The Makeover-Shots

The Makeover- Shots

You take one shot
And I miss you
I know you're gone
But I still wanna kiss you

You've made yourself a monster
Both you and me you scar
Your eyes are dimly lit
But behind shines who you are

Who you used to be

The part that misses me

(Pre Edit: January 17, 2015)

One shot.
One decision.
Never to be seen again.

Late night kisses
And sweet nothings
Long gone
To yellowed eyes
And an emptied heart.

Your monster in the making
Slowly made its way
To the surface
And only in your dimly-lit
Blood-shot eyes
Is a near gone image
Of who used to lie behind
The addiction's pry.

The part that still loved
Me.

(Edited: March 10, 2015)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 4/19/2015 2:04:00 PM
Sorry that I am so late on the congrats, just recently found out the contest was finalized.. Big congrats on your win!!
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Date: 4/18/2015 5:33:00 PM
Brie, congratulations on your awesome win. Luv LINDA
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Date: 4/14/2015 11:53:00 AM
So nice to read your poetry this morning. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/17/2015 10:07:00 PM
Brie, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 3/11/2015 1:25:00 AM
Powerful write, Angelica. Edgy and raw. Welcome to Poetry Soup, where you'll get lots of encouragement, inspiration and warmth from a bunch of nice, sometimes quirky, people. Look forward to reading more from you. Mister Viv, with a score of #7 for your first submission. Well done x
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Date: 3/15/2015 5:34:00 PM
Thank you Mr. Viv! Though I thankfully haven't experienced much trauma in my life, I enjoy authoring poems from the POV of people at their lowest points, speaking for those without a voice. Thank you for being my first reviewer, and doing so at one in the morning. And the quirkier the people are here, the better, for I am known to be quite the oddball...
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