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The Scent of Water

If I were a willow slowly dying, the scent of water you would surely be. My limbs would reach for you, softly sighing if I were a willow slowly dying. Would you linger, close beside me lying, and would you let your sweetness nourish me if I were a willow slowly dying? The scent of water you would surely be. Written 7/15/14 For the contest of Faye Gibson

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/23/2014 4:39:00 PM
Nicely done on this Triolet Andrea. love phyl
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Date: 10/7/2014 8:30:00 PM
Another amazing write. It flows beautifully it reads succinctly and we are never aware of the repeated lines. BRILLIANT, Andrea. I am adding this one to my collection.
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Date: 7/29/2014 12:20:00 PM
Hi Andrea, --A wonderful scent and win. <3 Congratulations, in Faye's "Out Of Water" contest... Always ~ Linda ~
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Date: 7/25/2014 10:20:00 PM
Imaginative, creative....line 3 amazing! As is the whole of the poem! Andrea!
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Date: 7/24/2014 10:00:00 PM
Congratulations on winning the contest and I enjoyed your write. God bless you and happy writing.
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Date: 7/24/2014 5:01:00 AM
...I am pleased that you were pleased with some stuff I wrote....and i just wanted to write a longer reply (of course you gotta read these six reply-boxes in reverse order haha)....and allow me to say(probably not for the first time) that I value your praise and advice very greatly....another whom I value is Carrie ( I think you share my opinion there)......hope to chat again soon....bye bye
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:57:00 AM
...now and again she uses a word in an incorrect way (as all learners do) ....and it is often this twisting of normal spoken English which gives the idea for a poem way....such twisting resembles accepted poetic techniques e.g., reversal of word order....so instead of "golden sun" a poet might say "sun golden"......and so
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:53:00 AM
...and another thing i wanted to tell you, Andy, is that i find ideas for poetry come very often from my wife, who is herself not a poetry writer...we see things on our walks or laugh at absurd situations and it is her comment which often forms the central theme of a poem for me......she is Russian and her English is grea t but....
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:49:00 AM
....intellectual aspects such as form, rhyme, etc.....you know, I sometimes find that my original message in a given poem I am composing can be hijacked by the need to rhyme, or arrange into Quatrains, etc etc... and if I produce such intellectually arranged poetry from time to time it is purely because it seemed somehow to just "fall into place"
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:48:00 AM
..and it’s the triolet form which you also mentioned in your very kind comments about my THE LISTENERS....I see what you mean,Andy, but I doubt if I am able to carry it out.....I have a tendency to write from the heart with only a secondary concern for
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:38:00 AM
mmm.....lovely...it strongly puts me in mind of FIELDS Of GOLD sung by Eva Cassidy......your poem could only have been written by a woman...it has femininity in every line, every word ...a beautiful expression of feelings...."limbs/sighing/nourish" .. i dont imagine I could use such words as effectively as yo u have done here,Andy
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Date: 7/24/2014 4:09:00 AM
Hey congrats well written indeed
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Date: 7/24/2014 3:02:00 AM
For you to win first place with a Triolet is really impressive Andrea. This is wonderful, even though I am not a big fan of repeating lines....this is outstanding! Congratulations!
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Date: 7/24/2014 12:49:00 AM
Lovely recreation of birth and death. many congratulations.
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Date: 7/23/2014 10:39:00 PM
Eloquently written Andrea! Loved much,, congrats on top win!
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Date: 7/23/2014 8:34:00 PM
Andrea, this is such a beautiful piece - congratulations on being the TOP winner! I love it! BRAVO! Pandita
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Date: 7/23/2014 8:23:00 PM
Andrea,congrats on your top win with this wonderful poem
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Date: 7/23/2014 7:31:00 PM
Congratulations dear Andie.. :D!!! I really love your triolets.. :D!! I am seeing you as a ballerina when you are writing them.. :D! God bless and hugs.. :D
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Date: 7/23/2014 7:23:00 PM
Congrats on a great win Andrea
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Date: 7/23/2014 4:22:00 PM
sad and romantic at the same time! Congrads on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 7/23/2014 4:20:00 PM
Way to go Andrea, captured the theme fluidly.
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Date: 7/23/2014 4:07:00 PM
Impressive personification, Andrea! You chose the ideal form for this write. atop7rating once again. This is poetry. Congratulations on your high podium finish. // paul
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Date: 7/23/2014 3:26:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Congrats on your well deserved first place win. I love the fragility and expressive sentiments. All the best, Theresaxx
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Date: 7/23/2014 1:47:00 PM
popping back with my congratulations. Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/23/2014 12:49:00 PM
So happy to see this one a top win!! Congrats, sweet Andrea!... Hugs.. Arlene
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