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The Moment - Tanka 2 Contest

Green grass stroke the skin 
Touching feeling the moment 
Hearts flying skyward seeking 
Crescendo of song .... 
You without sin shall forgive. 

Penned 17 March 2015 

Tanka 2. 5-7-7-5-7

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Sandra Haight Date: 3/23/2015 1:37:00 PM Seren, congratulations on your win for your Tanka! Sandra Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/22/2015 1:57:00 PM SEREN, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~ Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 3/21/2015 10:14:00 PM This is a brilliant tanka, you know it would of placed higher other than the typo. Personally I stick my tongue out and plea poetic license! This is a fav for me. Login to Reply Seren Roberts Date: 3/21/2015 11:23:00 PM Oh Maurice its a typo , yet am pleased it was thought of as being good.....Seren

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/21/2015 9:31:00 PM This was very interesting and I like how you kind of gave a twist to the old "you without sin throw the first stone." Did you mean green grass "strokes" the skin? I am such a stickler for things like that, or this would have scored higher! Login to Reply Seren Roberts Date: 3/21/2015 9:41:00 PM thank you Andrea looks like i made a typo, ahh well thank you for placing me anyway.....Seren

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 3/17/2015 6:02:00 AM Lovely. Well penned. Enjoyed. Tfs Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 3/17/2015 2:45:00 AM Beautifully penned Seren Good luck with the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply