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The Return

A tenebrous void occupies my soul
like a queasy, dark, wintry cloud
hanging low and heavy with sleet and frost.
No gelid wind blows it away
and I despair.  I cannot forget the dead.

An empty, lonely chapel still beacons.
It stands alone 
amongst the tall dark pines
of an abandoned forest.
Inside, the dim light filters poorly
through dirty broken stained glass.

There's nothing inside but dust.
No chairs, no pews 
for the weary traveller.
I sit on the cold slab tomb,
wonder who was laid to rest
inside the sepulchre.
Then did I realise I was alive.
All memories stored deep inside me.
The waking of empathy
especially to the self, is painful.
How oft had I tried to erase
my thoughts on you?
 
I leave the disused chapel 
and return to my empty home.
I still think of you.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Romios Avatar
October 19, 2024 at 9:31 AM
Very dramatic and you paint poetically both poem and mood. Memories do waltz in our heads. And each time we speak of a dead person, it is very Respectful AND IN A SENSE keeos them alive. Otherwise, they disappear. So do share about your lost ones. It serves you both! Not only that, but give us a better picture of who you were,in relationship to that person. A FAV! Merci, Pangie
Roper Avatar
October 19, 2024 at 8:46 AM
Great imagery and dread my friend. The dead never leave us; their image and presence are always there to reminds us to say hello and we miss you. Enjoyed reading. Hugs
George Avatar
October 15, 2024 at 9:26 PM
Visiting a long deserted chapel in the heart of a forest is haunting and brings painful memories. The usage 'tenebrous void' clearly suggests your state of mind. With no chairs or pews to sit, you sat on the cold piece of marble.... reminiscing forgone memories. Powerfully presented.
Williams Avatar
October 15, 2024 at 4:58 AM
Dearest Victor, This piece beautifully captures the depth of grief and introspection. The imagery of the "tenebrous void" and the abandoned chapel creates a powerful sense of isolation and loss, while the transition from despair to the painful awakening of empathy is both haunting and tender. Wonderfully written...Hugs
Nuwas Avatar
October 14, 2024 at 1:37 AM
I can feel every word in this poem.
Cunningham Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 11:28 PM
Quite a sad verse Victor, revisiting old buildings always brings up memories. Tom
Greenhough Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 6:51 PM
I am sad for the unloved chapel and for the mystery person who is in the tomb. The descriptions continue further than the poem because my mind lights up with questions. I enjoy your poem.
Rose  Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 5:22 PM
sometime we find God there in those old abandoned churches, he returns to us in so many ways, if we but sit and hold space with Him, I really enjoyed your poem Victor. May he never leave you alone.
Buehler Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 4:13 PM
So touching, sad and lovely, Victor. Nicely written.
Hind Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 2:44 PM
Very haunting...with descriptive adjectives, making the feelings stirred in the reader- it's great!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 10:18 AM
As always, Victor, your poems have emotional impact. Here we have a chapel with dirty stained-glass, dust, and emptied of chairs and pews…love the chapel amidst the tall dark pines, though only occupied by a weary traveller.
May Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 6:24 AM
An abandoned chapel sets the scene for this poignant verse . Very nicely penned
Sands Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 5:11 AM
This is a powerful poem . I can feel it. Very well written Victor :)
Allison Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 3:38 AM
aww Victor such a poignant piece my friend, I know how much you miss your lovely wife so much, and I was so blessed to meet Liliane when we visited Malta:-) i think of you often my friend:-) hugs Jan xx
M  Avatar
October 13, 2024 at 2:05 AM
Oh Victor how very moving and sorrowful….l know you miss your wife more than anything and l am truly sorry you are so sad Victor….l wish l could give you a big cuddle and take you out for a cuppa and have a good laugh together! Cuddles….Debx
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