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The Huntsman's Plight

In darkened wood he takes a knee and weeps The blood trail’s gone, and with it all that’s good He knows not where the stag has gone to sleep His children’s aching bellies want for food The blood trail’s gone, and with it all that’s good Dappled shadows hide the trail he seeks His children’s aching bellies want for food A stoic face belied by tear-washed streaks Dappled shadows hide the trail he seeks Until the sun reveals it at his feet A stoic face belied by tear-washed streaks With hope restored that soon his brood will eat Until the sun reveals it at his feet He knows not where the stag has gone to sleep With hope restored that soon his brood will eat In darkened wood, he takes a knee and weeps 6/6/2017

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Date: 6/7/2017 6:29:00 PM
Dean: That's intense. Well told. Thanks for sharing with all of us on the soup. Keep them coming. oldbuck
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Dean Wood
Date: 6/8/2017 3:33:00 PM
I am experimenting with this form. It has so much potential. It is fun to try new things. Glad you liked it. - Dean
Date: 6/7/2017 3:01:00 AM
It is a wonderful form, Pantoum, just as Terzanelle and Villanelle. It's deceptively difficult, seems so easy. You need to draw it out on paper almost, to make it a flowing logical poem, especially that last stanza is notoriously difficult in that regard. Well done!
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Dean Wood
Date: 6/7/2017 7:54:00 AM
I know now what you mean Darren. It was harder than I thought it would be but half the fun of the "Soup" is trying new things and reading others' work. I appreciate your comments. You have a rare talent. -Dean
Date: 6/6/2017 5:07:00 PM
This is really good, Dean. I'm not brave enough to tackle this yet.
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Dean Wood
Date: 6/8/2017 9:15:00 AM
Thanks Dale. Give it a try, what's the worst that could happen.
Date: 6/6/2017 3:22:00 PM
You have done really well with this difficult form, Dean! Nice flow mate
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Date: 6/6/2017 4:11:00 PM
Thanks Wolf! This is my first attempt with a Pantoum. I studied the form up front to see how it ticks. It really is a fun form to write in. I appreciate your comment. You are one of my FAV's, I have learned a lot from your work. - Dean

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