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The Haunted House

Haunted places, haunted lives -- Who knows the terrors trapped inside? Out of gas and losing vigor, His footprints are defined in flashes of light. Spatters of mud ascend his jeans, Muck from wetlands in the vast bayou. He’s trekked a mile from his broken van As summer’s first storm closes in. When lightning illuminates the cloudy sky, Eaves of a coastal mansion are defined. Such refuge he now welcomes, While whipping tropical wind gusts gain force. How fortunate to discover a refuge That’s survived decades of neglect. But as he moves closer with hope and curiosity, Spanish moss creates goose bumps, tickling his neck. Approaching through the overgrown landscape Of an ornate mansion that beckons him in gloomy guise, He finds an open door and calls inside, Certain he’s heard ghostly voices within. With trepidation, he steps into the foyer, Where bloodcurdling wails grow louder. What price this haven, he ponders, When the door slams shut, locking him inside. Familiar faces gaze from outside windows with iron bars, Immobilizing him as his fear peaks. His last hopes of salvation are dashed when he realizes Whom these spirits’ faces represent. Four women lay dead inside his abandoned van And now they’ve captured him to seek revenge. A serial killer trapped by spirits of his victims Is justly doomed to the life of torment he created. * August 18, 2018 Sponsor- Dear Heart Contest- The Haunted House

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Date: 10/8/2018 11:56:00 PM
We can only hope for just retribution for the evil men do. I liked this story a lot. It reminds me that there are some very sick individuals who need some help before they are given power over others.
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Date: 9/23/2018 9:33:00 AM
Belated congratulations on this eerie poem,Carolyn! I love payback poems!
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Date: 9/16/2018 7:58:00 PM
I'm a little late, Carolyn, great imagery and story. Big congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve~`*
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Date: 9/12/2018 2:28:00 PM
Back to congrats!!! my friend...great win Carolyn...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 9/5/2018 11:14:00 AM
Carolyn, congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing write, you are a great storyteller, I was hooked from the first word, well done !
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/6/2018 8:58:00 AM
Thank you, Constance. As I said in my email to you, I thoroughly enjoyed writing about "The Haunted House." Our late Souper Daver Austin used to call me his "spooky friend." LOL
Date: 9/1/2018 3:40:00 PM
I wonder if serial killers are ever haunted by the ghosts of their victims? It would be deserving karma. I enjoyed your thrilling tale Carolyn. Great lines like " Spanish moss creates goose bumps, tickling his neck." Here in Hawaii we call it Pele's hair. Congratulations on your second placement! I hope ypur pain is less and you are on the road to recovery now my dear friend. Blessings, Connie xxoo
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/6/2018 9:07:00 AM
I like to believe there is some type of spiritual justice meted in our universe. I would have chose Anthony Perkins to direct any production based on this story. And, of course, it would have to be directed by Alfred Hitchcock.
Date: 9/1/2018 12:52:00 PM
A great ghost story you told, Carolyn. You had my attention from beginning to end. Congrats on your win! Charlie
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Date: 8/27/2018 11:00:00 PM
A chilling tale Carolyn! This should do great in the contest. Well written and kept my attention throughout! : )
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Date: 8/26/2018 12:47:00 PM
Scarry boys & girls...love your haunted house, Carolyn...love & haunts...^WW^
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Date: 8/25/2018 8:58:00 AM
My my, quite the tale. You had me from beginning to end.
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Date: 8/20/2018 4:36:00 PM
I very much enjoyed the buildup to a climax involving an unexpected but clever twist, Carolyn. ~ keeping you in my thoughts as you struggle with fate...Love & Hugs paul
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 8/23/2018 9:30:00 AM
I appreciate your comments, Paul, and keep the positive thoughts coming. Hugs, Carolyn
Date: 8/20/2018 1:00:00 PM
What a great twist at the end, Carolyn, I enjoyed reading this. Best of luck. John
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