The Long Sleep

Bent forward on his wooden chair,
inside his shack, with not a care,
he sits where fast to sleep he fell.
The old man’s sleeping long and well.

Companions waiting to be fed
or have their master pat their head,
wait at  his feet, but they can tell
the old man’s sleeping long and well.

One spotted mutt with doggie grace
extends a tongue to lick the face
of him whose form is but a shell. . .
The old man’s sleeping long and well.

Bent forward on his wooden chair,
the old man’s sleeping long and well. 


A Kyrielle Sonnet for the Briton Riviere Poery Contest
Link for the painting: http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Riviere_Briton_The_Long_Sleep.jpg
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 7/26/2013 6:10:00 AM
Lovely poem Andrea and congrats on the win.Enjoyed the sweet imagery succintly portrayed.
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Date: 7/24/2013 5:45:00 PM
Congratulations, I'm giving in now Petal, I'll be sleep talking Congratulations all night otherwise lol Take care, Richard
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Date: 7/20/2013 9:47:00 AM
awww, love this sweet write - I was expecting the 'sleeping' old man to be dead. So glad to see this one was a big winner
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Date: 7/19/2013 11:16:00 PM
Congrats on the win! It was a fine interpretation of the painting... Jack
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Date: 7/19/2013 8:47:00 PM
Love it!! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Andrea! Well done! Love, Annalise
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Date: 7/19/2013 4:59:00 PM
congrats on you win Shadow x smiles
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Date: 7/19/2013 1:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your joint top spot Andy xx
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Date: 7/19/2013 11:07:00 AM
great write and win Andrea...congrats
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Date: 7/19/2013 8:27:00 AM
wow! enjoyed Andrea, ... congratulations... Luv~ LINDA
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Date: 7/19/2013 12:25:00 AM
wow!!!! a very beautiful poem..I saw the picture!! soooooooo cute..I like it so much!! can I have this as my favorite? Big congratulations on your win!! hugs, Maria :)
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Date: 7/18/2013 9:55:00 PM
awesome Andrea, Congrats.... SKAT
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Date: 7/18/2013 7:17:00 PM
sweet! first rate. ran
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Date: 7/18/2013 6:49:00 PM
Andrea I remember this delightful poem. I'm happy it placed high up for a win. Big congrats and a well deserved, too. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/18/2013 5:09:00 PM
Huge Congrats on your number 1! I consider this the ideal entry of the contest, and undoubtedly the most poetically correct. Unstrained rhymes, consistent rhythm, consistent meter; not to mention excellently worded. I love it that you followed every contest rule and then some.
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Date: 7/18/2013 3:57:00 PM
I can see it........without really seeing it!! Well done, Andrea, and right on top where it belongs! Congrats!
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Date: 7/18/2013 3:37:00 PM
Congrats on your great win..I think that I already said that I knew it would be...Sara
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Date: 7/17/2013 8:47:00 PM
I love this, Andrea ;} fave's ,, I checked the picture out. I've written about 5 poems. Though they are not good enough to post ," I think" lov Deb
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Date: 7/17/2013 2:25:00 PM
OOOOO What a cliffhanger this is Petal. Is he in fact sleeping or what, you teaser lol, or maybe he just likes the dog licking his face, I dunno, I give up lol, Smart write. Take care, Richard
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Date: 7/17/2013 8:46:00 AM
its really great Andrea.
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Date: 7/16/2013 8:51:00 PM
Hi dear andrea..I have a soup m and blog issue.I have one of those pee pee error 500 when i usey phone..I can only comment here.I contacted tps..Hopefully.they.fix it dear.Re your blog..Itsvery interesting and my answer is..I will never give up my own flesh and blood for any man..Nor husband...or boyfriend or parents.I guess its the mother only which can feel.that.The bond from a mother to a child..Who can steal.that?
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Date: 7/16/2013 4:36:00 PM
Another fantastic poem Andrea. You've done this painting justice with your Kyrielle. I can't wait until I grow into a poetess like you. An inspiration to many on PS. It definitely sounds like a win. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 7/16/2013 7:38:00 AM
Love this one - a sure winner. At this point I can see myself as that old soul with his cats at his feet, totally oblivious to his long sleep. Love, daver
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Date: 7/16/2013 7:20:00 AM
Good morning Andrea, enjoyed reading again.
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Date: 7/16/2013 7:12:00 AM
very nicely penned Andrea.......I haven't seen the picture either, I will check it out
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Date: 7/16/2013 7:17:00 AM
I just saw the painting.....you did an great job!!
Date: 7/15/2013 2:09:00 PM
I have not seen the picture so I can only guess. The scene has been described quite well by our dear poetess.
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