The Revealing Pantoum

When I was very very young
A new mother experiencing life
Pain visited me with my song still unsung
Now children my song will I play on my fife

A new mother experiencing life
Pain in my side to the doctor went
Now children my song will I play on my fife
Right ovary cyst orange size hosiptal sent

Pain in my side to the doctor went
He said that this could cause loss of life
Right ovary cyst orange size hospital sent
Well I went under the operating knife

He said that this could cause loss of life
For it could rupture at the least bump
Well I went under the operating knife
For them to remove this abnormal lump

For it could rupture at the least bump
Asleep totally out on operating table
For them to remove this abnormal lump
Went to the light to visit angel Gabriel

Asleep totally out on operating table
Then this light called me away
Went too the Light to visit angel Gabriel
Somewhere over Yonder_I went but didn't stay

Then this Light called me away
Peace, peace sweet peace in that place
Somewhere over Yonder_I went but didn't stay
My Grandmother sent me back through space

Peace, peace sweet peace in that place
Pain visited me with my song still unsung
My Grandmother sent me back through space
When I was very very young

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 9/11/2010 4:19:00 AM
Congratulations opn this win in the contest, Sara
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Date: 9/10/2010 5:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Catie Lindsey's contest Sara. Love Carol
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Date: 9/10/2010 2:24:00 PM
Congrats Sara on your HM in Catie's contest.. a magnificent write and another great honor to enjoy tonight with luv..my friend... hope everyone in family is feeling much better today...
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Date: 9/10/2010 12:47:00 PM
very nice writing and congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/3/2010 7:25:00 AM
interesting write, which grandmother?
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Date: 9/2/2010 8:33:00 PM
A REAL LIFE EXPERIENCE EXPRESSED THROUGH TENDER VERSE ! SARA , THANKS FOR BREAKING THE JINKS ! ! I REALLY THOUGHT MY 'INCA MAIL RUNNERS ' - WAS NOT WORTH READING ! BUT YOU CONFIRM IT IS NOT SO ! THANKS ! BEST WISHES , - Raj
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Date: 9/2/2010 3:00:00 PM
Sara, you could enter this one in the "Divine Intervention" contest as well. Surely it speaks to that theme as well. Thanks for your comment. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/2/2010 12:37:00 PM
A wonderful write Sara gosh what you went through so glad your here to tell the tale...good luck in the contest....Allie
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Date: 9/2/2010 11:53:00 AM
Marriage and Motherhood tend to excel one's growth process in Life.. I learned very young but am thankful I did and put my trust in God and good ole MOM to help me out... a wonderful piece for the contest.. good luck my friend..with luv..
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Date: 9/2/2010 10:26:00 AM
Sara, this is such a moving account of your near-death experience. I'm so glad you recovered from this surgery and have been able to be there for your children. Strong write that will do very well in Jared's contest. Wishing you success in all you do. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/2/2010 10:05:00 AM
wow! Sara, very deep and gripping enjoyed,..p.d.
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Date: 9/2/2010 9:36:00 AM
very intrestion thought the style has made it vague. out of body experiences should be told with all clarity. someone might be watching. john
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Date: 9/2/2010 7:39:00 AM
suspenceful.jhl
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