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The Lost Coin - Unfinished

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[This poem shows promise, but it is unfinished. So, it will be a collaboration. Anyone who wishes to do so is invited to write a suitable ending...preferably adding five (5) lines to the last stanza, or adding five lines and a three-line last stanza, bringing the story to a warm, satisfying conclusion. The rhyme and rhythm should follow the second stanza. Send your ending to my Soup Mail, and I will add the best ending to the poem. If you have any questions, Soup Mail me. Thanks!]

The coin lay flat unnoticed atop a garden ledge With weathering its shiny silver became a rustic gray Erosion with time eventually it lost its beveled edge. Years ago, a fair-haired tot searched for his lost dime Even shedding tears when his coin he could not find He searched everywhere, then looked another time Not remembering he had examined it while playing In the garden as he skipped across the field stones tall When he had grown tired, he had wound up laying, Looking at the clouds from atop the garden wall. As years passed, the garden neglected, the wall stayed And a middle-aged man remembered there was a ledge In the garden, where he had, as a small boy, often played. So, he went back to visit the old homeplace to recapture Memories of the happy times he had experienced there

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Date: 11/4/2021 7:51:00 AM
So delicate and gorgeously done " a middle-aged man remembered there was a ledge In the garden, where he had, as a small boy, often played" - WOW!
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Date: 11/4/2021 8:34:00 AM
I love the idea, Caren. I got stuck, frankly. I'm hoping someone will take up the challenge and complete this promising poem.

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