Lin Lane Poet Free verse

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The Memory of 'Me and You'

I thought the dust had settled
over what used to be 'us'
but today I found a picture
and heard echoes of your voice
your footsteps in the hall
and then it stopped...
you'd fallen, from choice
and I kept walking
leaving the memory of 'me and you'

It returned, unwanted, unbidden
after being hidden for years
bitter words spoken in haste
laying waste to love
verbal wars were lethal weapons 
thrown in bloody battle
and then it stopped...
because I left, but scars remain
grave markers of 'me and you'

We've both moved on
but I still feel you near
in the notes of songs
about a love gone wrong
I tore them from my heart
and then it stopped...
but they left me blue
still playing in my mind
an unfinished aria of 'me and you'

Sometimes I wake
and reach across the bed
then hang my head, bite my lip
And taste salt upon my fingertip
I walk the hall, crying
and then it stops...
when I remember why I left
relive what you'd done
to fracture the memory of 'me and you'

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June 27th 2017
And then it stopped contest
sponsored by John Lawless

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John Hamilton July 9, 2017 at 12:57 PM Soo sad but at least what comes out of sadness is great writing, I know it's no consolation but your words may be a catharsis of sorts, and may even help others to cope, another worthy winner Lin! Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 8:11 PM It is somewhat of a consolation, John. Thank you for always being so encouraging to me with poetry and the ways of life.

Daniel Turner July 9, 2017 at 6:33 AM Back to say congratulations Lin on your win:) Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 8:10 PM Thanks.

Connie Marcum Wong July 8, 2017 at 10:13 PM OMG this is fantastic Lin! It should also be classified in First place. It is so indicative of sadness that holds on throughout our lives when love goes wrong. A FAVE! Congratulations! I hope you share this wonderful poem with PFT members. I know they would love it too! Hugs, Connie Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 4:58 AM Thanks so much, Connie. Your saying it is equal and deserving of having a top spot is good enough for me. It's really appreciated.

Jan Allison July 8, 2017 at 10:10 PM dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 4:57 AM Thank you for a return visit, Jan.

Dean Wood July 8, 2017 at 3:25 PM Oh, this is so beautiful Lin. Heartbreaking yet hopeful. Congratulations on your win in this contest. Well deserved! - Dean Lin Lane July 8, 2017 at 3:56 PM I really appreciate your kind comments, Dean. Thank you.

Charlie Smith July 8, 2017 at 2:55 PM Such a painful part to re-live and re-tell, however well expressed, congratulations for your survival and your placement in the contest. Lin Lane July 8, 2017 at 3:07 PM It's difficult to write but easy to recall. Thank you on both counts, Charlie.

Frederic Parker July 8, 2017 at 9:03 AM emotionally raw, straight bare in its exposure of pain, a lot of strength in its revealing as memories can be quite cold and painful when they flood the mind without notice...congratulations on your win Lin Lane July 8, 2017 at 3:06 PM Thank you for your sensitive comments, Frederic. They're appreciated very much.

Janice Canerdy July 8, 2017 at 7:57 AM Lin, you've told a sad story--the story so many can relate to--SO beautifully. Congrats on your win! Janice Lin Lane July 8, 2017 at 8:37 AM Sadly, it's a true story, Janice. Thank you so very much.

John Lawless July 8, 2017 at 7:54 AM Lin, the last line of each stanza echoes with the stabbing pain of memory's wounds -unhealed. A very well structured and well written poem. Thanks for entering the contest. Lin Lane July 8, 2017 at 8:36 AM Thank you for honoring my poetry in your contest, John. I enjoyed writing for you.

Freddie Robinson Jr. June 27, 2017 at 8:45 PM Beautiful truths this poem bespeak, Lin. Most everyone can relate to this poem in some fashion. As for myself, I'm twenty years removed from "Me and You." I thank God for Him helping me move past the hurt. We hurt each other ... so the pain went both ways. Nowadays, I only remember the loving moments. This makes me smile, like your poem did. Ty for sharing this gem of a poem, dear friend. Love always. Lin Lane June 28, 2017 at 9:12 PM This kind of heartache never completely fades away. I, too, have God to thank for getting me through the roughest months...years. Thank you very much for sharing your pain, Freddie, and for caring about this poem's message.

Tim Smith June 27, 2017 at 1:30 PM You show your strength here but also your vulnerability as well...terrific Lin Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 1:44 PM Thank you so much, Tim. My writes today seem to be a titch heavy.

Winged Warrior June 27, 2017 at 12:30 PM A (((fantabulous))) write Lin...did you ever consider being a poet lol...your mastery is at work today...love & harmony...^WW^ Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 1:28 PM Hello my Warrior friend. No, I will never consider myself a poet for I've much yet to learn, but I like your idea of love & harmony. Thanks!

Heidi Sands June 27, 2017 at 9:19 AM Lin, this is very well written and powerful. I can feel it in the words. I like how you ended it too. Good luck in the contest. Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 9:27 AM Thank you very much, Heidi. Each time I read it, I get goosebumps after the last verse. I should stop the torture of doing that, right? We really are our worst enemy.

White Wolf June 27, 2017 at 8:55 AM Outstanding write, Lin! In the notes of songs about a love gone wrong! Love that! Best of luck to you Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 9:14 AM Thanks so much, W. Wolf. I appreciate your kind thoughts and pointing out what you liked. ;-)

Daniel Turner June 27, 2017 at 8:54 AM Some memories are best forgotten. Masterfully crafted, Peaches. I know John will love this:) Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 9:13 AM If I could forget, I surely would. Thanks for the compliment and well wishes, Danny.

Jan Allison June 27, 2017 at 8:33 AM Oh Lin this is a tearjerker of a poem that I guess many people can relate to after a relationship has ended, a photograph, a song, a place can evoke such powerful often sad memories :-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 9:12 AM It hurt a little to write, but I had to finish it. Thank you very much, Jan.

Chris Green June 27, 2017 at 8:23 AM This was really very well crafted and written Lin. I liked this a lot. Best wishes in the contest, this poem should do well. Lin Lane June 27, 2017 at 9:11 AM I appreciate your well wishes, Chris. Thank you.