The Quiet One

The Quiet One

How shall I begin my story
I hardly knew that he was there
Yes, he really seemed nice enough
with those blue eyes and light blonde hair

When I heard what had happened
I must say I was suspicious 
A word written on the body
in red lipstick said delicious

Now I'm not one prone to gossip
But what I'm telling you is true
I racked my brain for answers
Trying to search through every clue

Yes I had noticed him watching
As she gracefully tossed her hair
She was a beautiful woman
I understand why he would stare

Still there was something different 
He had a strange look in his eyes
His pupils were so dilated
In fact they were double in size

It truly seemed a dark hunger
for sure he was licking his lips
Nothing will ever be the same
In his room I found leather whips

I'm sorry I can't go further 
It's true that monster framed me
The quiet ones are so clever
I beg you to please set me free


For Broken Wing's Contest
Written June 7th, 2017
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Raven Avatar
December 15, 2018 at 11:36 AM
Hi Richard, a wonderful Psychological write. I was gripped from the first word to the last. You managed to send a chill down my spine. I was engrossed in the heart of the words. Such true imagery painted by your excellent words. This one has to be a fave Richard. You really hooked me good. Have a wonderful weekend. your friend always....Mike.
Lamoureux Avatar
September 14, 2023 at 5:24 AM
Sorry I missed this comment Vlad.
S. Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 7:33 AM
I love poems like this. Beautifully written, it sent a wonderful chill down my spine.. "The quiet ones are so clever" this is my favorite line <3
Lamoureux Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 9:13 AM
Thanks once again. I am off to see if you have written more.
Tripp Avatar
November 28, 2017 at 8:11 AM
Okay. I'm chilled. Thoroughly freaked out here. Hoping that was your intent. Lol
Lamoureux Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 9:14 AM
Yes Indeed it was.
Vaso Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 10:54 PM
I really liked the end to this one, very clever!!
De Beaulieu Avatar
August 10, 2017 at 9:21 AM
For me i find this poem to be sad and scary. Have a nice day my friend.
Teagan Avatar
July 13, 2017 at 10:57 AM
Hey you, how've you been? Wow this one is so creepy! I love all the clues... the little details, like the dilated eyes.... very clever and well written.
B. Avatar
July 10, 2017 at 1:39 PM
I agree with Tim's comment. I enjoyed the read. Excellent!! :)
Dietrich Avatar
July 9, 2017 at 7:42 PM
Psychological horror That's what I like to see!! Well done, Richard. And Congrats.
Walsh Avatar
July 7, 2017 at 1:20 PM
Ordinary, run of the mill madness Rich. . . a great read . . . funny, peculiar how the less than great ones we write win awards and the ones we revere seldom do though! Just food for thought . . . congrats again!
Goff Avatar
July 4, 2017 at 10:30 AM
Wow! twists & turns in this suspenseful poem, Richard!
Mccall Avatar
July 4, 2017 at 10:23 AM
Wow that was not the ending I expected. What a clever and well written piece.
Thirtyseven Avatar
July 3, 2017 at 9:43 AM
dazzled again.
Nusker Avatar
June 27, 2017 at 11:33 PM
Quite an enjoyable poem written skillfully. Congrats on your win, Richard.
Allison Avatar
June 27, 2017 at 4:40 PM
creepy but humourous too Richard! Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Hamilton Avatar
June 27, 2017 at 3:55 PM
Congrats on a great win Rick, scary stuff!
Manassian Avatar
June 17, 2017 at 10:19 AM
Brilliant....wow! Great write...
Thirtyseven Avatar
June 16, 2017 at 8:36 AM
Oh that is a pure, delicious joy to read. A fav for tweeting, for sure.
Robinson Jr. Avatar
June 11, 2017 at 2:11 PM
Dark reflections illuminates this humor-beneath-the-surface poem, Richard. It had so many twists and turns to it. You took us, the reader, on a wonderfully, scary ride. A Hitchcock award quality poem. Love and peace, my dear friend.
White Avatar
June 10, 2017 at 2:12 PM
Superbly written, as always. You managed to give me the creeps :)
Downing  Avatar
June 9, 2017 at 7:00 PM
Sounds a bit creepy, but a great write... hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
June 9, 2017 at 8:52 AM
Thanks to all for comments. I'm at a busy time so I would love to answer individually but can't.
Smith Avatar
June 7, 2017 at 9:23 AM
We never truly know what is going on in someone's mind. Excellent
Andresen Avatar
June 7, 2017 at 5:13 AM
- A scary face ... great written for the contest, Richard - Good luck - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Wolf Avatar
June 7, 2017 at 1:59 AM
This is a superb write, Richard! And funny too! Best of luck to you
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