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The Queen On Emerging From Her Refuge

She’d dwelt within a palace, and outside it, geese and brilliant peacocks used to strut inside a fragrant garden. As a bride, she’d said her vows beside the roses, but today no scent of blooms perfumes the air. The terrace sculptures, rubble now, are strewn across the floor. She gazes eastward where the mangos’ branches danced beneath the moon when zephyrs softly blew. Like poison, now a vapor comes, beginning to enwreathe her husband’s realm. There is a smell so foul her heart wells up with dread; she cannot breathe. As ashes drift around, she hangs her head with certainty her one beloved is dead. Written by Andrea Dietrich Oct. 11, 2014 for the Top Gun Poetry - Structured forms - Iambic verse III of Giorgio A. V. Form: Iambic Pentameter in an English Sonnet

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Date: 11/28/2014 7:33:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 11/8/2014 5:49:00 AM
Enjoyed the piece, congrats on the win, Andrea
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Date: 11/6/2014 9:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Andrea.
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Date: 10/15/2014 1:52:00 PM
really enjoyed this compassionate write, Andrea - lovely descriptions too
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Date: 10/15/2014 10:50:00 AM
Better to be a peasant than patrician, eh, when all turns to ashes. Done with understanding and skill. Love, daver
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Date: 10/15/2014 8:58:00 AM
Wow, what a sonnet! You can feel the sorrow and despair creeping into her life.
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Date: 10/13/2014 6:46:00 PM
Amazing visual of encroaching sorrow upon a face and heart old in optimism yet young in grief, Beloved fallen to time ashen. This poem has a marvelous harmony of joy and pain with masterful rhyme Andrea...J.A.B.
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Date: 10/13/2014 3:39:00 AM
really very beautifully painted andrea love the visions drawn
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Date: 10/12/2014 2:46:00 PM
Brilliant!!!! This has to at least tie for the top spot. I can see other sonnets that are as good but it doesn't get better than this. I will fav this. Do I use the word this enough. I think I hold the Guinness World Record for this.
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Date: 10/12/2014 8:26:00 AM
You seriously are the master of sonnets. The language and imagery you use is, as always, breathtaking. I am going to send you soupmail to explain why I was away for so long - it's a long story!
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Date: 10/12/2014 7:25:00 AM
Interesting work..Way to go for the contest..Reads like a winner..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/12/2014 5:10:00 AM
stunning sonnet Andrea amazing imagery good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xxx
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Date: 10/12/2014 1:09:00 AM
Wonderful sonnet Andrea! Sure winner! Sadness in the end, great imagery n superb pic painted! Best wishes!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2014 1:12:00 AM
Dr. Upma. It's so strange, I was writing a reply to my sister and it appeared under YOUR comment to me. Sorry about that. I don't know how it happened. Anyway, thanks for seeing my sonnet and congrats again in my contest that I was so happy with!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2014 1:11:00 AM
thanks, Jenny, you are the sweetest of my sisters! So supportive. I am writing this here because I know you have no soupmail or contact box here. wish you were a poet too, so I could see your work! well, you can play piano and violin, two things I will never be able to do!!!
Date: 10/11/2014 11:40:00 PM
With your beautiful knack of imagery this tale unfolds. Truly a wonderful sonnet. Sad but beautiful. I will be faving this.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2014 1:13:00 AM
a test here to see if you can get replies here because I just sent one meant for you but to the wrong person!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2014 1:13:00 AM
my reply to you is on the poet's comment above yours!

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