The Long Sleep

Bent forward on his wooden chair,
inside his shack, with not a care,
he sits where fast to sleep he fell.
The old man’s sleeping long and well.

Companions waiting to be fed
or have their master pat their head,
wait at  his feet, but they can tell
the old man’s sleeping long and well.

One spotted mutt with doggie grace
extends a tongue to lick the face
of him whose form is but a shell. . .
The old man’s sleeping long and well.

Bent forward on his wooden chair,
the old man’s sleeping long and well. 


A Kyrielle Sonnet for the Briton Riviere Poery Contest
Link for the painting: http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Riviere_Briton_The_Long_Sleep.jpg
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Mohammed Avatar
July 26, 2013 at 6:10 AM
Lovely poem Andrea and congrats on the win.Enjoyed the sweet imagery succintly portrayed.
Seal Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 5:45 PM
Congratulations, I'm giving in now Petal, I'll be sleep talking Congratulations all night otherwise lol Take care, Richard
Horne Avatar
July 20, 2013 at 9:47 AM
awww, love this sweet write - I was expecting the 'sleeping' old man to be dead. So glad to see this one was a big winner
Jordan Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 11:16 PM
Congrats on the win! It was a fine interpretation of the painting... Jack
Haick Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 8:47 PM
Love it!! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Andrea! Well done! Love, Annalise
Hamilton Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 4:59 PM
congrats on you win Shadow x smiles
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 1:20 PM
Congratulations on your joint top spot Andy xx
May Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 11:07 AM
great write and win Andrea...congrats
A   Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 8:27 AM
wow! enjoyed Andrea, ... congratulations... Luv~ LINDA
Liwayway Avatar
July 19, 2013 at 12:25 AM
wow!!!! a very beautiful poem..I saw the picture!! soooooooo cute..I like it so much!! can I have this as my favorite? Big congratulations on your win!! hugs, Maria :)
A  Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 9:55 PM
awesome Andrea, Congrats.... SKAT
Curry Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 7:17 PM
sweet! first rate. ran
Gildersleeve Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 6:49 PM
Andrea I remember this delightful poem. I'm happy it placed high up for a win. Big congrats and a well deserved, too. Warm Smiles, Connie
Zerbst Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 5:09 PM
Huge Congrats on your number 1! I consider this the ideal entry of the contest, and undoubtedly the most poetically correct. Unstrained rhymes, consistent rhythm, consistent meter; not to mention excellently worded. I love it that you followed every contest rule and then some.
Richards Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 3:57 PM
I can see it........without really seeing it!! Well done, Andrea, and right on top where it belongs! Congrats!
Kendrick Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 3:37 PM
Congrats on your great win..I think that I already said that I knew it would be...Sara
Duncan Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 8:47 PM
I love this, Andrea ;} fave's ,, I checked the picture out. I've written about 5 poems. Though they are not good enough to post ," I think" lov Deb
Seal Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 2:25 PM
OOOOO What a cliffhanger this is Petal. Is he in fact sleeping or what, you teaser lol, or maybe he just likes the dog licking his face, I dunno, I give up lol, Smart write. Take care, Richard
Undertaker Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 8:46 AM
its really great Andrea.
Chircop Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 8:51 PM
Hi dear andrea..I have a soup m and blog issue.I have one of those pee pee error 500 when i usey phone..I can only comment here.I contacted tps..Hopefully.they.fix it dear.Re your blog..Itsvery interesting and my answer is..I will never give up my own flesh and blood for any man..Nor husband...or boyfriend or parents.I guess its the mother only which can feel.that.The bond from a mother to a child..Who can steal.that?
Gildersleeve Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 4:36 PM
Another fantastic poem Andrea. You've done this painting justice with your Kyrielle. I can't wait until I grow into a poetess like you. An inspiration to many on PS. It definitely sounds like a win. Warm Smiles, Connie
Austin Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 7:38 AM
Love this one - a sure winner. At this point I can see myself as that old soul with his cats at his feet, totally oblivious to his long sleep. Love, daver
Lamoureux Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 7:20 AM
Good morning Andrea, enjoyed reading again.
May Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 7:12 AM
very nicely penned Andrea.......I haven't seen the picture either, I will check it out
May Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 7:17 AM
I just saw the painting.....you did an great job!!
Johnson Avatar
July 15, 2013 at 2:09 PM
I have not seen the picture so I can only guess. The scene has been described quite well by our dear poetess.
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