The Quicksand of Thought

Like sands of thought, a whirlpool's dizzy spins
and holes of black, where not a prayer escapes,
the gravity ~ temptation's lurid sins,
while empty vacuums fill and chaste guilt drapes.
While strung...there draws a bow that sheds a tear
on sweet vibrato's last remembered breath,
now echoes in the breast that held you near
and haunting dreams that can't accept your death.
Such blame...the trembling mirror held,
not far enough to see reflected truths,
yet close enough to feel the growing swells,
remembering the hopes when we were youths.
   I languish in the quicksand of my thoughts,
   where every lingering memory was wrought...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Parker Avatar
April 26, 2024 at 12:27 PM
I can't express my thoughts any better than Daniel did...I enjoy reading your sonnets, though I've written a lot of them I haven't mastered them the way you have...
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April 26, 2024 at 7:31 AM
Hello Craig, I loved that you captured the tumultuous nature of our inner landscape with such depth and elegance. The imagery of quicksand and swirling thoughts reflects our struggles in confronting our past and navigating our present. And yet, you evoke a sense of introspection and empathy, inviting readers to confront their own inner conflicts. A beautifully crafted piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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