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The Oxymoron

The Oxymoron Dark light flood - seeped the small room, Music droned loud with a dull sharpness. As people stood and danced alone together, Violent sways of percussion brushed my ear A teenage adult smiled grimly as courage fled, When I, dared to ask the girl woman to dance. I stood shuffling in brave fear like the living dead, A serious joke that I hoped no one laughed at. Her smile frowned as she moved in an irregular pattern, I made my forward retreat to the other side of the room And watched her then in the now deafening silence, With such sweet sorrow, as she danced with another.

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Harry Horsman

Date: 1/26/2017 8:53:00 AM

This is so clever, an excellent poem,

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 2/20/2017 2:23:00 PM

Thank you Harry and sorry for the late reply.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/8/2016 1:50:00 AM

made me smile Seosamh - I guess many can relate to your clever lines:-) congrats on your win

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/9/2016 9:48:00 AM

Thank you for reading and leaving a kind comment, glad it brought a smile ;)

Lu Loo

Date: 9/7/2016 1:19:00 PM

Seosamh, great usage of oxymorons...congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/9/2016 9:49:00 AM

Thank you Laura for taking the time to read and leave a kind comment, its really appreciated.

Elton Camp

Date: 12/6/2013 9:13:00 AM

What a great job of working in multiple examples!

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 12/7/2013 7:48:00 AM

Hi Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment on my poem.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 11/22/2013 8:32:00 AM

Hi Seosamh: Thanks for your comments on my three poems. I look forward to reading more of yours.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 11/21/2013 3:42:00 PM

A perfect poetic depiction of fear and disappointment personified when she refused to dance with you. I recalled that as a young man. great poem and emotional too.

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 11/21/2013 5:57:00 PM

Hi thank you for taking the time to read and offer such a kind comment on my poem.

Fabiyas M V

Date: 9/10/2013 9:02:00 AM

A novel idea.Penned nicely,Seosamh

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/10/2013 6:05:00 PM

Thank you for reading and comment hope you enjoyed it.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 9/8/2013 12:53:00 AM

A splendid kinda wistfully endin poem! U pennd it in a sublime way! Tak care poetess seosam:)

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/10/2013 6:05:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/6/2013 3:31:00 AM

An oxymoron it is But what an oxymoron! Beauty dances gracefully with poetry! Thank you for visiting!

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/7/2013 6:21:00 AM

Thank you, for reading and taking the time to comment, its greatly appreciated.

Skat A

Date: 9/4/2013 5:58:00 PM

Kind of odd, but I like it. kind of sad.... enjoyed. Love ~SKAT~

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 9/7/2013 6:26:00 AM

lol yes it is, trying to play with the word, add some humour and pathos. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment.

Donna Jones

Date: 8/12/2013 7:11:00 PM

Danced alone together....smile frowned..you know this is awesome.....really enjoyed tonight...

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 8/20/2013 11:05:00 AM

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and your very generous comment

Carol Eastman

Date: 7/16/2013 4:24:00 PM

A tremendously descriptive read. Made me feel there with you.

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/18/2013 1:08:00 PM

Thank you for reading and comment :)

Steven Mitchell

Date: 7/14/2013 11:38:00 AM

clever well written....why didnt i think of it, nice one you nailed it

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/16/2013 1:25:00 PM

Hi thanks for reading and the positive comment.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/10/2013 2:59:00 PM

Nicely done!! I remember feeling sad like this at many a school and church dance when I was young.

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/10/2013 7:08:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem.

John Loving Iii

Date: 7/9/2013 8:47:00 PM

I liked the construction the title helped me .wondering your personality and age .

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/10/2013 2:37:00 PM

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.

Jack Horne

Date: 7/9/2013 2:47:00 PM

very well written, my friend Congrats on your wins

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/10/2013 2:36:00 PM

hank you for reading and good wishes

Julie Heckman

Date: 7/8/2013 10:49:00 AM

such is life at time...very intelligent work

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/9/2013 1:40:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words.:) and taking the time to read and comment.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/6/2013 4:54:00 PM

I like your uses of the oxymoron..Enjoyed reading this humorous one..Thanks for the visit to my work..Sara

Seosamh De Burca
Date: 7/9/2013 1:39:00 PM

Hi and thank you for taking the time to read and comment, glad you enjoyed.:)