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The Last Time I Peeked In Mama's Room

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I wondered how she would act that day. Her door was ajar; I peeked in. The scene I saw made me pray. She looked so angry; then I feared she’d come out. Would she whip me? Would she shout? Why would she? I, she had often said, was very bad; so she’d stay in bed, take pills, rant, cry, and drink. Why could Mama not love me? That’s when I saw the gun. I think the scene I saw, no one could un-see.
FICTION December 31, 2018, entered in John Lawless's Slap the Muse Contest This one got NA'd--not once, but twice! Can you imagine? This poem deserves to place because--well, because it's a masterpiece. This fact must be obvious to you, to anyone! :-) Date: May 16, 2019 Contest Title: The Applicable Not Applicable Contests Sponsor: Richard Lamoureaux

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Date: 1/3/2019 2:38:00 PM
oh my, it ends up very badly!! Indeed a scene that can never be unseen. This is a difficult challenge for me. I must put my thinking cap on as you aptly did.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 1/3/2019 6:53:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea! Janice
Date: 1/1/2019 7:56:00 AM
This is so sad Janice.. You expressed such sadness in a restricted form..
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 1/1/2019 2:34:00 PM
THANKS, S.O.! Janice
Date: 12/31/2018 3:16:00 PM
Sure hope this was fiction Janice, best wishes and Happy New Year...
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 12/31/2018 4:14:00 PM
Yes, it's fiction. Happy New Year. Janice
Date: 12/31/2018 3:13:00 PM
Wow - that is an eye-popper. Well penned, Janice.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 12/31/2018 4:15:00 PM
Thanks so much, Line! Janice

Book: Shattered Sighs