The Graduate

The names of success spoken slowly, enunciated with near perfection. Begetters delighted while warriors of knowledge even prouder. Frame the object with that pride, etched in bold colors of quested victory. Intended to render focus where future awaits with her breath of betterment. Render the mortar board square, keeping the gown smooth as the silk it resembles. Shutterbugs will capture that smile of a thousand future memories. A feastful celebration shared in public display, consuming all thoughts of ineptness. Success is now official along with all cheers for you - the graduate. ...................................................... Written: 5/18/2016 Type: Prose Poetry Contest: Any Poem You Ever Penned Contest Sponsor: Broken Wings Placement: 10th Place

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Jan Allison

Date: 6/2/2016 3:07:00 AM

I will be attending my son's graduation later this year - your descriptive poem really brought the day to life for me:-) hugs Jan

Jesse Day
Date: 6/3/2016 9:02:00 AM

Ah! I finally found your comment - thanks! Again, congrats on your son's graduation - I know you're proud. I wrote this poem inspired by my students and my daughter graduating. Something to do while sitting through 7 hours of ceremony! BTW - I think I finally got that pesky typo - lol!

Funom Makama

Date: 5/30/2016 11:21:00 AM

Great write, beautiful lines. A well deserved 7

Jesse Day
Date: 5/30/2016 12:28:00 PM

Thank you for reading and your generosity in comment - Jesse

Lewis Nyaga

Date: 5/28/2016 3:13:00 AM

Jesse.. a well penned poem.. with the moments aptly captured and the mood nicely delivered//blessings

Jesse Day
Date: 5/28/2016 9:39:00 AM

Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts - Jesse

Gerald Dillenbeck

Date: 5/23/2016 11:07:00 AM

I enjoy this post-graduate piece. One of the few helpful hints I use most frequently in my redrafting process, is to look sceptically at every one of my uses of "the". There are several here I would have left out, making this piece flow more smoothly through my mind and always re-commencing heart. Thanks for your visit my way. I have enjoyed mine here.

Jesse Day
Date: 5/23/2016 3:06:00 PM

Thank you for the redrafting idea - very helpful - You hit the mark with the importance of flow. I write songs so I believe that I often get caught up in the rhythm more so than the flow. Again, thanks - Jesse