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THE PEACEMAKER SLEPT

The sun is up, the sun is yellow, shining bright. Reflection of chrome, pointed nowhere in particular. Where there should be peace, it’s high noon. A breakdown in communication, shrieking bars. Reflection of chrome, pointed nowhere in particular, until an itching trigger finger got caught in its snare. A breakdown in communication, shrieking bars, teeth bared between tumbleweed growth on worn face. Until an itching trigger finger got caught in its snare, the peacemaker slept with his stetson over good eye. Teeth bared, between tumbleweed growth on worn face, an enemy with a singular task approaches his foe. The peacemaker slept with his stetson over good eye, a scarred patch could see past the dusty row. An enemy, with a singular task, approaches his foe, notorious with two-fisted cannons to smoke him. A scarred patch could see past the dusty row, his hearing, respectable - comes recurring nightmare, notorious with two fisted cannons to smoke him. A red-tailed hawk tattles on the uncuffed catalyst. His hearing, respectable - comes recurring nightmare. Where there should be peace, it’s high noon A red-tailed hawk tattles on the uncuffed catalyst. The sun is up, the sun is yellow, shining bright.

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Date: 3/22/2024 11:05:00 PM
Kim a very difficult style of Poetry that you have mastered. Best wishes for the contest...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:35:00 AM
Thank you, Mike! :)
Date: 3/22/2024 10:26:00 AM
So well done, Kim! I love your rendition of High Noon in pantoum and the metaphor, peacemaker, is so creative! If this is for a contest, blest wishes. Blessings!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:36:00 AM
No contest. Just for fun!
Date: 3/22/2024 10:09:00 AM
This is so well done Kim!. A fav
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:36:00 AM
Thank you so much!
Date: 3/22/2024 4:14:00 AM
A great pantoum not easy to write as I well know. Perfect imagery throughout. Great talent. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:36:00 AM
I so appreciate you and your encouragement, Victor!
Date: 3/21/2024 7:31:00 PM
It seems as if the foe cannot burn him. Even as it's creeping up to get him, he still sees it coming. The sun is shining on it all- brighter than anything. Hmmm...I love this form, and you did it justice. Hats off, gal, to your talents. <3 xx hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:37:00 AM
Hugs-a-million, Paige! :)
Date: 3/21/2024 4:16:00 PM
Wow, Kim! So meticulously written with vivid imagery and great storytelling. I felt like I was watching that old classical Western move (High Noon) I think. You created a masterpiece in Pantoum form form. Have a great evening, hugs, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:37:00 AM
I truly appreciate that, Sara! :)
Date: 3/21/2024 1:49:00 PM
An incredible work of art. Your talent abounds. A visual feast, a joy to read.well done. Pete.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:38:00 AM
Thank you, Pete! :)
Date: 3/21/2024 12:46:00 PM
Hey Kim, your captures the essence of a classic Western showdown, weaving together vivid imagery, compelling characters, and a sense of foreboding to create a gripping narrative that transports the reader to the dusty plains of the frontier...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2024 7:38:00 AM
ahh…thank you so much, my friend! :)
Date: 3/21/2024 11:44:00 AM
What a story/write. Great Ending.....Have blessed day writing away................
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/21/2024 11:53:00 AM
So glad you liked it! We sharpen each other on PS! God bless you, sweet friend!
Date: 3/21/2024 11:36:00 AM
Dear Kim, Such a tense Western scene, where the silence before the storm is palpable. The imagery of the sun, the chrome, and the peacemaker's stoic stance creates a gripping atmosphere of impending conflict. Kim it's a powerful reflection on the fragility of peace and the inevitability of violence in a lawless land. - Blessings, Daniel
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/21/2024 11:52:00 AM
Thank you so much, Daniel! You always have a great and impactful compact. Hugs ~ Kim

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