4/2023 6:26:00 AM
I’m not surprised it’s popular. I enjoyed this nostalgic piece with its undertow of sadness.
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Gary Radice
Date: 10/5/2023 6:43:00 AM
Thank you Richard for your valued comments. I tend to write nostalgia with a fair degree of wistfulness that's for sure. "The past is a foreign country, they do things differently there." :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 9/10/2023 3:49:00 AM
how did i miss reading this one? i love everything about it, it's so real and vivid..as i've said before, you have a very unique writing style, i always enjoy your work..it's definitely not the same air we once breathed, it's now polluted by chemtrails
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Date: 9/10/2023 8:57:00 AM
Thanks Charlotte. Its popularity has taken me by surprise to be honest but I can only summise that many can identify with some of the changes that have taken place over the years. The air, sadly, has certainly changed. Physically and metaphorically. Cheers - Gary
Date: 9/4/2023 10:50:00 AM
brings back so many memories, looks like others experienced them as well. thank you!
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Gary Radice
Date: 9/4/2023 10:21:00 PM
Thank you Linda. The long hot summers of childhood provide so much material for many of my poems. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 9/2/2023 3:14:00 PM
Is this computer generated Gary?... Just joking...
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Gary Radice
Date: 9/2/2023 11:42:00 PM
If it is Jeff it's been to the same places I've been and lived the same life I have - which is a scary thought. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/29/2023 9:32:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful summer write. I love the sea air. Have a blessed/ great day.............
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/29/2023 11:56:00 PM
There's nothing better than the sea air is there? Thanks Paula. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/22/2023 1:18:00 PM
I appreciate the title, "Stanza by the Sea." Your single stanza flows beautifully while evoking strong emotions and images. The "End of the Pier" was a great complimentary poem to the first one. I liked it as well. It sparked memories of my own childhood at summer carnivals with my aunt. Such a wonderful read. thanks for sharing your thoughts and creativity, Sara
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/23/2023 3:57:00 AM
Thanks Sara. My pleasure. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/21/2023 4:05:00 AM
So many memories - so much fun and such a clever portrayal, not only taken back but it's summer no matter when you were to read this...smiling!
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/21/2023 7:48:00 AM
I read you and I hear you Craig. Thank you so much for taking time out to write such a great response. Cheers - Gary
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Craig Cornish
Date: 8/21/2023 6:43:00 AM
I did catch that Gary, but funny in a thoughtful way, as John Barrymore opined, "A man is not old until regrets take the place of dreams" and you're correct, it's not the same air but it doesn't mean it's worse air. That's the perfect definition of a poem, one that "stirs" thoughts in the reader and you did that with me. I'm 75 now and 10 years ago I would have read it differently, perhaps more like you intended but age and perceptions are so dynamic which is why poems like yours are so poignant in a moving way.
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/21/2023 5:44:00 AM
Thanks Craig for your kind comments. I attempted to capture the atmosphere of the seaside as I experienced as a child. Of course, in time, and with age, the excitement ( 'the air' in the free verse's last lines) wanes to the point of disapearing altogether. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/14/2023 2:32:00 AM
Very well written Gary this wonderful poem kelp me moving for more with each line enjoyed reading you lovely work.
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/14/2023 7:41:00 AM
Thanks Yolanda. I can remember most things from my childhood but have difficulty remembering what I did yesterday. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/9/2023 7:17:00 PM
I was hurled through time and memories on a magic carpet of sights, sounds, smells , briny , salty, sweet and sour . The nuances you created with your Polaroid snapshots were so real .. so delicious and delightful and so fun all rolled into one ! Time has passed and the memories still linger brought to life by your creative mind . Belated congratulations on POTD. Loved this Gary. Susan :)
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/10/2023 5:38:00 AM
Hi Susan. Thank you so much. I like your description of my poem as a Polaroid snapshot. I think many of my poems could be described as such. Read you soon. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/8/2023 7:16:00 PM
I want to go to the end of your poetry piers. This was so wonderfully sensory. I used to live in Vermont and yearly attended the Vermont State Fair. You poem brought me back to my fondest memories there. It made me hungry and I could see and smell all it's images. What a nice write. Thank you for your kind comment on my poem. I delighted you like my favorite part too.
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/9/2023 6:33:00 AM
Thanks so much Marikate. There are so many great memories from my childhood and youth that have left their mark on me - actually more than that - they've stayed with me by imprinting themselves on my brain. When I wrote these I felt I was reliving the times. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/6/2023 11:30:00 PM
line by line the adept limn of this wordsmith takes us thru time and the gravid memory bank within and while one may feel a building crescendo on the horizon we instead are given a quiet lament....that fills all the former lines with a very personal sigh....with which age comes calling having danced once again with its youth....excellent job Gary
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/8/2023 3:17:00 AM
Thank you Timothy. You are a wordsmith too - but par excellence! :) I played around with the last three verses of 'The End Of The Pier' for some time but I'm finally happy with how they sound and what they say now. I appreciate your continued support and encouragement. Cheers - Gary
Date: 7/29/2023 4:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem making the Top 100 New Poems list, Gary! WTG Bill
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/30/2023 7:04:00 AM
Thanks Bill. Cheers - Gary
Date: 7/14/2023 3:50:00 PM
What a delightful, nostalgic poem Gary.Really enjoyed it. Thank you.
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/15/2023 1:03:00 AM
Thank you Christina for taking time out to read and comment. It's really appreciated. Cheers - Gary
Date: 7/13/2023 4:36:00 PM
I’ve had that very holiday, Gary… were you the guy in the knotted handkerchief thumping the one armed bandit or the one in the string vest trying to make the pinball machine ‘Tilt’? A marvellously observed write as always. Terry
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/13/2023 9:36:00 PM
LOL! Terry. Yes! That was me. I did get a few weird looks sporting a knotted hanky and stringed vest at aged 9 though. I was also the guy who bought nougat each year on holiday despite it tasting like polystyrene. Cheers - Gary
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/13/2023 4:37:00 PM
Oops… I had missed the POTD accolade… congrats on that: well deserved.
Date: 7/13/2023 8:55:00 AM
Love this,Gary and I recall its predecessor so well. You love your nostalgia, don’t you? Congratulations on your well-deserved POTD. You’ve put me in mind of long past summer days on the Isle of Arran in Scotland and a few lines I jotted down in similar vein to your own( though not nearly as eloquent). I’ve just posted my own little bit of reminiscence, “Lamlash”.
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/13/2023 9:38:00 AM
Hi Peter. Yes, you are so right. I love nostalgia. I remember half a century ago so clearly. Ask me what I did last week though... :) I'll take a look Peter at your work tomorrow and look forward to doing so. Hope all is well. Cheers - Gary
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