The Hymn of Freedom

The Hymn of Freedom
 
 
The butterfly could not formulate 
glass
on which it battered its flimsy wings
freedom lay beyond the pane
still cruelly beckoning 
with light and colour
the scent of flowers and open fields
 
How like a god I was 
as I sat and watched
the implacable glass 
tear its wings apart
and I heard a choir of voices singing to me
 
I sat and let the butterfly die
baked by the heat 
and its struggle to be free
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Williams Avatar
December 4, 2008 at 10:17 AM
... I just wonder how long it will be before the wondrous heart and beautiful spirit of mankind will be left... beating its wings on the implacable glass.. in every single life, through all these centuries, mothers, fathers children, born, died, love, hope, dreams.. and the unaccounted grandeur of everything that we are, left here, on this tiny planet, in this vast and magnificent galactic... when will we be deemed something more than just paltry ..... hey GOD.. I am asking YOU that ..!!!!!!!!!!
Joe Avatar
December 4, 2008 at 3:20 AM
This is an imaginative metaphor. The flow of the poem make it seem longer than it actually is; this is a good thing as it suggests that a lot is being said. The language is great: not to flowery or pretentious. And the structure of the stanza is great, the enjambment ties in well with the narration.
Torres Avatar
December 2, 2008 at 2:31 PM
Colin this is touching boy did I feel for that buterfly wanting it to have its freedom. You put me there gripping and touching. Freedom is a great thing to have. You have made me realize even more here.Loveyour truth's and imagination. Michael
Loving Iii Avatar
December 2, 2008 at 1:07 PM
wouldn't it be great if like in the twilight zone you could trade places with that butterfly. nice write. jhl
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