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The Sleepwalker

His eyes stare blankly through me Then he coldly turns aside Though tenderness once drew me Cold dispassion he can't hide. Abandoned in the dead of night Alone and overwrought, Indifferently my love takes flight As if I count for nought. I know he will return to me I feel no deprivation For I've become accustomed To my man's somnambulation. 27/07/18

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 6/17/2020 2:57:00 AM
I love how you create a perception and then bring the twist towards the end. I've experienced this so many times. Congratulations on your win Wendy :)
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Date: 6/16/2020 3:20:00 PM
I love that last word, and you used it to good effect as you built towards it starting out as you did with hints that your love had grown cold. Lovely surprise ending, and with the stellar rhyme and flow of your pen. Congratulations, Wendy, on your win and another enjoyable write. ~ John
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Date: 6/16/2020 3:13:00 PM
I can relate to this so well Wendy. One night my son took a shower with all his clothes on. I woke him to tell him to go take a shower and found him that way. Congratulations on your wonderful win! Blessings xxoo
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Date: 6/16/2020 1:27:00 PM
:) I admit I had to look up "somnambulation." Enjoyed your entry very much. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 8/1/2018 7:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Well-written. Well done!
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Date: 8/1/2018 1:11:00 PM
My favorite line is "Indifferently my love takes flight/As if I count for nought," so well penned, congratulations on your placement!
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Date: 7/31/2018 9:48:00 AM
Well done Wendy, congrats!
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:00:00 AM
I like your word play.
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Date: 7/27/2018 8:26:00 PM
oh wow, I love how you did this!! Not too long but just right in length and a little twist at the end!!
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