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The Space Invader

“Don’t-stand-so-close-to-me,” he said to her. I’m feeling claustrophobic. Every time I turn around, you’re right there at my shoulder. Were you a poem, I’d make you its end rhyme! “How rude you are!” his girlfriend then replied. “The way you talk to me is a disgrace. We’re finished!” As she strode away she cried, “And this is me now giving you your space.” For Black Eyed Susan's Space Contest

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Date: 3/10/2013 11:04:00 AM
I loved the humor in this piece about space. We always think of sky as space but this surprised me. love phyl
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Date: 3/9/2013 11:48:00 AM
Well this caught me off guard. And here I was expecting to read about some good ole fashioned martians from outer space! Haha... well it's a very simple piece but I like the easy going humor in it... and the pun in the end where you "literally" put spaces between the words. Not sure what the contest was, but still an enjoyable piece :)
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Date: 3/7/2013 9:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your win friend Andrea.. Awesome write...have a nice day (^_^) Hugs,Maria
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Date: 3/5/2013 4:01:00 PM
i enjoyed this Andrea...Seren
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Date: 3/5/2013 8:21:00 AM
Way to go in the contest. I was always a Space Invader video game fan, now I'm a fan of this updated version.
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Date: 3/5/2013 1:34:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andy i enjoyed this fist time round and nothings changed xx
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Date: 3/4/2013 9:43:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations with your wonderful space-going poem in Susan's contest...xox~PD
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Date: 3/3/2013 6:58:00 PM
Very creative write here for the contest theme!I like it!
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Date: 3/3/2013 10:05:00 AM
What a cad and a bounder! He doesn't deserve the closeness of sacred womankind. I've said it before. There is very little difference between a man and a woman, but HOORAY for that little difference! Sincerely, a fan - daver
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Date: 3/2/2013 9:42:00 PM
I liked the clever way you set up the last line! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/2/2013 12:47:00 PM
Wow! Fantastic Quatrains about space. Impressive. Love -Mohammad
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Date: 3/1/2013 7:22:00 PM
Hmm. A familiar weightless feeling. Nice effect Andrea.
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Date: 3/1/2013 6:28:00 AM
Nice effect on the ending line....I haven't seen any contest info on this one...it has me very curious...off to the next poem of yours...
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Date: 3/1/2013 6:26:00 AM
I was expecting the video game, you are so clever with your play on words. See my response to your comment on Tentative Dancer.
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Date: 3/1/2013 6:01:00 AM
ha Andrea at the start I thougt it was another song title poem, love the theme and format, good luck....David soup mail
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Date: 3/1/2013 6:00:00 AM
haha...nice take on this contest theme, Andrea...clever way to end it!
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Date: 2/28/2013 8:56:00 PM
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Date: 2/28/2013 3:22:00 PM
Wow, the things you get up to, when i'm not around alot... i'will visit all of your poetry Andrea, in time,,,they are far to good like this one, not to...
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Date: 2/28/2013 3:03:00 PM
lol, love this clever one. Congrats on your wins, my friend : )
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Date: 2/28/2013 9:42:00 AM
HI my dear friend Andrea! This is another great write of yours! I love your idea of space here. You're so creative. It reminds me before when once I told my ex bf that i need a space and he told me that I must go to the parking lot, lol. Thank you so much for sharing! Good luck in the contest! love always, Leonora
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Date: 2/28/2013 8:57:00 AM
I love the string of linked words you used in the first line and the actual spaces you used in the last line - very clever, my friend!
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Date: 2/28/2013 7:32:00 AM
Oh luv this one , very clever I feel like saying that sometimes but I refrain from doing so. I will congratulate you in advance lol xx
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Date: 2/27/2013 8:59:00 PM
Oh, Wow, Andrea! I'm loving the uniqueness about your poem.. I never saw that end line, coming!! Another Winner for sure. Love, Annalise
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Date: 2/27/2013 8:22:00 PM
I loved it!!!
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Date: 2/27/2013 5:58:00 PM
Great way to go..Great set up to demonstrate your punch line..Enjoyed reading your sure to win work..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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