Raul Moreno Poet Choka

The Skipping of Stones

Walking the shoreline
Of the tranquil-jagged coast,
As the surge crashes. 
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As the surge crashes
I pick up a flat-smooth rock;
I cast it to sea.
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I cast it to sea
With an impulse of seeing,
The skipping of stones.

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Abe Lopez April 18, 2009 at 12:20 PM A joy it is to do. nice work again

Tyler Davis April 17, 2009 at 11:54 PM Nice thoughts, I like to skip stones in the river.

April 16, 2009 at 11:52 AM Oh how I loved to skip stones when I was a kid. This one brings back fond memories for me. You've got me smiling. Thank you. Karen

John Weber April 9, 2009 at 1:45 PM I thoroughly enjoy the crafty use of hyphenated statements here, Raul! There's a palpable sensation of erosion, as if the babble of the water is eroding your tensions. Excellent pen, my friend! Warm regards, John.

David Smalling April 8, 2009 at 10:23 AM I like your expertise with the choka ... the form also reminds me of parallelism in Jewish poetry. A little bit more subtle there, but the structure of all the Psalms.

Ashe Kristy De La Keur Scoville April 7, 2009 at 8:38 AM Thank you so much!!! I tell Aleera she is biased after all she is my sister. I like what I have read of your poems. For me I have come to this late I was never any good at this before but something must run in the genes...LOL thank you again...

Laura Mckenzie April 7, 2009 at 6:52 AM Yes I can see it now such a lovely reflection you made! Happy Easter Laura :)

Sharon Winter April 7, 2009 at 5:59 AM You are doing wonders with this form. Feel so much more than the beautiful imagery. Impressive writing Raul, this one really gets my mind going. Love, Shar

Leon Wilson April 7, 2009 at 5:48 AM I know where you have been this week, you have been to the seaside. Loved this poem, reminded me of times when I used to skim stones into the sea

Laurie Ginn April 7, 2009 at 5:23 AM I enjoy your writing Raul the simplicity of this write started my mind off in different directions. Good write.

Brian Strand April 7, 2009 at 1:01 AM Fine series of poetry Raul.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Charmaine Chircop April 7, 2009 at 12:09 AM re comment:GOODMORNING ;-)

Charmaine Chircop April 6, 2009 at 10:51 PM you got me nostalgia,i remember we are at sea,family together and thats what we did skipping of stones-great

Aleera De La Keur April 6, 2009 at 10:46 PM I love this, it reminds me of how many times you can skip a rock, when I was a kid, you are disgustingly talented, LOL, Love ya Aleera