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The Huntsman's Plight

In darkened wood he takes a knee and weeps
The blood trail’s gone, and with it all that’s good
He knows not where the stag has gone to sleep
His children’s aching bellies want for food

The blood trail’s gone, and with it all that’s good
Dappled shadows hide the trail he seeks
His children’s aching bellies want for food
A stoic face belied by tear-washed streaks

Dappled shadows hide the trail he seeks
Until the sun reveals it at his feet 
A stoic face belied by tear-washed streaks
With hope restored that soon his brood will eat

Until the sun reveals it at his feet 
He knows not where the stag has gone to sleep
With hope restored that soon his brood will eat
In darkened wood, he takes a knee and weeps

6/6/2017

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Old Buck Date: 6/7/2017 6:29:00 PM Dean: That's intense. Well told. Thanks for sharing with all of us on the soup. Keep them coming. oldbuck Login to Reply Dean Wood Date: 6/8/2017 3:33:00 PM I am experimenting with this form. It has so much potential. It is fun to try new things. Glad you liked it. - Dean

Darren White Date: 6/7/2017 3:01:00 AM It is a wonderful form, Pantoum, just as Terzanelle and Villanelle. It's deceptively difficult, seems so easy. You need to draw it out on paper almost, to make it a flowing logical poem, especially that last stanza is notoriously difficult in that regard. Well done! Login to Reply Dean Wood Date: 6/7/2017 7:54:00 AM I know now what you mean Darren. It was harder than I thought it would be but half the fun of the "Soup" is trying new things and reading others' work. I appreciate your comments. You have a rare talent. -Dean

Dale Gregory Cozart Date: 6/6/2017 5:07:00 PM This is really good, Dean. I'm not brave enough to tackle this yet. Login to Reply Dean Wood Date: 6/8/2017 9:15:00 AM Thanks Dale. Give it a try, what's the worst that could happen.

White Wolf Date: 6/6/2017 3:22:00 PM You have done really well with this difficult form, Dean! Nice flow mate Login to Reply Dean Wood Date: 6/6/2017 4:11:00 PM Thanks Wolf! This is my first attempt with a Pantoum. I studied the form up front to see how it ticks. It really is a fun form to write in. I appreciate your comment. You are one of my FAV's, I have learned a lot from your work. - Dean