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The Memory of 'Me and You'

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I thought the dust had settled over what used to be 'us' but today I found a picture and heard echoes of your voice your footsteps in the hall and then it stopped... you'd fallen, from choice and I kept walking leaving the memory of 'me and you' It returned, unwanted, unbidden after being hidden for years bitter words spoken in haste laying waste to love verbal wars were lethal weapons thrown in bloody battle and then it stopped... because I left, but scars remain grave markers of 'me and you' We've both moved on but I still feel you near in the notes of songs about a love gone wrong I tore them from my heart and then it stopped... but they left me blue still playing in my mind an unfinished aria of 'me and you' Sometimes I wake and reach across the bed then hang my head, bite my lip And taste salt upon my fingertip I walk the hall, crying and then it stops... when I remember why I left relive what you'd done to fracture the memory of 'me and you' ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: June 27th 2017 And then it stopped contest sponsored by John Lawless

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John Hamilton

Date: 7/9/2017 12:57:00 PM

Soo sad but at least what comes out of sadness is great writing, I know it's no consolation but your words may be a catharsis of sorts, and may even help others to cope, another worthy winner Lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 8:11:00 PM

It is somewhat of a consolation, John. Thank you for always being so encouraging to me with poetry and the ways of life.

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/9/2017 6:33:00 AM

Back to say congratulations Lin on your win:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 8:10:00 PM

Thanks.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/8/2017 10:13:00 PM

OMG this is fantastic Lin! It should also be classified in First place. It is so indicative of sadness that holds on throughout our lives when love goes wrong. A FAVE! Congratulations! I hope you share this wonderful poem with PFT members. I know they would love it too! Hugs, Connie

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 4:58:00 AM

Thanks so much, Connie. Your saying it is equal and deserving of having a top spot is good enough for me. It's really appreciated.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/8/2017 10:10:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 4:57:00 AM

Thank you for a return visit, Jan.

Dean Wood

Date: 7/8/2017 3:25:00 PM

Oh, this is so beautiful Lin. Heartbreaking yet hopeful. Congratulations on your win in this contest. Well deserved! - Dean

Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 3:56:00 PM

I really appreciate your kind comments, Dean. Thank you.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/8/2017 2:55:00 PM

Such a painful part to re-live and re-tell, however well expressed, congratulations for your survival and your placement in the contest.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 3:07:00 PM

It's difficult to write but easy to recall. Thank you on both counts, Charlie.

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/8/2017 9:03:00 AM

emotionally raw, straight bare in its exposure of pain, a lot of strength in its revealing as memories can be quite cold and painful when they flood the mind without notice...congratulations on your win

Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 3:06:00 PM

Thank you for your sensitive comments, Frederic. They're appreciated very much.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/8/2017 7:57:00 AM

Lin, you've told a sad story--the story so many can relate to--SO beautifully. Congrats on your win! Janice

Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 8:37:00 AM

Sadly, it's a true story, Janice. Thank you so very much.

John Lawless

Date: 7/8/2017 7:54:00 AM

Lin, the last line of each stanza echoes with the stabbing pain of memory's wounds -unhealed. A very well structured and well written poem. Thanks for entering the contest.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/8/2017 8:36:00 AM

Thank you for honoring my poetry in your contest, John. I enjoyed writing for you.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/28/2017 10:53:00 PM

I can hear the words, have worn out a carpet myself, walking the halls, and the image you choose, matches the poem so well! Beautiful poem.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2017 9:01:00 AM

It's long past time we either replace the carpet or find better halls in which to tread. Thank you, Arthur. ;-)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/27/2017 8:45:00 PM

Beautiful truths this poem bespeak, Lin. Most everyone can relate to this poem in some fashion. As for myself, I'm twenty years removed from "Me and You." I thank God for Him helping me move past the hurt. We hurt each other ... so the pain went both ways. Nowadays, I only remember the loving moments. This makes me smile, like your poem did. Ty for sharing this gem of a poem, dear friend. Love always.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/28/2017 9:12:00 PM

This kind of heartache never completely fades away. I, too, have God to thank for getting me through the roughest months...years. Thank you very much for sharing your pain, Freddie, and for caring about this poem's message.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/27/2017 1:30:00 PM

You show your strength here but also your vulnerability as well...terrific Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 1:44:00 PM

Thank you so much, Tim. My writes today seem to be a titch heavy.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/27/2017 12:30:00 PM

A (((fantabulous))) write Lin...did you ever consider being a poet lol...your mastery is at work today...love & harmony...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 1:28:00 PM

Hello my Warrior friend. No, I will never consider myself a poet for I've much yet to learn, but I like your idea of love & harmony. Thanks!

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/27/2017 9:19:00 AM

Lin, this is very well written and powerful. I can feel it in the words. I like how you ended it too. Good luck in the contest.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 9:27:00 AM

Thank you very much, Heidi. Each time I read it, I get goosebumps after the last verse. I should stop the torture of doing that, right? We really are our worst enemy.

White Wolf

Date: 6/27/2017 8:55:00 AM

Outstanding write, Lin! In the notes of songs about a love gone wrong! Love that! Best of luck to you

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 9:14:00 AM

Thanks so much, W. Wolf. I appreciate your kind thoughts and pointing out what you liked. ;-)

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/27/2017 8:54:00 AM

Some memories are best forgotten. Masterfully crafted, Peaches. I know John will love this:)

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 9:13:00 AM

If I could forget, I surely would. Thanks for the compliment and well wishes, Danny.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/27/2017 8:33:00 AM

Oh Lin this is a tearjerker of a poem that I guess many people can relate to after a relationship has ended, a photograph, a song, a place can evoke such powerful often sad memories :-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 9:12:00 AM

It hurt a little to write, but I had to finish it. Thank you very much, Jan.

Chris Green

Date: 6/27/2017 8:23:00 AM

This was really very well crafted and written Lin. I liked this a lot. Best wishes in the contest, this poem should do well.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 9:11:00 AM

I appreciate your well wishes, Chris. Thank you.