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The Loss of Innocence

As I was walking late one night along a downtown street I came upon a sad, sad sight that led to hope’s deplete. The painted ladies paced the night in black stiletto heels, and searched beneath the neon light for what the dark conceals. Along the row of sleezy bars and smoke filled cabarets where lonely men forget their scars and drown their woes away; there walked a girl so innocent, so gentle, meek, and mild; the pains of life lay imminent before this virgin child. She left her home and came out west, from Kansas I believe; the search for stardom was her quest; she thought she could achieve. Her dream be famous and be seen, a movie star to be; to see her face upon the screen and name up on marquee. But fame is such a fickle friend, and always out of reach; when lost, her life did soon descend and innocence impeach. Like those who came before her found, to make ends meet somehow, you had to compromise your ground, give up, give in, and now she’s doomed to always walk the night in black stiletto heels, and search beneath the neon light for what the dark conceals. And this, my story thus concludes a tale of childhood lost; for most the quest for fame eludes, and comes at such a cost.
April 30, 2018

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Date: 12/13/2018 1:35:00 PM
Perhaps her story would have been different, if she had scribbled outside the lines. Meaning: Dreams can always be reached, but sometimes- we have to be patient. Sometimes though, they don't come true, but never become less than your worth. Congratulations John, on this win. ~ Brandy
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John Gondolf
Date: 12/13/2018 3:02:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Brandy, as always I truly appreciate your support. John
Date: 12/12/2018 2:52:00 PM
such a touching poem John, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Gondolf
Date: 12/12/2018 3:29:00 PM
Thank you, Jan, I appreciate it.
Date: 12/12/2018 4:54:00 AM
I remember reading this previously, John, and was reminded of the tender concern it evoked for the girl. Congratulations on your second-place win! Competition was great and your entry was among the best. Best wishes, Carolyn
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John Gondolf
Date: 12/12/2018 5:11:00 AM
Thank you so much, Carolyn, and thanks for hosting the contest. Merry Christmas to you and yours. John
Date: 8/2/2018 10:50:00 PM
I hope those who exploit the innocence of the youth get to read this poem and let their conscience be stirred. This is a beautiful piece.
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John Gondolf
Date: 8/3/2018 4:17:00 AM
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, Karen, I appreciate it. John
Date: 7/13/2018 11:24:00 PM
Back to congratulate you again for your win again. Sad, heartbreaking poem.
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/14/2018 12:00:00 AM
Thank you, Susan, I appreciate your support so much. John
Date: 7/13/2018 10:11:00 PM
A powerful poem expressed with a gentle finesse, John. Congratulations with your wonderful win. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/13/2018 10:39:00 PM
Thank you so much, Susan, I appreciate your support. Best wishes. John
Date: 7/13/2018 5:58:00 PM
Congratulations on your awesome win. Nicely done... Hugs Eve
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/13/2018 6:36:00 PM
Thank you, Eve.
Date: 7/12/2018 9:37:00 AM
Congrats John on a nice rhyming poem, and a fine placement!
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Date: 5/29/2018 1:06:00 PM
This depicts such a sad story of lost hope and the death of an innocent dream. I can see the picture that you painted with this narrative.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/29/2018 1:55:00 PM
Thank you for your comments, Sandy, I appreciate you taking the time to read my poetry. I'm not sure what inspired me to write this except I heard the line "painted ladies" in a song and thought it would sound great in a poem; my mind works in strange ways sometimes. John
Date: 5/11/2018 7:59:00 AM
You've done a remarkable job painting a scene worthy of a canvas, making it come to life in that profound sadness and loss that some lives, for whatever reason, are condemned to-- congratulations on your win.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/11/2018 8:30:00 AM
Thanks so much for this wonderful comment, LJ, and thanks for reading my poetry, I appreciate it. John
Date: 5/10/2018 2:16:00 PM
Wow, such a powerful and emotional poem John... so sad, but congrats on your top win :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/11/2018 4:09:00 AM
Thank you so much, Pailey, I appreciate it. John
Date: 5/10/2018 1:22:00 PM
A very touching and well penned story, John. Congrats on your top win.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/11/2018 4:05:00 AM
Thanks, Line, I appreciate it.
Date: 5/10/2018 8:36:00 AM
Powerful!:)
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/10/2018 9:43:00 AM
Thanks, Natasha, I appreciate it, and thanks for taking time to read my poetry. John
Date: 5/10/2018 12:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your #1 win with this sad but real poem. Kind of haunting.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/10/2018 6:31:00 AM
Thanks for your comments, Susan, and thanks for the visit. I appreciate it. John
Date: 5/3/2018 5:06:00 AM
love the sincerity and caring here, John, in what is a wonderful poem..
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/8/2018 5:12:00 PM
Thanks, Harry, I appreciate your comments and visit. John
Date: 5/2/2018 2:24:00 PM
When we see these young girls, we often wonder how they were led to life on the streets. As you describe so beautifully, John, many of these girls probably had dreams of success when they first left home. A very touching story told in verse. Love, Carolyn
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 5/2/2018 4:11:00 PM
Wise thinking, John. I'll leave the judging to God.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/2/2018 2:36:00 PM
Thanks for your thoughts, Carolyn. I'm sure there are a thousand reasons why people end up on the streets and I'm certainly not going to judge them lest someone might judge me. John
Date: 4/30/2018 10:14:00 AM
Such a shame for many when they find that the streets are not paved with gold and end up in a life of sleeze and drugs, too proud to go home. Great narrative John. Tom.
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 5/2/2018 2:24:00 PM
I think most of the time their parents wold welcome them if they went back home, Tom. So sad.
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John Gondolf
Date: 4/30/2018 10:32:00 AM
Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it. John

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